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Metal Gear Solid would be awesome!! The could easily be adpated into a movie, with allof those cinema's the games have.

However, I was thinking about you adapting Resident Evil 4. That would be interesting beacuse the story is kinda corny. However, you could intersect Leon and Ada's story together, and add additional scenes revolving Luis backstory. The dialouge from the game needs some serious rewritting to make it more serious. Since the game basically take place in about a full day, it will be interesting what chapters from the game you would flesh out and show. Also, I was thinking about Ashley. I would make her a little older. Also, it would be better to base it off of the PS2 VERSION of the game which has expanded story and levels for Ada.
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Guy, sorry i didn't have this review posted sooner. But better late than never, right?

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You have a very good opening and wasted no time at all at getting straight into the story. Straight away it is the fall of the tower by Sparda and straight after that we meet Dante and Vergil as adults in the middle of a fierce swordfight. That is a good introduction to their characters.

After the opening the pace never slowed down at all during this script, it kept me reading. So good job there.

Your action descriptions are very good, you always make clear what is going on. There were some really good action scenes throughout this script. My favourites have to be when Dante faces off against Lucifers four children ontop of the tower, and the  battle between Chaos and Vergil which leads into the final battle between Chaos and Dante.

I was shocked when Vergil betrayed Dante and went after the power of Sparda out of greed. I honestly expected the two brothers to fight side by side until the end, good job with this because i really like when surprises are added into movies. Its something to talk about when the movie ends.

I liked how you ended this. It is almost like a cliffhanger setting up a sequel for Dante to deal with Lucifer. Are you going to be writing a sequel at any time because i for one would definitely read it as i found this script enjoyable and interesting.

There wasn't much wrong with this script, but i spotted a few typos which follow... Page 5 "Dante manages to stab Dante" it should be Vergil. Page 96 you have "stars" instead of "starts". Page 102 you have "staring" instead of "starting" and Page 105 you write " as soon as the reach the ground" i think "the" should be replaced with "they". I'm not trying to nit pick, i'm just tying to help you help by pointing these out so you can go back and fix them at some point.
Your format is fine, the only thing i will say about it is, lose the Cut To's. I too was guilty of using these until someone pointed out they are not needed as the next slugline identifys a new scene on it's own. Also, you need to capitalise the introduction of Athena.

Chaos tells Vergil that he killed his mother, but a little later he seems to only figure it out with Dante when Hades tells them the story in the flashback. I think you should have Vergil tell Dante that Chaos claims to be the one who killed their mother and then have Hades confirming this by having Hades tell the story through the flashbacks, because i really don't think that Vergil is going to forget that. So mayabe when Dante blames Vergil for the death of their mother, Vergil comes out and says it he is not responsible and Chaos is.

Overall you a good entertaining and intersting stroy. I have been impressed with your writting. Keep it up and good luck with future writting.

All the best.

Robert



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guyjackson
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Quoted from Bates
Guy, sorry i didn't have this review posted sooner. But better late than never, right?

Spoilers!!!






You have a very good opening and wasted no time at all at getting straight into the story. Straight away it is the fall of the tower by Sparda and straight after that we meet Dante and Vergil as adults in the middle of a fierce swordfight. That is a good introduction to their characters.

After the opening the pace never slowed down at all during this script, it kept me reading. So good job there.

Your action descriptions are very good, you always make clear what is going on. There were some really good action scenes throughout this script. My favourites have to be when Dante faces off against Lucifers four children ontop of the tower, and the  battle between Chaos and Vergil which leads into the final battle between Chaos and Dante.

I was shocked when Vergil betrayed Dante and went after the power of Sparda out of greed. I honestly expected the two brothers to fight side by side until the end, good job with this because i really like when surprises are added into movies. Its something to talk about when the movie ends.

I liked how you ended this. It is almost like a cliffhanger setting up a sequel for Dante to deal with Lucifer. Are you going to be writing a sequel at any time because i for one would definitely read it as i found this script enjoyable and interesting.

There wasn't much wrong with this script, but i spotted a few typos which follow... Page 5 "Dante manages to stab Dante" it should be Vergil. Page 96 you have "stars" instead of "starts". Page 102 you have "staring" instead of "starting" and Page 105 you write " as soon as the reach the ground" i think "the" should be replaced with "they". I'm not trying to nit pick, i'm just tying to help you help by pointing these out so you can go back and fix them at some point.
Your format is fine, the only thing i will say about it is, lose the Cut To's. I too was guilty of using these until someone pointed out they are not needed as the next slugline identifys a new scene on it's own. Also, you need to capitalise the introduction of Athena.

Chaos tells Vergil that he killed his mother, but a little later he seems to only figure it out with Dante when Hades tells them the story in the flashback. I think you should have Vergil tell Dante that Chaos claims to be the one who killed their mother and then have Hades confirming this by having Hades tell the story through the flashbacks, because i really don't think that Vergil is going to forget that. So mayabe when Dante blames Vergil for the death of their mother, Vergil comes out and says it he is not responsible and Chaos is.

Overall you a good entertaining and intersting stroy. I have been impressed with your writting. Keep it up and good luck with future writting.

All the best.

Robert



Thanks for reading, Robert.  It looks like you enjoyed reading the screenplay and I am happy you did.  You mentioned my action sequences and I take a lot of pride in them.  That's something that I really work on and take very seriously.  I think the more you can display in words, the better the actual live action sequences will be.  The fact that you were able to recreate the scenes in your mind with clarity shows I did my job.  The ending was definately a cliffhanger, and I am most certainly going to write a sequel to this.  Devil May Cry is meant to be a multipart story and I will make it that way.

Thanks for pointing out those typos.  I don't know what the hell I was thinking, but I overlooked some careless mistakes, but I thank you for highlighting them.

Once again, thanks for the read and the review.  Your comments are very helpful and I will use them to my advantage.

    

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Hi there, So I readed your script, and yet me say great job well done. I'm a big fan of Devil May Cry the game, So when I read this script is almost the sequel to part 3, that what I believe.
So great job, I enjoyed it.
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Quoted from Lee
Hi there, So I readed your script, and yet me say great job well done. I'm a big fan of Devil May Cry the game, So when I read this script is almost the sequel to part 3, that what I believe.
So great job, I enjoyed it.


Well first things first, welcome to Simply Scripts, Lee.  I see you are new around here.  Second thank you for reading my script.  I am glad you enjoyed it.  When I write video game adaptations my main  priority is for the gamers that read it to enjoy it.  After all they are the biggest fans of the subject and will either love you or hate you based on the adaptation.  I am a big fan of Devil May Cry too so I really wanted to respect the material but try and spin my own story onto it.  I'm sure you can see that I used the tower from DMC3 as well as Dante and Vergil's weapons.  Athena was a spin off of Lady but not fully.  I'm hoping to maybe introduce Lady or perhaps Trish in the sequel I have in the works.

Anyway I commend you for reading a script on this site and commenting on it.  You are well on your way to becoming a respected member here on SS.  

Thanks again and hopefuly if you are a writer I will be able to take a look at your work in the near future.

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Nver heard of the Devil May Cry game. I'm a more of an Oddworld fan! Love that series of game.


This script would work great as an anime. Some crazy stuff going on here.

This script is well written, but the action scenes got just a little bit too monotonous.
It would look fantastic on screen but to read it just got a little boring.

The descriptive writing of the battles and action right down to the minute detail really dragged down the script and brought the story to a halt.

Is it really necessary to describe every detail of thrust and parry? The script is so dense with action that there is little room for plot.

This is the one area where this script suffers. There is not enough plot structure and drama. I would have like to seen more conflict and rage between the two brothers or had Chaos use the feud between two brothers to seduce one bro and have him destroy the other. Anything other than a string of big action fights.

Scenes like the test with the whirling blades and the travelling in the cart down the tunnel to hell /underworld did nothing to advance the story and would be better off cut. As some one above said, you need to cut back some of the stuff you have in this script, but I feel not to shorten the length of the script but to make room so you can insert more story and plot.

A good effort but with a little more story and a little less fighting and this could have been sweet.


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Thanks for reading Tonka.  You know I actually read over this a couple days ago and I wholeheartedly agree with you about the fight scenes.  I think my logic when I was writing was that the game is literally a non-stop third-person action fighting game.  So I wanted to keep that feel as close as possible with the fight scenes.  I think I have like seven fight scenes in total in this script and I think it's just a couple too many.  I definately sacrificed storyline for the action and it hurt the script.

My main goal with this was to see how I could transfer the game to screenplay format and I think I accompished some of what I wanted to do, but not all.  I actually have a sequel in the works for this and I really want to get a coherent story that can compliment maybe four or five good fight scenes that have actual impact on the storyline.  So thank you for you imput I really appreciate it.

Well I'll thank you again for reading.  I am grateful for you review.  Especially considering I wrote this about five months ago.  So the fact that people still are interested is great.  
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hey guy, jaybronx here. i'm currently reading your devil may cry script (I'm also reading your heavenly sword script as well) i should post a review for both soon.
I have a two part question. One: if you could check out my script, Merciless. And two, are you creating anymore video game adaptions?  
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hey guy, jaybronx here. i'm currently reading your devil may cry script (I'm also reading your heavenly sword script as well) i should post a review for both soon.
I have a two part question. One: if you could check out my script, Merciless. And two, are you creating anymore video game adaptions?  


Of course, I'll check out your screennplay and give you some feedback as soon as I can.  I hope you enjoy both of those screenplays, I had a lot of fun writing them.

As for more video game adaptations, I most certainly will be writing more.  They are my favorite to write.  As a matter of fact I have a couple up my sleeve right now that I'm formulating.  So you'll see some more around.

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