Thanks for the votes and comments. I decided before I submitted this that I needed a longer version to do it justice and I will write it this week, but here is the backstory.

In the not-to-distant future, most of the life on the planet has become extinct because of REASONS.
Artificial Intelligence and androids are decent but not advanced enough to fix everything, most are running on auto. They see humans as the first generation of androids because they see everything like that. They, therefore, have no idea how to ‘build’ or repair the few humans left.

One of the humans last invention was a device which was grafted into the flesh. With a mixture of drugs and tech it created an augmented reality for the user and made life seem far better in every conceivable way.

Evie and Peter are amoung the last such humans. They’ve had the ankle monitor on since birth and have been raised by androids. They, therefore, think Earth is rich, booming and they are androids like everyone else.  

Then the events of the script occur, and they realise they are different, as is the planet. They face a choice - put new devices on and carry on oblivious or choose to be together and face the grim reality of life.

They choose their own blood and build a life themselves, figuring out how to ‘build’ a human of their own along the way. And live happily ever after!

Cheers,
Mark

Quoted from MarkRenshaw Thanks for the votes and comments. I decided before I submitted this that I needed a longer version to do it justice and I will write it this week, but here is the backstory. In the not-to-distant future, most of the life on the planet has become extinct because of REASONS. Artificial Intelligence and androids are decent but not advanced enough to fix everything, most are running on auto. They see humans as the first generation of androids because they see everything like that. They, therefore, have no idea how to ‘build’ or repair the few humans left. One of the humans last invention was a device which was grafted into the flesh. With a mixture of drugs and tech it created an augmented reality for the user and made life seem far better in every conceivable way. Evie and Peter are amoung the last such humans. They’ve had the ankle monitor on since birth and have been raised by androids. They, therefore, think Earth is rich, booming and they are androids like everyone else.   Then the events of the script occur, and they realise they are different, as is the planet. They face a choice - put new devices on and carry on oblivious or choose to be together and face the grim reality of life. They choose their own blood and build a life themselves, figuring out how to ‘build’ a human of their own along the way. And live happily ever after! Cheers, Mark

That's pretty much what I thought. And, when you lay it out like that... it's just brilliant. Cool world. Don't forget to share the longer version when it's ready.

Very cool, Mark. This was my highest scorer of the week.

AJR

New draft is up if anyone is interested.  

It is 7 pages now and is told from Evie's point of view which feels right as it seemed to be her story. The main change is no more blacking out, which I used as a convenient way to get them to the clinic faster. Now they have a bit of time to ponder what is going on when the ankle units are destroyed and have the opportunity to bond a bit more. I think this makes it  more likely that they will choose to be together in a broken world rather than apart in a perfect one.

Well, I loved this the first time, Mark. Terrific world you created with lots of little touches throughout that you've obviously finessed in this draft. Terrific humour too - funny when she swears and can't work out the changes in herself. The only thing I found a bit jarring was Evie calling Peter, dude.

Good luck with this. In the right hands it'd make a terrific short film.

Kinda sci-fish. But a nice read.

Good luck.