Close Encounters of the Nerd Kind by Richard Doofus - When their construction truck breaks down, two workers pass the time by playing with their tools. - Short, Sci Fi

Short, cute story. Well written. Meets the criteria.

Good work. I like it.

Well, you get points for getting an entry in - literally as well as figuratively.

And, it's short and sweet.

I wondered if someone might use the object as musical instrument.

The story itself doesn't quite hit the mark for me, but with a few tweaks, maybe...
I just anticipated a bit more with the logline but good effort all the same.

Hi writer,

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If it's important to the story put it in a SUPER.

So not a whole lot to this, it okay for what it is, funny ending. Not really a story just a one trick pony. I'm sure you know that as it's a page and a half long.

So the broken down car isn’t a location at any point. It’s in a location. I'm happy if people aren’t in a car the entire time just like any other location in this tourney, but considering that is part of the criteria I don’t feel it has been met. Others may be more lenient.

Good use of the saw and its definitely sci-fi.

All the best.

CLOSE ENCOUNTERS OF THE NERD KIND

Okay, you've chosen to walk with a little skit here. Annnnndd… it works as I see it. Using the saw as an instrument hasn't crossed my mind, however it's possible. Surely, this isn't overly exciting but I could definitely imagine it as a little piece for commercials. Good choice to go simple I think. Criteria's well met.

Hello writer

A page and a half - THANKYOU

More like a joke than a story, a joke that may be lost on me - I've never ordered an Uber, does it have to be done with music? probably not - with the app I guess. Maybe Uber can use this for one of their adverts.

Well done for completing the tournament

Short and cute. Innovative use of handsaw. However, as a location, I am not sure if this fits in the criteria or not. But I liked this one.

It’s okay.  I think you started with the ending and worked backwards.  It meets the criteria.  Short & sweet.

Short, cute and more of a joke than a real story to it... but I liked it for what it was.

Decent effort.

Hey, it's a real short short!!!  My deepest appreciation to you for saving my eyeballs from the extra read!

We have a broken down truck -- they're actually sitting on the truck so bonus points for having them on or in the vehicle.  You used the saw in a way I wasn't anticipating, so good there, and you have space ships.  So criteria met.

Look, it's not Aaron Sorkin, but it's fun and quick and harmless.  And a nice call out to Close Encounters of the Third Kind, both in the title and the calling of the space ships.  

Best of luck, and congrats on finishing the Challenge!
Gary

Ooooo silly me lol

I've never seen close encounters of the third kind - I get this now lol talk about a late penny drop.

Meets the parameter - liked the way you used the saw.

Well written enough - but not a lot of there - there for me. As soon is the ship appeared, you knew where it was going based on your title.

Good effort for three days

I liked it.

They're sitting on the truck bed, so, I definitely think parameters are met.

Sure, it's silly, but it made me laugh, so that's a win in my book.

Well done.

(Logline fits the tone of the piece. Must admit, wasn't looking forward to reading about two guys playing with their "tools.")

Short but entertaining. And the saw was actually used to accomplish something, not just used as a prop. The saw music calling down a space uber was funny, but I would’ve thought the irritating sound would’ve drawn a space cop instead.

I'm so disappointed! I loved it all the way to the final line and then...blah. I was hoping for so much more.

Very creative and well written for just three pages. Challenge met. Good characters.

Please rework the ending. This could be really cool, funny, action packed, horrific....

Is this set in the same world as Off Grid?
Not a fan of the "music" in the action lines, but I can't come up with a better way to do it, so no points off.
This is a funny joke and punchline, and it meets the criteria, but there's no actual story here.

Yup, short and not much of a story, more of a joke. All that's missing is the Ba-dum-dum drum at the end.

Still meets the criteria. And more points than missing out, so if you squeaked this one in, nicely done.

I've played the saw. It's fun.