Well done on getting the script made but i don't really like the short film it sucks more than my dirty Christmas socks. The camera placement is wrong and we don't get a chance to have a Close up of the character which would have introduced it to us. The guy who did it should study first the basic rules then take a camera and shot, for God's sake he broke the 180 degree rule which the most simple rule to keep in mind.
Hope you don't get this personal Shelton, but your script didn't save the short.
Best.

Thanks for watching guys.  There's a lot of technical comments in there that aren't really relevant to me, but I'll see if the director is looking in on the board since I know he's aware of the link on the home page.

Quoted from NiK for God's sake he broke the 180 degree rule which the most simple rule to keep in mind.

That's the one that got me the most while watching it. I broke that rule once accidentally during my shoot and I'm still considering flipping one of the shots so it looks right. I'm still upset at myself over that.

He should also look into the rule of thirds which would have also improved this considerably.

Yeah, we know the comments don't apply to the script, which was good. I thought the final collaborative effort was good on the part of the story. Hence, your part was great. I enjoyed it. I hope the director and cinematographer got something out of it too.

Hey Mike, just read the script and I'll check out the film when I get home from work.

I like the script but have to say I prefer the alternative ending. Just seemed a bit clearer and was funnier. I like the first ending too but I think it needed maybe a longer build-up to make that work.

Looking forward to seeing the film (damn, firewalls!)

Well, watched the film and thought it was pretty good. It ran a little long I think, I didn't see the point in the length of the happy scene at the end.

The background noise was the main problem I think, but I take it this guy is pretty new?

Anyway, congrats on getting it made.

Hey Ste,

Thanks for watching.  Sound is always a tough thing to nail in films, and I was actually pretty pleased with it here, especially when you consider that it's all set outdoors.  That can get just nasty at times.

I do believe he's new to filmmaking, and overall I thought the end result came out quite well.

Thanks again.

Hey Mike,

Congrats on getting it produced.
I'm glad it had a nice and happy ending...

I also liked that they chose Dean Martin, and Louis Vuitton.

Cindy

  

Mike,

Thanks so much for this. You are hitting the sentimental nerve with me here and I love it.

For me, I know that a man will go out of his way to "do the right thing" in attracting his girl and if it means Skittles, then by God, get out those candies and do the locomotion!!!

I'm not going to comment on the camera work because I'm a writer and that is all. I don't want to pretend to be anything else.

From my perspective, I really did enjoy watching it. It was entertaining and you deserve a big congratulations.

Thanks again for this,

Sandra

Wow! The lounge music and retro city scape suits your style man. That screams Sheltonism.  And I notice that main character in the sweater and glassses looks like you. Did you or the director base the character on you?

Sorry, but not impressed with the short. Wonder why the camera couldn't get closer to the actors?

And dude I can't believe you went and grew a beard. Now I can't toss "Where's Wally" insults at you anymore cause the Hidden One don't have a beard.  

Hey Guys,

Thanks for watching.  I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Tonka,

In the original script, Barry was just an awkward, uncomfortable guy, and the mix up was literally just a case of mistaken identity.  Some people had issues with that, so I added in the part with the glasses and then them breaking so it would be a little more believable.  The actress playing both parts helped as well.  Ultimately though, it's all just a coincidence with the music and what not.

The beard, well, I don't know how long it will be around, so don't lose those Waldo comments just yet.

I'm looking to get back into writing these types of scripts again, at least in feature form, with one in progress in between other obligations.  I think it represents me best as a writer, and I enjoy them quite a bit when it's all said and done.