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Congratulations on selling the script Pia, especially in such quick time!
Not surprised it was picked up either. Ticks all the boxes (in the good way!) and like some others have commented, I didn't see the twist coming either.
I have finally received the money, so I'm going to ask Don to take this down.
My tip for actually getting a short script sold is to ask the filmmakers if they want exclusivity. Most of them actually do because most set out with the idea of taking the film to festivals, so the last thing they want is to possibly see another film there made from the same script. That actually happened a long time ago with one of my shorts and both filmmakers ended up mad at me...
After reading all the eulogies I thought i'd give this a read myself.
First of all I must congratulate you on selling this short, which i believe would be better if played out at length.
The "show don't tell" factor comes during the phone call...
I'd like to know more about Michael and Sara's relationship with him.
To be honest I thought it was a tad contrived and too pacy and I did see that Kind of resolve.
Sometimes these short thrillers still need a back story to give them some depth.
All that said I did enjoy the read and can see you have a special talent for drawing a picture.
Nice work and good luck with your writing.
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I can't argue with anything you said. This one got picked up by someone only twenty minutes after it was posted. Didn't get paid until today, but... The same filmmaker that snagged Ai Illusion also wanted it, so I never felt the need to go back and improve on the script. To be honest, I haven't read it since I typed FADE OUT:
The other person that also wanted it asked me to write something similar for her, but 15-20 pages and more characterizations. A bunch of other stuff too, but I struggled with that one and have yet to show it to her.
Anyway, thanks for the read and thoughts on it. I mainly posted in this thread to give my tip on how to get filmmakers to pay for shorts.
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