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Posted: July 9th, 2020, 8:54am Report to Moderator
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Hi, far too busy for me, too many characters trying to reinforce the fantasy element. Dialogue was a bit too stilted but it was funny at times. Maybe dial back on the imagery and tighten up the dialogue.
Well done.


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Okay...this was sassy. Who wrote Bab's dialog? Can't wait to find out.

Some of the visuals and characters were really awesome. The dragon blowdryer is by far best use of object so far. I liked everything that was happening in the salon. Customers that came in....piranha hair clippers...the dialog...Bab's and Judy's friendship. All so very well done.

But after the salon I wasn't as into it. End felt rushed and I didn't really see the theme...just saw a troll robbing a store.

But...wow...what an imagination! I really did love the world you set up in the Salon.

Nice work, writer.


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