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OWC - Peacemaker (currently 2792 views) |
Don |
Posted: May 17th, 2010, 5:32pm |
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LocationVirginia Posts16449 Posts Per Day 1.94 |
Peacemaker by Anonymous - Short, Drama - A vegan and a carnivore find common ground. - pdf, format |
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c m hall |
Posted: May 17th, 2010, 6:00pm |
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Locationpeninsula of Jersey Posts422 Posts Per Day 0.08 |
'"Well then why even suggest pizza?" I guess we'll never know. |
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Cam17 |
Posted: May 17th, 2010, 6:06pm |
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LocationLos Angeles Posts153 Posts Per Day 0.03 |
A complete pisstake. Wouldn't mind it so much if it actually had a laugh or something in it somewhere. Nope. This reads like something that was conceived and written during a three minute commercial break. Ah well, at least it's under two pages. |
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grademan |
Posted: May 17th, 2010, 6:18pm |
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LocationWisconsin Posts872 Posts Per Day 0.16 |
One page of two people talking about pizza with a corny super at the end. Kinda cute but not very filling.
BTW, green peppers infect the whole pizza, |
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stevie |
Posted: May 17th, 2010, 6:35pm |
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LocationDown Under Posts3441 Posts Per Day 0.61 |
Short and sweet! Actually, this was a good concept and could've been ok if it was longer. |
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Dreamscale |
Posted: May 17th, 2010, 7:49pm |
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WOW! The old 1 page pisstake! Terrible. Not funny at all, and really not written poorly enough to be entertaining.
Lots of pissers this time around. Now I'm pretty sure ones I wasn't sure about must be pisstakes as well...they just can't all be this bad, can they? |
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greg |
Posted: May 17th, 2010, 7:52pm |
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LocationSan Diego, California Posts1680 Posts Per Day 0.24 |
Maybe if there was a non-partisan group whose goal was to unify meat eaters and vegans this could be the 1 minute video on their blog.
Otherwise this just comes off as something that was written two minutes before the deadline. |
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khamanna |
Posted: May 17th, 2010, 8:00pm |
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The punchline falls kind of flat for me. I know you intended it as a comedy but there's still has to be sufficient build up leading to your last line.
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michel |
Posted: May 18th, 2010, 2:31am |
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LocationFrance Posts1156 Posts Per Day 0.18 |
All you need is love.... da da da da da..... What else to say about this lazy one-pager? Michel |
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Trojan |
Posted: May 18th, 2010, 9:17am |
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LocationAustralia Posts393 Posts Per Day 0.07 |
Probably the worst of all the entries so far IMO. At least some of the other ones that didn't take it seriously were funny, this just wasn't. What was the point? |
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pwhitcroft |
Posted: May 18th, 2010, 5:48pm |
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The premise has got potential. You didn’t really take it any further than that. |
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Coding Herman |
Posted: May 19th, 2010, 7:56pm |
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LocationToronto, Canada Posts455 Posts Per Day 0.08 |
I don't get the joke here, or is there even supposed to be one? Sorry, another pointless script. |
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TheRichcraft |
Posted: May 19th, 2010, 11:58pm |
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A vegan smoking. I've probably seen it happen thousands of times in real life. But it's just weird that someone who respects the lives of animals can be so self-destructive with theirs.
Maybe that's the irony of this script. We humans are just creatures of habit in our wanting certain pizzas and cigarettes.
The script may have been funnier if the couple argued over filters or tar content. |
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Grandma Bear |
Posted: May 20th, 2010, 2:21pm |
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LocationThe Swamp... Posts7967 Posts Per Day 1.35 |
Well, at least it was just 1 page. I would've got mad if I had to read 15 pages. |
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Blakkwolfe |
Posted: May 20th, 2010, 4:00pm |
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LocationFlorida, USA Posts706 Posts Per Day 0.12 |
Green peppers infect the whole pizza, |
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