i dont know about you guys but i'm in complete OWC reading OVERLOAD.

i knocked out a few... but my goodness there are so many...

i apologize now if i dont get to your script.. i will try. if i dont get to you - feel free to PM me for a read.  

i also apologize if my reviews seem vague at times.... most of you can write circles around me... so me telling you "what's what" doesnt seem fair

i can only give you my opinion of what i thought and some suggestions if i have any. but i assure you unless i state otherwise - your script was read cover to cover.

if you'd like more details - again, just PM me


cheers
chris

To me the last OWC theme was reflected in the phrase - "Over grown weeds" which seemed to crop in a handful for scripts when describing a run down property where ghosts may reside

This time, i have the feeling it is the 'loner" character that defines this one. No doubt other common ideas will emerge.

It seems when we think of the modern witch archetype, we think of either the standard old hag, or more common now, the "different" young teen. I don't think it's a problem, though. These become archetypal for a reason. People are comfortable with those images.

Quoted from leitskev It seems when we think of the modern witch archetype, we think of either the standard old hag, or more common now, the "different" young teen. I don't think it's a problem, though. These become archetypal for a reason. People are comfortable with those images.

Yeah true. Makes me think i should have written a script about teens trying to be witches when the  colourful one behind them in class is a real one who uses them to do her leg work. Now, what would happen after that...

Quoted from Reef Dreamer Yeah true. Makes me think i should have written a script about teens trying to be witches when the  colourful one behind them in class is a real one who uses them to do her leg work. Now, what would happen after that...

i was working on something similar.
a bullied teen who decides to take up the blackarts to get revenge..... and it backfires as her spells are far more powerful and devestating then she realized.

sounds too much like carrie. blugh...i know nothing about witches. so i passed.

plus i got much better ideas already in the works.

Don't feel bad, Pen. I knew nothing about witches, but I got this idea in my head and had to figure out how to "witch" it up a little bit with help from my brother and Brett. I'm still not satisfied with how it came out, but it's better than my last OWC was.

If I haven't read your OWC script yet, I apologize. I probably won't get to it until later in the week. I have a backload of feature scripts to read, and I have to get to them before I go crazy.  I feel like a kid in high school with term papers do.

Thought i would bump this back onto the portal as there maybe things to discuss. Indeed, discussion during the week is part of the benefit, for me.

Not sure i have said thanks to Don for this, so, well, thanks... Seriously, it is much appreciated.

I like this format, possibly as a once per year idea. If so, i wonder whether two weeks notice may help, on the other hand it may loose some focus.

I like this number of scripts, not as overwhelming as 40 scripts. The 10 page limit also helps.

I haven't written a feature before (other than my first ever writing a while ago and thats best forgotten) so this has been a decent challenge for me.

So far, there have been plenty of lessons to learn not just on my own, but also from others. Its been a good experience all round, even if i kick myself for silly errors and not listening to that niggle in my head that said, 'don't do that" - which others now tell me. I almost listened!

I didn't think i would take this further but...maybe. Once over i think we can benefit further by discussion on whether to do this, how and whats suggestions readers have for taking this further.

I just saw something in a thread about log lines and it made me wonder. Since we were supposed to enter the first 10 pages of a feature, should the log line be about the first ten pages or for the feature? I would think that would be a huge difference. kind of hard to make an intriguing log line if all you have to go by are those first ten.  

Pia, this has just been addressed on the Sinister Plans thread.

Interesting point...

Since that conversation about loglines, should really be here - rather than the Sinister Plans thread, thanks Pia for bringing it up.  

You don't need to have everything that happens in a script in a logline - but you should give an indication of how the story will unfold.   This means, protag, antag, goal, irony.  I should be able to play out my version of your script by reading your logline.

This doesn't mean that it has to be long, just that it has to have enough information.  You should definitely avoid the trap of making it so long that the information I need is buried in the words, like a leaf in a forest.

These loglines are especially important during these 10 pager challenges because there's no other way to tell where your "incomplete" story is headed.  

I wrote my logline based on the entire feature. That's why the challenge was... challenging. We had to have an idea of where we was going with the feature (whether we planned to finish it or not) in order to write the first 10 pages.

I guess some people wrote 10 page shorts, rather than the beginning of a feature though.

Cinemachado

Yes, and that is causing confusion. The challenge was first 10 pages, but it was quickly amended to allow for shorts. However, when we read an entry, we have no idea which is the case, a major problem that should be addressed if this type of challenge be done again.

I can say in my case, I had an idea pop into my head the Friday of the challenge, and I wrote a short based on that Sat. I just couldn't get the idea out of my head, and had to write it. Then Monday I began to write a first 10 based on the instructions. So I had to decided which to submit.

Yeah, that does create confusion in reading the scripts. I think if the challenge is to be done again. It should be one or the other. BEcause you also run into problems when someone's script ends with a band and someone else's ends with the beginning of a story. Obviously, it's not a competition, but obviously a 10 page short and the first 10 pages of a feature cannot be reviewed in the exact same way. They don't follow as dramatic of an arc.

Hello everyone!

I'm sending this through to let you all know that my desk top crashed. I'm still able to get on the site with my black berry.

I hope to get my desk top up and running asap.  it has all my scripts on it! On top of that I'm moving  out of my house.

In the mean time I'll read as many I can when possible. Hope to be up and running soon.