The Red Chair by John Stone - Series, Drama - A quirky chat show host drowns on dry land after he's exposed as subversive. 7 pages - pdf format

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A delightful addition to the Drown on Dry Land series. While it's fine as it is, I wonder if there is an opportunity for a twist.

While it's fairly obvious that the cabby recognizes who is sharing affection in his cab. He may not know the partner.

Perhaps, unbeknownst to the cabby, the receiver of the taxi love act could be a judge, a politician or maybe even a crime lord who could do the cabby some real harm. This would be revealed with the showing of the video. Jokes would be made when it is explained to the cabby the trouble he is in.

It is then that the cabby gets booted out of the chair.

Just a thought.

With no disguising of even the Red Chair, I pretty much pictured a certain very popular and well known TV Host the whole way but with an additional obnoxious trait given the character's name is Grayson Trump.  

Cheers Michael and Libby.

Michael I like your comments and agree with you wholeheartedly. It could even be Sylvester Stallone - Ha!  That would be funny, wouldn't it?

It's one of those shorts that I may come back to in the future to expand and I will use your comments as a guide so thanks for that.

Libby you hit the button and the klaxon sounded - I have already been asked if this script can be used in a conducted survey to see if audiences can differentiate between AI generated screenplays and human written screenplays. Thanks.

Funny story thanks for the read.

I just think Stallone and maybe Mirren might find it quite funny. Grant could probably sympathise, not sure that Streisand would be too impressed.

Just the thought of that clip playing on the actual show in question gives me a chuckle.

P.S. 'bts' can do one.

Cheers

Thanks for that Colin.

Ha!

I don't think Stallone would be laughing if he'd been the receiver in the back of the cab.


Cheers.