Hey Sean...

Whew I sure would LOVE to film this one! How do I contact you about script rights, mate? Kidding! .

You're the only writer I know who actually keeps a tally of the offers they receive.

I know you're not looking for reviews, but I simply couldn't resist

Dan

Quoted from DV44 Hey Sean, Sorry that I caused you some potential grief by reviewing the script but I had to read this. Who knows, maybe I brought you some good luck! lol. The story itself was great. Was it a good life or a bad one? That's the question. In some weird way I seem to think both. I had a feeling that James Houston was married to Heather and lead a great life but was cheating on her as David with Michelle. And Vincent was a drug dealer/pimp. I'm probably way off with that theory but that's my guess. James/David lead two lives and saw them both while he was dying. Either way, I enjoyed this. Loved the twists and turns throughout. Best of luck Sean and if your other scripts are as good as this one I'll be reading those soon as well. - Dirk

Dirk,

Well, not yet. I'm just assuming there will be more in the future. Hey, it's possible, though. After all, I'm somewhat Irish (Sean. Who'd have thunk?).

I will tell you that parts of your theory were accurate, but the whole thing is a negative. But, that's okay, but it ensures (well, if it were filmed) return viewing. And, a small thing is that it's Jason, not James. I know I always use these boring character names over and over again so it's easy to get mixed up on that.

I'm very glad you liked it, and if you do decide to check out some of my others (so far, I owe you one for reading this), just don't bring back certain ones, namely: Taibhse, Reflection, Five Till Close or 24/7. I'm really happy to have those at the bottom of the pile where they belong. All the best.

-Sean

Quoted from danbotha Hey Sean... Whew I sure would LOVE to film this one! How do I contact you about script rights, mate? Kidding! . You're the only writer I know who actually keeps a tally of the offers they receive. I know you're not looking for reviews, but I simply couldn't resist Dan

Dan,

Somehow, I knew that was coming. Lol.

I didn't in the beginning, but it became a running joke with me because I would get a message every couple of days about filming. Most were nothing then there was one who was serious. Then funding fell through and it never happened, but we've been in contact since (that was about three weeks after it went up). Finally, in May, I was contacted by someone else. We're still working through it and it may actually be filmed for real sometime in 2013. Maybe. Lol.

No, it's fine. I always welcome reviews, but it's just one of those things... =)

-Sean

Hey Sean,

My goof on getting the names wrong. I was talking to my wife about her step father right before I reviewed the script. His name is James. So his name was on my mind. Sorry about that.

So you can't tell me which part I guessed correctly. That's cool. You're like a magician who doesn't want to reveal his secret.

You named about four scripts that I can't look at. Give me a list of the ones I can read. As far as reading something of mine, no worries. I'm currently working on three different scripts right now. 2 shorts and 1 feature and I'm learning to write as I go so it's probably going to be awhile but I'll let you know.

Sorry again if I open the floodgates on this one.

Take care - Dirk

Quoted from Mr. Blonde See, he's crazy, but at the same time, you're not sure which life was the one he really had

woot - reading that cheered me up no end. I really enjoyed the ambiguity, it was puzzling me which way around it was all the way through - I kept thinking the 'bad' kids were the result of their dad having shot himself - like he's hazing in and out of a flash-forward of the consequences of what he'd done (explaining the kids' anger at him) - but then it seemed to switch and switch again - and it worked for me that it was left unresolved.

All I'd suggest is tightening it all up, try and condense some of the scenes down a bit for more thematic density and a tighter plot - but it's only a personal thing, you could loosen it up as well (go real dream-world wtf style lol)... or leave it. (Damn ambiguity got me at it now!)

Off first impressions I'd say this was one of my fave scripts so far.

Quoted from Mr. Blonde E. This script was mostly a test for me to actually finish something, so I didn't bother with visual-based things because I don't need it filmed. I needed to prove to myself that I could finish something.

Now there's a reason for writing a script I can understand lol. I'm still at that point myself

And for a first crack you gotta be happy. Kudos.

Quoted from DV44 Hey Sean, My goof on getting the names wrong. I was talking to my wife about her step father right before I reviewed the script. His name is James. So his name was on my mind. Sorry about that. So you can't tell me which part I guessed correctly. That's cool. You're like a magician who doesn't want to reveal his secret. You named about four scripts that I can't look at. Give me a list of the ones I can read. As far as reading something of mine, no worries. I'm currently working on three different scripts right now. 2 shorts and 1 feature and I'm learning to write as I go so it's probably going to be awhile but I'll let you know. Sorry again if I open the floodgates on this one. Take care - Dirk

Dirk,

No big deal. It was my bad for keeping my boring names. I have this stable of about 15 names I use in every story. Many of the names are plain. Kind of interesting how your wife's stepfather is named James then you read Jason as James. I'm taking Psychology right now, so it's funny to see that correlation in the brain.

No, I can tell you which part was correct. "Was it a good life or a bad one?...In some weird way I seem to think both" and you were partly correct on this one "James/David lead two lives and saw them both while he was dying."

Oh, there's more I'd prefer not to be brought back up but those are the ones I really want to stay gone. Most of those are extremely old and I wasn't feeling them at all and that comes off in the writing. Well, let me know when one of those shorts is done and I'd be glad to take a look. If it's anything like your very well done OWC, I'm sure I'll be in for a real treat. =)

I was mostly joking about that. It's not really that big a deal and, if there is someone, I'll just turn them down with a smile.

-Sean

Quoted from marriot woot - reading that cheered me up no end. I really enjoyed the ambiguity, it was puzzling me which way around it was all the way through - I kept thinking the 'bad' kids were the result of their dad having shot himself - like he's hazing in and out of a flash-forward of the consequences of what he'd done (explaining the kids' anger at him) - but then it seemed to switch and switch again - and it worked for me that it was left unresolved. All I'd suggest is tightening it all up, try and condense some of the scenes down a bit for more thematic density and a tighter plot - but it's only a personal thing, you could loosen it up as well (go real dream-world wtf style lol)... or leave it. (Damn ambiguity got me at it now!) Off first impressions I'd say this was one of my fave scripts so far. Now there's a reason for writing a script I can understand lol. I'm still at that point myself And for a first crack you gotta be happy. Kudos.

Marriot,

Maybe one day, it'll be resolved. I remember that a couple days before I wrote this, I watched both Mulholland Drive and Memento and couldn't help but laugh at the idea of putting a list of 10 clues to solving the story (like Lynch did with MD on the DVD, instead of having chapters). I scrapped the idea way back because this isn't nearly as intricate or complicated as Mulholland Drive, but I thought it would've been neat to have.

We're working on tightening it up (the newest director and I) and we're going to condense Vincent and Michelle into one character.

I do appreciate that, though. Thank you.

Yeah, this was back in the old days where I had a bunch of ideas but couldn't actually sit down and bang one out. I had only done one before this, but it wasn't a story, it was the final scene to a feature I never wrote. Of course, not much has changed over the years. I still find it a chore to finish anything. Go figure.

But, thank you for reading and reviewing. If you have something for me to read, let me know. I can guarantee you I can't get around to it for about a week (this week is going to be hell) but I will get to it, then.

-Sean

I've just read this script I like how the end was so connected to the beginning like tenet vibes. I enjoyed it despite the excessive explanations.