Ooh, very exciting. A hearty congrats to you!
Age - I completely agree with you, I didn't want to make Sylvia that old. But the limitations were actors of late teen/early 20's - I tried to make her seem younger with the unicorns and fairy lights - but now I am free from the limitations I will make her younger.
Friends - Very good suggestion. I still want her to be a loner, no "real" world friends - but they could be online friends who have betrayed her - then on top of that (as you say) strangers jump onto the insulting bandwagon and really grind down her mental health.
Time - Some great suggestions, thank you. Looks like I really need to put my creative hat on for this one - Somehow link the passage of time with the technology/social media aspect.
Realism - My initial goal was for the reader to think the characters were really there in the beginning - only finding out later that this interaction/conversation/bullying was all online. That was the 'twist' I was referring to - But this approach simply didn't work. So now I will go with making it obvious they aren't really there and their presence is more symbolic - online actions have real-world consequences.
The above will link into your inventive advice - blur the lines between the real world and online. This is going to use all of my creative power lol
The decline of Sylvia - I had a think about this one. And I thought I would have her start off already on rocky ground (self-harm scars for example), which would make her final act feel a little less rushed - I hope.
In preparation for this, I read a lot of news articles and stories about real-life teens taking their own lives due to online bullying and blackmail. It was thoroughly depressing, especially being a father. But yes, the bullying in those stories was systematic, relentless, and occurred over time - something I really need to let come through in this story. - I tried to hint at her feeling of isolation by calling for her mom, but the bullies voices are too strong and overpowering that she can't reach out - so I need to expand on that I think.
Teddy - Again, now that I have freedom of character age - I think I may turn him into an old man pretending to be a young teen. Starts off as young love - ends with it being an old man who has used her for sexual gratification.
Thanks for the links, will check them out - and for the title suggestion - The Disinhibition Effect sounds really good. My original one seems a bit clinical.
I can make this longer now - which I think it needs - And I have a LOT to work with here in the rewrite. But hey, screenwriting is all about the rewrite
Thank you so much LC - I really appreciate it - If you need anything from me, just let me know. Even if it's just a cuppa
EDIT: another thought just popped into my head from your technology point - The abuse she receives should intensify as the story goes on (and as the picture circulates online) leading to the climax of more messages than she can read - these will then PING all around her - notifications on her phone, laptop, tablet - completely bombarding and overwhelming. You're a genius.