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Getaway by Matthew Mosley - Thriller - After a bank robbery leaves a woman shot and the stashed getaway car turns up STOLEN, five theives quickly begin turning on each other and things start spiralling out of control. 100 pages - pdf format
production: Shoestring budget British crime thriller set in real-time.
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Oddly enough, I read the logline after I read the script. I didn't know what to expect. Even in the absence of a soundtrack, this hit the ground running. I could feel tension right away.
I loved the opening banter. It added depth to the characters and their relationship to each other. My favorite line came from Danny's entrance: Why is everyone in the back? Has this cunt farted?
I had a strong idea about how it was going to end about halfway through but enough ambiguity remained about exactly how it would end kept me on the edge of my seat. Overall, I liked it.
However, I do have a couple of suggestions:
You start off on bad footing at the very beginning. Your first slug line is: INT. CAR - DAY and your first action line is "Inside a parked car." Unless you want to impress the employees of The Department of Redundancy Department you should re-think your opening. I would suggest: The morning light is accompanied by the sounds of birds, far-off traffic and wind.
Also, you need to give this a few more read-throughs. There are several typos. For instance, on P. 32, Danny could see where the woman was shot. I think you meant to say he couldn't. On P's 69, 70 and 84, Rhod is called Rhos. On the bottom of P. 5, "...they crew continues to drive." There are other typos for you to find.
One other typo that I saw was the word Miss (as a title) followed by a period. I know that Mr. and Mrs. and Ms. have periods. I don't think that Miss has one. I could be wrong.
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