Click Click by Anthony Hudson 'alffy' - Short, Comedy - Two photographers on a safari shoot.  It should be the job of a lifetime. 3 pages - pdf, format

Anthony,

This script I liked a lot. The punchline made me laugh for like ten seconds. It was well-written, well-paced and pretty darn funny. I think this is about all you could hope for in the script. I would love to have known Colin's fate, but that would spoil the joke so I'm okay with the slight open-endedness to the script. Really well done.


Cheers, Chismeister.

Deja Vu. I can't exactly remember where, but I've heard that line before in something. Still, it was a decent short. Keep it up.

This short was actually an old joke in script format.  It was nicely told, though.


Phil

Thanks for the read Chismeister, alex and Phil.  Glad you all enjoyed it.

Your right Phil,

I heard this in joke form many years ago and it stuck with me cos I thought it was really funny, mind you I was probably drunk at the time.  Anyway, I just decided the best way to share it was to fill it out into a short.

Nicely told.  This joke is actually an old standby in my neck of the woods so what can you do but the leadup was nice.  I'll check out your other work.

Not bad. Not bad at all. I haven't heard the joke myself but the script worked well. There was a strong build up and a satisfying payoff. I'd say more but there really isn't much I can say, especially considering the length.

All in all, not a bad way to spend three minutes of my life. This brought a smile to my face. Thanks.

Cheers for the read guy.

Heretic, I know it's an old joke but it is a good one.

James, glad I didn't waste your time lol.

Alffy, pretty funny. Nice work.

This was a short piece, but the ending is what made it worth reading.




I have not read previous comments so I apologize if I've repeated what other posters have said...


Now, this was REALLY short, and with only two characters in 3 pages, you can't really tell what they're personalities are like except for the fact that I think Andy is probably more competetive than Colin. Other than that, they're really two-dimensional. But once again, this is three pages. You could probably expand it just a few more pages to get the character flow out, throw in a bit of small jokes and end it with one big one.

Other than that, this was funny. I like your descriptions too.

Sean

Thanks Slim for reading my short.

Sean, this is really just a joke in script form so character building was my main thought here.  I could extend it but it could lose its punch.  Anyway thanks for reading this.

Alffy-my British counterpart-
                                        nice joke, the format was spot on, dialogue flowed well, the tension was built nicely. All you can ask for in a joke. Was also funny.

   Robert

Cheers Robert,

Thanks for reading this, I guess I've finally got my head around format cos everyones said its fne. lol

Nice to see another Brit here, I don't think there's that many of us.

Hey alffy,

I had a few minutes to do some reading so I chose your script. .

I never heard this joke before...
So yeah, you got me.  
Nice story, and in only a few pages.

Cindy

Cheers Cindy

this joke is as old as the hills, or so I thought.  Glad you liked it though, it's just a simple story but I think it's funny.

Anywho thanks again.