The Ballad of John, the Red Currant and Mandy, the Raspberry by Ilya Grigoriev - Short, Fairy Tale - The almost tragic, and almost epic love story of an unlikely twosome. The bonnies are called John and Mandy.   They're both garden fruits.  Oh, yeah, this is a fairy tale! - pdf, format

Wow, I can't believe this hasn't been reviewed yet. I don't know what to say... I'm lost for words.

This reads like a dream; literally. I found myself racing to the end with a silly smile on my face the whole way through.

I could pick you up on a few things like describing the characters' emotions instead of showing us. I could, but I wont because I think removing these little asides would be to its detriment. There are also a lot of transitions in there but I didn't find them intrusive.

Overall, your formatting is excellent, making this a lightning quick read.

I feel like I can't praise this enough, I loved it. It was such a fun read, one of the most original shorts I've read on this site.

One thing i'd suggest: change your title. This is such a punchy script, it needs a punchier title. Think of something better, something short.

Great work

I am afraid this one did not quite speak to me as much as it did the previous poster.  I mean, yeah, it's cute and all, with a twisted "Veggie Tales" kinda' thing going on.  But my biggest problem was:

(spoiler space)

Ilya, if you return to read these posts, I would recommend that you try to find some way to tell this epic love story that does not involve quite so much pooping and vomiting  

I'm afraid that is where you lost me on this one.

I would like to read this script for a possible production. Please send me a copy. Thank you.

Vins841, this script was posted in 2005.
I'm not able to open it, is anyone else?

I might hazard a guess the author pulled the script. As is, he didn't even respond to the feedback all the way back then.

Quoted from vins841 I would like to read this script for a possible production. Please send me a copy. Thank you.

Just click the title of the script.  

It opens for me.

- Don

Quoted from Don Just click the title of the script.   It opens for me. - Don

I really need to trade in my Tablet for a new one.
... No contact details on the script though.

2005! That’s crazy! I was ten years old.

(Also - I’m pretty sure I submitted my first script under a different username to SS when I was 11, so about 2006. Crazy to think SS has been around so long).

I had fun reading this