Marcela,

Thanks for the kind words, and to all who semi-enjoyed this. I never knew that axe-murderers had no place in rom coms! Go figure. It was fun anyway.

My main gripe about the comments came from Jeff, who complained on - I think it was page 5, that there were typos and stuff. If he’d noticed, my protagonist was slurring his speech, causing him to mispronounce some words. So yes, they were spelled wrong but only to illustrate how he was saying them. Otherwise, I’m pretty sure this was typo free.

But a great challenge anyways. Thanks Don and Pia! And congrats to all who entered.

Steve

Quoted from SAC Marcela, I never knew that axe-murderers had no place in rom coms! Go figure. It was fun anyway. Steve

Hi Steve,

I really enjoyed your script until the end and truthfully, it would have been in my top three.

It was only the killing at the end that came out of nowhere and took it out of the running.

I did the same with a short story years ago. Well, kind of the same.

I had an opening that didn't fit. I actually sensed it, but not enough so.

If I would have listened to my inner guidance, I would have trashed it
and wound up winning.

Nevertheless, I learned from that. The judges liked it enough to respond to
me with an individualized letter; so that was a good consolation prize.

Still, I remembered your script as the Tuna Script and whenever one
finds something memorable, I think that the writer is definitely on
the right track!!!

Thanks for giving some laughs in this!!!  

Sandra

Quoted from Sandra Elstree. Hi Steve, I really enjoyed your script until the end and truthfully, it would have been in my top three. It was only the killing at the end that came out of nowhere and took it out of the running. I did the same with a short story years ago. Well, kind of the same. I had an opening that didn't fit. I actually sensed it, but not enough so. If I would have listened to my inner guidance, I would have trashed it and wound up winning. Nevertheless, I learned from that. The judges liked it enough to respond to me with an individualized letter; so that was a good consolation prize. Still, I remembered your script as the Tuna Script and whenever one finds something memorable, I think that the writer is definitely on the right track!!! Thanks for giving some laughs in this!!!   Sandra

I’m happy you found it memorable, Sandra. Fact is, that ending did not come out of nowhere. I knew exactly where it was going the minute I started writing. When comedy is concerned I always aim for over the top and I guess this was no different.

Couple that with the fact I’m currently on vacation at Disney World and you can see where my motivation came from!!

Steven, I reread your script.  Yes, it was the dialogue, but I still can't say I liked it, or the lead in line that he's slurring his words or whatever.

You're correct, bro.  It was a pretty damn clean script and I give you credit for that.

Personally, I didn't like where it went or even how it got there. but I apologize for my comments about the writing.  I guess at first read, I didn't quite understand.

For me, the tuna stuff didn't work, nor did the texts she read, as if she read literally 1 more, she would have understood.

Anyways, it was memorable and that's always a good thang!  

Exactly, Jeff. Or not exactly. Memorable is good. Your script was memorable! But with my script, well, the people have spoken and not in a good way. I realize that and I’m not defending my story. It’s not that good. I know that. And that’s cool. I dunno what I’m saying really. Last few months have been really strange for me.

You'll be fine, Steven Clark, your talent is intact.

Quoted from Clark Kent But with my script, well, the people have spoken and not in a good way. I realize that and I’m not defending my story. It’s not that good. I know that. And that’s cool. I dunno what I’m saying really. Last few months have been really strange for me.

Time for another intervention