Ahoy Just About Anybody - I blinked and missed this one, happens sometimes, nothing personal. This song isn't on my playlist - had to google it as well. Well, it is a very cute slice-of-life short full of truths and people we all know. Anyhow, nothing to add. Such an enjoyable read. Best of Irish luck! _ghostie gal

Thank you for your warm comments and suggestions. I have already implemented many of the suggestions and will post them sometime tomorrow when I repost the story with my real name.

Some of the comments warrant an explanation regarding the argument in the bar. The bar scene was the original ending but I felt there needed to be a better ending than Chip (Chip and Dale was on purpose) saying "I'll call."

As I was already over 5 pages, I had a lot of editing to do. I took out the conversation with the bartender (Hal). I left a tiny bit of the argument thinking it would provide some background noise for the scene and I liked Chip's entrance as better than a straightforward "The door opens, Chip enters."

Anyway, I restored the removed bar dialog, restored the earlier phone call with Mike in its entirety, and clarified the ending. I may take this further in that Dale finds that his sales negotiating skills are useful working for a food bank soliciting donations.