Link to Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1k5LOCiWYRbYCRjnjVbfCnu453dfGFjLH/view?usp=sharing
I would really appreciate feedback on my short film called The Codex.  I am aware that there are SpAG errors - this is essentially my first draft.
1. Does my story have a clear beginning, middle and end?
2. Does Simon go through a key character arc?
3. Are the side characters interesting?
4. Is the story developed enough seeing as it is 17 pages (the most I am willing to go is 20 pages (ideally I'd like to keep it around the 15-17 min mark)
5. Any tips for dialogue, how can I improve what has already been written?
6. Any tips for writing fight scenes, I know their short but I wanted them to be fairly fast paced?
7. Any general comments you could give to help me improve?
Kind regards.

Hey Scrawlx,

You appear to have 10 WIP projects on this page alone.

My advice is to finish one of your scripts (with the feedback already given)  and post it to the site for overall feedback consensus. Imho, if you keep starting something new it's unlikely you'll ever properly complete a draft of anything. Writers are known to procrastinate, get bored, frustrated, move on to something else, so you're not alone there, but there's a great feeling to be had from finishing a first draft and then seeing if it works.

Edit:

I opened this script and it begins like this:


INT. SITTING ROOM - DAY
INT. SITTING ROOM - DAY
A man enters the sitting room:

No offence but that's three Sitting Rooms in your opening.
And I feel like I've read this script before?

Sitting Room where? In a house?
No need to repeat info that's already in an opening slug.

No need to write OUTSIDE in a slug that's already labelled EXT.

Your characters need us to feel for their plight, especially your protagonist.

Is this a feature length or Short?
Oh, and if you're aware of spelling and grammar errors, fix them before you post.
Your material will read more Pro and like you care what your posting.