Well, the format was correct. There was a picnic...and a secret...and...uhh...

Quoted from Dreamscale Pathetic!  Embarrassing!  Really a total terd.  Another crap entry that didn't take anything seriously.  Not remotely funny.  This kind of shit shouldn't even be allowed to be posted. What a waste!

Will I get banned for agreeing with Dreamscale? Because I can't believe I just spent some free time reading this crap.

This made me laugh. Really was funny, the sort of stuff that could appear on a British sketch show.

I think it meets the criteria of the challenge, just.

Obviously this wasn't meant to be taken seriously and was just a bit of a laugh, no harm with doing that.

Definitely written by someone from Britain. I laughed, but was pi**ed off at the same time that I just wasted several minutes of my time on it.

I get the feeling that this was produced in about five minutes, with no real thought put into it.

Meeting the competition criteria: this is not a drama. It just isn't. It's not even a comedy for me. However, since you have a family, a picnic, and a secret, I have to give you SOME points - 6/10
Characters: the only one with anything about them is Charlie. However, the other family members were creepy, I'll give you that. But as for actual characterisation? Not a great deal - 3/10
Dialogue: I didn't laugh at the punchline. In fact, my reaction was a Dr. Evil-style 'Riiight...'. Since the rest of the script is a build-up to this punchline, and the punchline didn't work for me, I can't really say ANY of it worked for me - 3/10
Story: none. Whatsoever. Also, I find it highly unlikely that the rest of the family would catch HIV from eating jizzed-on potato salad - 2/10
Writing/format: you have typos (in a two page script!), you're missing in and out transitions, but the format is generally okay - 5/10

TOTAL: 19/50

Yeah.....







....no (x 20).

L.M.F.A.O

That's all this entry deserves.

Quoted from Dreamscale Pathetic!  Embarrassing!  Really a total terd.

It is spelled Turd.

I have to admit I did laugh, loudly when I got to the end. I feel a little embarrassed admitting this.

Unlike others I have no problem with somebody using the OWC to throw something out there that is meant to shock, or make people laugh. This is a piece of crap, there is no denying that. But it is a funny piece of crap and hopefully the writer got it out of his system and said what he wanted to say.

Like Cornetto my first thought was that the OWC, or even the SS message board had just been jizzed on. Maybe that was the case, will be interesting to see who the writer is.

Well done, whoever you are. Hope it was worth the effort.

I wrote a OWC script once with the intention of having people hate it.  I did.  That was my goal.

It was a very short, disgusting, anonymous script -- and I deliberately set out to have post after post telling my how wretched it was.  Brea ripped my little script to shreds, much to my delight.

I suspect that was the author's intent here, too.  And I was quite surprised when my little script found a few fans -- as this one has.

I did not like this one much.  But I would hold off on roasting the author until I know who it is.  And I have a few suspects.  My guess is somebody is yanking your chain.  

Short and to the point. Followed the OWC assignment. You might not win an Oscar for this one, but it wasn't really the worst I've read either.

You get sort of a low grade for effort, but score high on following the assignment.

Cheers.  

Hey Bert, I remember yours. It was someone's candy treat/surprise for Halloween.  

I'm pretty much speechless over this...but as most of you know I'll be finding some words to share my thoughts.

Talking about NOT Taking the OWC seriously...this is a perfect example.  I thought "Memories" was bad, but after reading this..."Memories" developed some redeeming qualities!    

Numerous basic writing mistakes in the first 3 paragraphs...crude and juvenile...and a waste of page.

Shelton says it makes him not want to write ever again...on the contrary my good friend Shelton...KEEP WRITING...someone should!

Morgan

Yeah,  I thought the potato salad had a distinct mayo overload.
No doubt an Intentional Bad Squirt day for one writer.

Who would dare write this without a condom?

All right. I'll acknowledge that I read it, but that's about it. That wasn't even a joke. No build up at all.

It feels like a joke told by a sixth grader who just found out what jizz is. He tells his 6th grade friends this joke and they all laughs while the teachers roll their eyes and consider how stupid they'll think it is when they grow up.

Another skit more suited to the short section.  This was okay.  Didn't meet the challenge but I guess this is a regular of SS who just wanted to screw with some peoples heads.