SimplyScripts Discussion Board
Blog Home - Produced Movie Script Library - TV Scripts - Unproduced Scripts - Contact - Site Map
ScriptSearch
Welcome, Guest.
It is January 22nd, 2022, 10:00am
Please login or register.
Was Portal Recent Posts Home Help Calendar Search Register Login
Please do read the guidelines that govern behavior on the discussion board. It will make for a much more pleasant experience for everyone. A word about SimplyScripts and Censorship


Produced Script Database (Updated!)


The January Project!
If you want access to the January Project, click here

Short Script of the Day | Featured Script of the Month | Featured Short Scripts Available for Production
Submit Your Script

How do I get my film's link and banner here?
All screenplays on the simplyscripts.com and simplyscripts.net domain are copyrighted to their respective authors. All rights reserved. This screenplaymay not be used or reproduced for any purpose including educational purposes without the expressed written permission of the author.
Forum Login
Username: Create a new Account
Password:     Forgot Password

SimplyScripts Screenwriting Discussion Board    Screenwriting Discussion    The 2019 Writers' Tournament  ›  Sanctuary - WT4 - In Pre-Production Moderators: Mr. Blonde
Users Browsing Forum
No Members and 1 Guests

 Pages: « 1, 2 : All
Recommend Print
  Author    Sanctuary - WT4 - In Pre-Production  (currently 1487 views)
PKCardinal
Posted: July 8th, 2019, 11:58am Report to Moderator
January Project Group



Location
Kansas
Posts
1112
Posts Per Day
0.75

Quoted from FrankM
. That's especially impressive since you don't seem to know anything about baseball.
.


Oh, you're killing me! (I'm just goofing here...)

Been a HUGE baseball fan my whole life. Spent over a decade in sports radio hosting talk shows -- primarily about baseball and football.

Of course... now that I think about it... I did regularly get people telling me I had no idea what I was talking about... so, carry on.

(I pictured the card as a rare insert... akin to a signed Ken Griffey, Jr. rookie card... one that everyone knows is going to go through the roof.)

Seriously, though. Thanks for the comments.



My 2 big decisions in writing this were 1. flashback? 2. how to handle the names

I knew I'd get comments no matter which direction I took it.

I'm glad I handled the flashbacks the way I did. It's exactly how you'd see it on screen... with no indication we're in different times.

I originally didn't change the names on the last page... and I didn't call out the transition between the times. I wish I would have kept it that way. But, I could just hear someone saying "but, they're different actors, so we need to know that for production purposes." to which, I'd reply "I'll change it for the shooting script."

I went back and forth... finally decided to change them. I'll be changing it back.


PaulKWrites.com

60 Feet Under - Low budget, contained thriller/Feature
The Hand of God - Low budget, semi-contained thriller/Feature
Wait Till Next Year - Disney-style family sports comedy/Feature

Many shorts available for production: comedy, thriller, drama, light horror
Logged Offline
Private Message Reply: 15 - 23
PKCardinal
Posted: July 8th, 2019, 12:00pm Report to Moderator
January Project Group



Location
Kansas
Posts
1112
Posts Per Day
0.75

Quoted from Dustin


Code

GUNMAN
No. Take me to the church.



This is a moment... milk it.

GUNMAN
No.

Their eyes meet in the rearview mirror.

GUNMAN
The church.




I love this note. Thanks!


PaulKWrites.com

60 Feet Under - Low budget, contained thriller/Feature
The Hand of God - Low budget, semi-contained thriller/Feature
Wait Till Next Year - Disney-style family sports comedy/Feature

Many shorts available for production: comedy, thriller, drama, light horror
Logged Offline
Private Message Reply: 16 - 23
PKCardinal
Posted: July 8th, 2019, 12:04pm Report to Moderator
January Project Group



Location
Kansas
Posts
1112
Posts Per Day
0.75
Oh yeah, last thought... regarding the boys' dialogue.

I picture these boys as old beyond their years, due to their very rough upbringing. So, they use language that makes them feel bigger and tougher.

Okay... I've spammed my own script thread enough.

Again, thanks to all for the notes and comments. I'll be rewriting this with many of the suggested changes.


PaulKWrites.com

60 Feet Under - Low budget, contained thriller/Feature
The Hand of God - Low budget, semi-contained thriller/Feature
Wait Till Next Year - Disney-style family sports comedy/Feature

Many shorts available for production: comedy, thriller, drama, light horror
Logged Offline
Private Message Reply: 17 - 23
Don
Posted: March 2nd, 2020, 7:52pm Report to Moderator
Administrator
Administrator


So, what are you writing?

Location
Virginia
Posts
15126
Posts Per Day
1.97
In Preproduction


Visit SimplyScripts.com for what is new on the site.

-------------
You will miss 100% of the shots you don't take.
- Wayne Gretzky
Logged
Site Private Message Reply: 18 - 23
Warren
Posted: March 2nd, 2020, 7:56pm Report to Moderator
Of The Ancients


A man who has taught his mind to misbehave

Location
Sydney, Australia
Posts
3566
Posts Per Day
1.73
Congrats, Paul. You're on a roll!


Logged
Private Message Reply: 19 - 23
PKCardinal
Posted: March 2nd, 2020, 8:41pm Report to Moderator
January Project Group



Location
Kansas
Posts
1112
Posts Per Day
0.75

Quoted from Warren
Congrats, Paul. You're on a roll!


Thanks, Warren! Absolutely loving the producer and director on this project. Rewrites have been awesome. Casting has begun.

I can't wait to see what they do with it.


PaulKWrites.com

60 Feet Under - Low budget, contained thriller/Feature
The Hand of God - Low budget, semi-contained thriller/Feature
Wait Till Next Year - Disney-style family sports comedy/Feature

Many shorts available for production: comedy, thriller, drama, light horror
Logged Offline
Private Message Reply: 20 - 23
Warren
Posted: March 2nd, 2020, 9:03pm Report to Moderator
Of The Ancients


A man who has taught his mind to misbehave

Location
Sydney, Australia
Posts
3566
Posts Per Day
1.73

Quoted from PKCardinal


Thanks, Warren! Absolutely loving the producer and director on this project. Rewrites have been awesome. Casting has begun.

I can't wait to see what they do with it.


Sounds like you got a winner, they are unfortunately few and far between.


Logged
Private Message Reply: 21 - 23
Dustin
Posted: March 3rd, 2020, 2:54am Report to Moderator
Of The Ancients


Action speaks louder...

Posts
5128
Posts Per Day
1.65
Good luck.


Logged
Private Message Reply: 22 - 23
MarkItZero
Posted: March 3rd, 2020, 4:27am Report to Moderator
Old Timer



Posts
1005
Posts Per Day
0.48
Congrats! Hope it turns out great.


That rug really tied the room together.
Logged
Private Message Reply: 23 - 23
 Pages: « 1, 2 : All
Recommend Print

Locked Board Board Index    The 2019 Writers' Tournament   [ previous | next ] Switch to:
Was Portal Recent Posts Home Help Calendar Search Register Login

Forum Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post polls
You may not post attachments
HTML is on
Blah Code is on
Smilies are on


Powered by E-Blah Platinum 9.71B © 2001-2006