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A Black Square by Michal Bilski - Short, Drama - Young man,named DEAN, steals infamous Kazimir Malevich's painting "The Square" from the museum and thereby exposes secrets of modern art. 6 pages - pdf format
I read that english is not your first language... Best to have your scripts proof read by a first language english person.
Whilst you using a script software... your writing of format is wrong:
QUOTE: INT. MUSEUM SECURITY ROOM- NIGHT
JACK Oh shit, what the fuck? Jack hits his desk.
Dialog can't follow straight after a scene heading. Write as.... INT. MUSEUM SECURITY ROOM - NIGHT Jack hits his desk.
JACK Oh shit, what the fuck?
QUOTE: EXT. OUTSIDE OF THE MUSEUM - NIGHT
Scene heading must read BIG to SMALL ~ MAIN AREA to SUB AREA.... EXT. MUSEUM - OUTSIDE - DAY
Further to... For all in a shorts, you not going to what to break the readers flow with to much continual MAIN SCENE headings. use SUB SCENES (PS: Scenes are also known as slugs) In your script the entire story takes place in one location (MAIN SCENE) = MUSEUM
Go with.... INT. MUSEUM - NIGHT ENTRANCE Is a large blaa blaa
SECURITY ROOM Sits a fat man blaa blaa
SECOND FLOOR Tom makes it to the door. Opening it he enters into the...
STUDY... closing the door behind him. He sees a blaa blaa
QUOTE: NICOLE (C.O.) Around that corner you will witness ?? (C.O) Think you meant (V.O) Voice Over
QUOTE: JACK (O.S) (talks with sandwich in his mouth) - Parenthetical Ghrrr... Hmmm?
Parenthetical is used to express a characters emotion or tone or direction... amongst other. In this case, JACK is (O.S) so we not seeing the sandwich in any way - Leave it out.
JACK (Upset) Oh shit what the fuck man!
QUOTE: DEAN Are we sure we want to do this? (...)I don’t know man. Is it a good idea? (...)Of course I want this money. (...) Okay then. I’m waiting for light to blow out and I’m doing it. ?? Don't know what this is... But, its wrong!
ALL said - READ AS MANY SCRIPTS AS POSSIBLE. Its best the way to learn the trade.
Hope this has helped you.
All the best.
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