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Don |
Posted: October 8th, 2017, 9:29am |
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The Diver by Max Ruddock - Short, Drama - An epiphanal moment in an athlete's life when he finally understands the reason behind his lack of success. 1 page production: Ultra short one-pager with one location and one actor. - pdf, format
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khamanna |
Posted: October 8th, 2017, 2:31pm |
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Nice beginning. Very well done actually. But for me you left it undone. It calls for more at the end - for the punch. Maybe just me, see what the others say. |
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BSaunders |
Posted: October 10th, 2017, 7:24am |
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It's alright. Read worse things |
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Posted: October 10th, 2017, 7:25am |
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LocationUK Posts428 Posts Per Day 0.14 |
Hi Khamanna,
Thanks for taking the time to read it and share your thoughts.
You're probably right about it needing a little more. I had gone with the less is more approach, but it's probably a little too sparse. In fact I've been contacted by a producer with an interest in making it, but they asked if it'd be possible for me to beef it up a little too.
So with that in mind I'm going to have another look at it and see what I can come with.
Cheers
Max |
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Pleb |
Posted: October 10th, 2017, 7:56am |
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LocationUK Posts428 Posts Per Day 0.14 |
Thanks for taking the time to have a read BSaunders,
Encouraging stuff.
Cheers
Max |
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Don |
Posted: October 13th, 2017, 1:44pm |
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LocationVirginia Posts16445 Posts Per Day 1.92 |
This has been optioned.
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Posted: October 13th, 2017, 2:24pm |
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Pleb |
Posted: October 18th, 2017, 5:58am |
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LocationUK Posts428 Posts Per Day 0.14 |
Thanks Anthony
Much appreciated.
I had to beef it up a little in a rewrite but they shot it late last week, so I'm happy something came of it.
Fingers crossed it turns out well.
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Posted: October 18th, 2017, 9:32am |
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AnthonyCawood |
Posted: October 18th, 2017, 1:29pm |
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Wow that was quick Max, wish some of the people 'working' on my scripts were half as quick!
Look forward to seeing it. |
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Pleb |
Posted: October 19th, 2017, 4:18am |
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LocationUK Posts428 Posts Per Day 0.14 |
Haha yeah really quick. I think they were just looking for something they could shoot off the cuff. And cos it only has one location, one actor and all the dialogue can be done in post, it was easy for them to do.
I'm just hoping it doesn't look rushed when it's finished. |
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Pleb |
Posted: January 14th, 2019, 5:27pm |
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LocationUK Posts428 Posts Per Day 0.14 |
Well, I got to see the end result not too long back and whilst it's visually lovely and has a great score, it's utter shit.
Honestly, when the credits popped up I was like, what the fuck was that even meant to be about?
Oh well, I guess that's always a risk once something is out of your hands eh...
Cheers for the messages anyway guys.
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Pale Yellow |
Posted: January 14th, 2019, 9:05pm |
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Super duper congrats on option!! |
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Pleb |
Posted: January 15th, 2019, 5:01pm |
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LocationUK Posts428 Posts Per Day 0.14 |
Thanks Pale Yellow.
I wasn't super happy with the end result but I got a credit on IMDb off it... albeit a shared one with the director.
Apparently shooting something in a different order deserves a writing credit. Who knew?
Oh well.
Cheers,
Max
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Posted: January 23rd, 2019, 6:08pm |
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LocationUK Posts26 Posts Per Day 0.01 |
Hi Max,
I liked the script, and can picture the scene. Is there anywhere we can see the end result / film?
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