Thanks! The film should be available for public viewing by Friday.

David,

The trailer looks great.  I didn't realize you were the same guy who produced Splitsville, otherwise I would have commented earlier.  Can't wait to see the finished film. Good job.

Cam

Hello David,

Not sure if this is the brand new script so here goes.

It's an interesting idea.  Not sure if I've got the full picture as pages 4,5 & 6 were blank.

If you download Celtx as previously mentioned, it'll fix your slugs, colours and margins.

As much as you should name the patient, which isn't a big deal.  I do however think you should name The Man In A Lab Coat to plain old Doctor, or Dr Mills etc...

Instead of Everything goes black, write Fade To Black.

Break up the large chunks of writing and don't use speech marks for dialogue as it's a given.

Also, remove the 'is' words as it'll speak up the read.  The room is dark or the room's dark.  Slightly quicker to read.

Overall an interesting read although I suspect the missing pages would give me a better overall picture.

Also, the trailer looks neat.

All the best,


Javier

The trailer looks damn good, man. Very professional.

My Director is gonna kill me, but I really do want to have your input on the almost finalized Movie.

http://www.vimeo.com/3962172

The film will be submitted to Sundance.