Hi Jonathan! Thanks a lot man for your kind words, dude!

Aw, what a cute little short.

The first half is dismal and sad, very tragic.

But you end on a nice high note where the potiential for hope is made all the more potent by contrast with the misery and filth and hoplessness of the begining.

A nice balance.

The writing and the format was excellent.  

Hi Glenn, thanks a lot for your comment, dude !

Touching story helio. Congrats on accomplishing your 50th script. I enjoyed how you lead your readers to think of one ending and then surprised them with a different ending. That twist was good.

I think most of the mom's dialgoue can be changed to contemplative looks and the son doesn't notice.  

Hope this helps,
Gabe

Helio my man, you're crazy! 50 shorts?! I have alot of work to do if I'm gonna catch up...

I liked this one alot Helio. The characters were very real(you should give me some tips on character development!) and the story was nicely fleshed out, especially for how short the script was. I felt very bad for the mother, and I was pleasently surprised by the ending! All in all, another day, another good script from Helio.

~Zack~

P.S.- Only fifty more scripts until you hit the 100 mark!

Hi Gabe and Zack! Thanks, dudies!

Gabe, I apreciate you advice and will think about it. Thanks

Zack, man, thanks! I don't remeber when I started to disturb SS people  and Don Boose, but if I don't drink too much and my healty stay okay maybe soon I will hit the 100 mark soon! Of course some scripts are very, very short, but I considere them one idea fro movie anyway.

I'll take this oportunity and say that were people like Mike Shelton, Phil Clark Jr, Robert Newcomer, George Willson, Gregory, Higgins, Gabe, Breanne, Pia, Spencer, Kevan, Michel, Chris, most recenply You and many others that I haven't metioned here (forgive me, palls!), were my main motivation to write and I decate this mark to all my friends from SimplyScripts!