89 Days by Erica - Short, Sci Fi, Drama - In a post-apocalyptic world ravaged by mysterious explosions, a survivor, Victoria, records a desperate message, revealing her traumatic past and her struggle to survive, while awaiting the arrival of a legendary rescue squad. 5 pages - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

Hi Erica, are you around for feedback? I'm happy to give you some if you are.

Dear Erica,
of course this could be a misinformation FLASHBACK. Victoria has been rescued. But you have to write it.  Her scarred face put me in mind of Toby Frost's City of Knives. . .
All best --

This is rather powerful. I think you did a good job constructing a character and a setting.

There are issues with the formatting. I see that Libby has offered some help. I hope that you pursue it. Your format issues will hold you back. She gives better advice than I do.

Erica, here's a properly-formatted and slightly cleaned-up* version:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/15c3hX2BgPB6x9iWl9vbNkkwOHN6rs8tU/view?usp=drive_link

(* CONT'S, punctuation and other minor stuff. No changes to your action lines or dialogue.)

Thank you very much!

Quoted from LC Hi Erica, are you around for feedback? I'm happy to give you some if you are.

Hi, sure I would love to!

Quoted from Drongo Bum Erica, here's a properly-formatted and slightly cleaned-up* version: https://drive.google.com/file/d/15c3hX2BgPB6x9iWl9vbNkkwOHN6rs8tU/view?usp=drive_link (* CONT'S, punctuation and other minor stuff. No changes to your action lines or dialogue.)

Thank you very much!

Quoted from D.A.Banaszak This is rather powerful. I think you did a good job constructing a character and a setting. There are issues with the formatting. I see that Libby has offered some help. I hope that you pursue it. Your format issues will hold you back. She gives better advice than I do.

Thank you 😊