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Just a Little Nudge? by The Impatient One - In the near future, a real estate developer plots how to remove an endangered species from some very expensive land. Short, Sci Fi
Hmmm... this is the 2nd one I've read that was sci-fi. I thought this was supposed to be horror or thriller. I guess the reveal/twist at the end borders horror I guess, but this was absent of any tension. And there was a TON of exposition delivered through dialogue. Not that I have a problem with exposition, but it felt a little forced here. The writing itself was fine. But this didn't feel like this met the criteria that much, outside of the twist, which I kinda expected.
Oh man… this dude’s ‘ol lady is a Reptilian…? Gross. Had a ‘They Live’ fear factor in the mix. Sixty million tied up, just waiting for something to happen to an endangered species to get the move on? Not buying it, humans are a plague on this planet and will do whatever is necessary to achieve a goal; “end justifies the means” is a creed the cabal works with tooth and nail, but I digress. The twist is obvious, err… now that is, after reading, but I didn’t see it coming, so kudos. Best of luck.
Good marks from me. I love the premise of this one -- wish I had written it! Nice end reveal too, though I think you could do without the last line of dialogue. Might hit just as hard, if not harder, without it. Very good work!
Hmmm... this is the 2nd one I've read that was sci-fi. I thought this was supposed to be horror or thriller. I guess the reveal/twist at the end borders horror I guess
-- Michael
Nope, horror, Sci Fi or thriller, there also doesn't have to be a twist, there can be a shock or a sting in the tail.
Michael already acknowledged he got it later that SciFi was included, and that it won't affect his judging.
Even if a script doesn't quite meet the criteria, it doesn't affect my scoring. My favorite and highest scoring from the March (or February, I forget) challenge was a comedy and I believe the theme for that challenge was a thriller or something lol. I just score according to originality, quality of writing, story and, for this one, twist or sting in the tail -- and if the "shock" aspect leaves enough of an impression, that too.
I loved this one! Absolutely embodies the time we live in. We have the isolation, the boredom, the obsession with petty shit, the looking forward to the future.
And what I loved most about the twist, is even though it could be read as downbeat, I saw it as showing how resilient us apes are despite our quirks.
I would actually really love to see this one get made. Great work!