First line of the script threw me for a loop, which set the tone for the rest of the story "Steve once again wakes up..." - did he wake up a first time? How would we know this?
I don't know, just really confusing... what's the point of your story? I don't feel like the scene was set to begin with, and kind of felt out of sorts from there as we jumped around to different places and times.
I'd maybe work on this one some more.