Ha! The problem (if it actually is one) is that I wanted to laugh at Monica quite suddenly losing her limbs. Hmm, yep there's an element of comedy there. Perhaps if the flesh had started to rot first? Jeepers, what am I saying?

Maybe the baby has some special immunity, I dunno, otherwise Eric's in for a nasty surprise, or God forbid the baby will have to fend for itself.

The opening is pretty spectacular.

I just had problems with the tone of this one overall.

And, why did Moni aim the gun at Eric?

I think it's fair to say any budgetary restraints went out the window on the first page, but I still liked what I read regardless.

Some nice little details throughout, although I would replace the WW3 line with something like "We are at war with China", as it's more accurate, and still a terrifying thought.

Good, solid writing throughout too.

Excellent work. Solid through and through. I love the opening image of the guy jogging with a gun. Lots of great descriptions. The death at the end is truly frightening.

Catastrophic disassembly is right. I was expecting something along the lines of Chinatown (Jake Gittes) but this sure isn't.

It works overall. It's a solid story, although it doesn't really have an ending. It seems like it's setting up something more. It would make a good proof of concept short. Bodies literally falling apart with little warning is damn scary, and it's set up well. Great job holding off on the real horrors of the nanovirus until the ending.

What doesn't work for me is the tone. The running gag of the virus's name is out of place here. It's too short to need an ease in tension. You'd be better off diving deeper into character instead, make us feel more for them. Budget-wise, this is pretty simple and cheap, except for the outdoor crowd scene. That's a considerable expense.

Great job, I quite like it.