Thanks for reading, Mark!
I made a mistake with the names. Should have spelled it CAIT if it were more informal,

Glenn is a major piece of work. I wanted to paint him as the total corporate clone to contrast Caitlyn's more artistic non-conformist personaiity. He's greedy, cold, calculating and would sell out the world (including his sisters) if it made him money.

Your comment about the chumminess...Yeah, I'll agree with you. He may feel that way towards them, but they would probably prefer to keep him at a distance.

A sassy, foxy goth lass with a bad arse death lazer key chain. What's not to like about that?

This was a great read that I really enjoyed. agree with above posts concerning action. Shave off a bit- just a touch.

I don't get all the confusion with Caitlyn and kate. Come on what's wrong with you people? Kate is short for Caitlyn like Rob is short for Robert.

The only part I did not like was Kate getting dressed up like "cute lumberjack"

Nope! No way. Goth fashion is a statment, not a style. She should and would wear black and big black chunky boots to the bitter end.

What the hell was I thinking? No doubt the minute Caitlyn gets out of this jam she's high tailing her cute little bootie to the nearest Hot Topic and gothin' proper.

She'd still be wearing her boots, just a different shirt and ripped up jeans instead of her black leather mini and fishnets.

Here's some suggested explanations for her lumberjack look: She was still paranoid and freaked out about secret agents trying to kill her, so Sawgrass convinced her that changing her look might through them off a bit.
It could also Sawgrass's attempt to "get her to undress" so that some "action" could have occured in the truck prior to arriving at the diner.

Thank you very much for checking this out, Tonka! I'm glad you liked it