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Describing sound? (currently 5364 views) |
Mr.Ripley |
Posted: August 15th, 2006, 2:31pm |
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LocationNew York Posts1979 Posts Per Day 0.30 |
I am aware there are vairous ways of conveying sound in a script but how can one possibly be sure if it really fits well, description wise. I am only asking since I am having difficulty in this area with one of my scripts I'm currently working on. Also, I apologize for asking this, but does anyone know how to describe the sound of a shoutgun reloading? It's similar to a CH- sound but that's how far I can go. Much help is apreciated and thanks for your time. |
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God of Thunder |
Posted: August 15th, 2006, 2:33pm |
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New Thank You Sir, May I Have Another?
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FOr the shotgun say:
You hear the sound of a shotgun being cocked.
Thast all then the guy cocks the shotgun which make the sound. |
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Mr.Ripley |
Posted: August 15th, 2006, 2:50pm |
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LocationNew York Posts1979 Posts Per Day 0.30 |
Thanks God of Thunder for input. I was thinking of using that but I really don't want the reader to already know. I want it to still be a surprised. I'll take into consideration, thanks. |
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Zombie Sean |
Posted: August 15th, 2006, 2:55pm |
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Old Timer
LocationColorado Posts1547 Posts Per Day 0.23 |
What's the sound you need help with? Like BOOM or KAPOW, that is what I usually use if it's an explosion or gunshot. For the sound of someone reloading a gun, I wouldn't really have a sound. As GOT said, you can just say he reloads the gun, but if you were to film this, you can tell the director that you want to make it a surprise or whatever. Hope this helps Sean |
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MacDuff |
Posted: August 15th, 2006, 2:58pm |
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Been Around I should be writing...
LocationBeautiful BC Posts745 Posts Per Day 0.10 |
There are many creative ways to go about describing sounds. You can be plain Jane: Fat Tony loads his shotgun.You can spice it up a little: Fat Tony quickly loads his shotgun and SNAPS it shut.You can play it out: A pair of bloody, trembling hands fumble with shells as they slide them into a shotgun. With blood dripping from his split nose, Fat Tony loads the final cartridge and SNAPS the shotgun shut.To make the sound of the shotgun is hard and you don't want to sound amatuerish in the process. I'd safely say to leave it has the character loading the gun.
Quoted from God of Thunder You hear the sound of a shotgun being cocked. |
I would stay away from such notions as "You see", "We see", "We hear", "You hear". You need to be more descriptive and creative in the way you present a sequence. Producers and directors will determine what and how the audience will see things, unfortunately it's up to the writer to give them only the blueprint. Hope this helps. |
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Mr.Ripley |
Posted: August 15th, 2006, 3:10pm |
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LocationNew York Posts1979 Posts Per Day 0.30 |
Thanks Zombie Sean and Mcduff for your input. I think I see the problem, I apologize greatly for this. My mind has gone crazy after writing for entirely yesterday.
What I mean is when a person shoots and then shoots again. There's a sound in between when the shot is fired and when the next slug is up and ready. I hope this is clearer and I apologize again.
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SATCH |
Posted: August 15th, 2006, 3:24pm |
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Just to elaborate on the previous comments, the goal is to suggest, not actually write the sound out. Its the production company's responsibility.
Example:
Richard enters kate's bed room. An audible sound of a gun clocking becomes apparent. Richard's head slightly jerks foward soon revealing a magnum revolver aimed at the back of his head. |
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bert |
Posted: August 15th, 2006, 3:25pm |
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LocationThat's me in the corner Posts4233 Posts Per Day 0.61 |
So you are talking about a pump-action shotgun?
There is not a "dictionary" word for that sound -- and you are allowed a certain amount of freedom in the sounds you use. You can even make up your own sound -- try it -- it's fun. And lots of people put these in CAPS. I know I like to:
Fat Tony fires point blank into Chubby Timmy's chest. BLAM. Fat Tony whirls and -- CHA-CHANK -- he pumps a fresh round into the weapon. BLAMMO. He blows Obese Tom's head off. He steps over the to still-rolling head and drives the butt of the gun into its face with a wet THWAK. |
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Mr.Ripley |
Posted: August 15th, 2006, 3:47pm |
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LocationNew York Posts1979 Posts Per Day 0.30 |
Thanks Satch and Bert for your comments. My question is answered. Thank you all you helped me as well. I guess its a pump action shotgun; I'm not very good in differaitaing. Besides, if I do something wrong, I always have fellow screen writers on this site to tell me its wrong. So, I got to take a chance on it. Thanks again. |
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Helio |
Posted: August 15th, 2006, 3:48pm |
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If I understood it could be like this or couldn't : Fat Tony fires one... BLAM! Two... BLAM! ...Smiles - CLIK-CLOCK - Fat Tony turns slowly and a huge .9 pistol is pointed to his head... BLAM! Fat Tony's head blows off...SPLOFFT...splitering Fat Tony's brain all over a expensive Picasso! It is Slim Mike! Slim Mike - What shit loss! |
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Mr.Ripley |
Posted: August 15th, 2006, 3:53pm |
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LocationNew York Posts1979 Posts Per Day 0.30 |
Yeah Helio. That's what I was asking assitance on. But others have so kindly answered me before. But that's what i was asking for, somthing similar to that one. |
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Martin |
Posted: August 15th, 2006, 5:00pm |
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Been Around
LocationFrankfurt, Germany Posts607 Posts Per Day 0.09 |
I think it also depends on the tone of the script you're writing. Your action description should fit the tone of your story. If the tone is serious, you don't want to pull the reader out of your story with a bunch of made-up words like KABLAMMO but it might work for a comedy. Personally, I wouldn't capitalize a reload sound, nor would I capitalize every gunshot in a long gunfight.
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bert |
Posted: August 15th, 2006, 5:37pm |
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AdministratorBuy the ticket, take the ride
LocationThat's me in the corner Posts4233 Posts Per Day 0.61 |
Well, yeah -- I was exaggerating for effect.
You don't want to end up sounding like a comic book, of course.
But even a serious script can have distinct sounds -- if you want to give something special emphasis, a unique sound effect can help you do that. |
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Martin |
Posted: August 15th, 2006, 5:56pm |
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Been Around
LocationFrankfurt, Germany Posts607 Posts Per Day 0.09 |
You don't want to end up sounding like a comic book, of course.
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I agree. Only an idiot would write something like PAZZOW! PAZZOW! KABLAMMO! or ZZZZZT! BOING! SLAP! |
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Mr.Ripley |
Posted: August 15th, 2006, 7:41pm |
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LocationNew York Posts1979 Posts Per Day 0.30 |
LOL. I absolutely agree. Do not fret, it's not going to end up in that manner. Thanks Martin and again Bert. My question has become so popular over a short time period. |
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