Writing style:
Good.

Dialogue:
It was good, but just good. I always hope for lines to be more enjoyable and fun.

Character:
Believable. Tyler was a bit too passive. He only reacted, never acted. Jen was amazing. I loved how her motivations and feelings were as clear as daylight.

Story:
I liked the concept. I wished for a better revenge. The murder felt abrupt. If you created a scene were a heated argument with Heather turned into a murder, that would have played better on screen. It would also been better if Millie tried to tell about the murder in different ways and failing before she ate the finger. This way her success would have had a better impact. You could have also made Jen attempts slow poisoning on Millie so there will be more at stakes when Millie try to warn Tyler. Ok I'm gonna shut up now.

Overall:
It was a good story, but the fun parts passed by in a haste. I didn't get to fully enjoy them, but you're certainly talented.

Well I was right with the 'seven year bitch' aka 'dog-walker' or vice versa. Have no idea why I said 'humans lick too' but least I was on the right track overall.

I was a little light on with my remarks - only commented on a few, but just wanted to say Marnie, I got the plot as you intended and really enjoyed this one - perhaps your ending could be made a little clearer but the audience thinking twice about what's gone down is not a bad thing imh. This would have had a 'recommend' from me if I'd been in it and could vote.

I enjoyed this, assuredly written with a wicked sense of humour.

I'm surprised people are so against Jen since its revealed Tyler is cheating on her. Plus, he seems to get a kick out of making her jealous in his favouritism towards Millie...and upon the infidelity reveal you understand why. He's trying to push her away indirectly instead of being honest and ending the relationship. What a prick. He's a much more dis-likable character in my opinion. I felt for Jen and her frustration.

Its that old film cliche of having a character who may verbally and physically abuse a person, perhaps even kill someone unjustly and its conceivable the audience can still sympathize/empathize/root for them...but have them throw a dirty look at an animal, and you've lost any good will with no way back.

Jen killing Heather and feeding her to Millie (which I gleaned from the ending, thought it was pretty clear in fact, don't get all the confusion about it...of course, I could be wrong too) seemed rather extreme but I went with it in the spirit of the story and the criteria the script is working within.

However, my biggest issue was the implication in the end that Jen had successfully framed Tyler for Heather's murder. That its some diabolical master plan she's pulled off with her getting away scot-free. I mean, it is left open ended to a large degree with the cops searching the backyard but where was Jen in the last scene? Did she bail after saying that she had to "go out"? Tyler is understandably the police's prime suspect right now but you'd assume once the investigation gets under way that the focus would quickly shift to Jen and her obvious motivation, means and opportunity.