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Alone by Bill Sarre (reef dreamer) - Short, Drama - A man returns with his dog to a special beach. Producer Note: One location, One actor. 2 pages - pdf, format
Well-written. That's about all I've got to say. Hard to critique a one pager. It managed emotion.
I read a story that's been lingering with me for awhile, this reminded me of it. Twas about a guy who's lifelong pet, a dog, was so old and wretched with such an awful arthritis that she could not sleep. she was in pain even on such a soft surface as a bed. But, he found if he took her out to water and held her, she could sleep. So, every morning, he would take his dog out into the beach waters and hold her for a couple of hours while she slept until she finally passed.
Stuff like that hits me in the core.
btw, was there a one page contest I wasn't aware of?? I see another one just posted.
I'm stuck on what to actually say about this one. Yeah it was well-written, couldn't fault you in terms of formatting and writing.
A really powerful story, which has impact. That's not common with one-page shorts like this, so good job there. I was intrigued the whole way through. The image of a guy talking to "himself" has always been something that interests me and I think you nailed it.
For the first time I actually saw the point of FADE OUT. You didn't have one in this script and I have to admit I did end up wondering if this script was actually finished? It just seemed (to me) like such a random and unnatural way to finish...
Otherwise, some excellent writing. Now, time to go finish 'Pagan Man'
Well, I can't say that it's something I've never seen before, but I can't say that I didn't enjoy it, either. Touching and really easy to produce, I can definitely see this one getting made.
A good bit of misdirection in this one. Well written and quite moving, which is not easy in a one pager. It's difficult to say much else; how do you critique a single page? Good work, really liked it.
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Nice, Bill. I had an idea similar to yours that I'd write if I could get off my lazy arse... Or in this case, stay on my arse long enough that I pull final draft out . Anyway, I really liked this. If I were a film student, I'd get my hands on this immediately. Hopefully you get this produced as I'd love to see the final product.
To everyone else, sorry I hadn't responded earlier, I've had a delightful day travelling through france in a car with screaming kids to a campsite!! Thankfully it's got wifi, even if the worse wifi in history.
Otherwise, thanks for the kind words and reviews. To answer James, this was my recent entry in the Movie Poet one page competition (slightly amended since) and a few suggested this could get produced. I didn't intend to post it here but with that feedback I thought, why not?
I actually like the one page format. It's clearly very limiting but in a way that makes it very difficult. For those interested the recent 50 scripts in that competition show what can and can not be achieved. Alas I didn't win but I was only 0.1 off an honorable mention which wasn't too bad for my first script there.
The Elevator Most Belonging To Alice - Semi Final Bluecat, Runner Up Nashville Inner Journey - Page Awards Finalist - Bluecat semi final Grieving Spell - winner - London Film Awards. Third - Honolulu Ultimate Weapon - Fresh Voices - second place IMDb link... http://www.imdb.com/name/nm7062725/?ref_=tt_ov_wr
For those interested the recent 50 scripts in that competition show what can and can not be achieved. Alas I didn't win but I was only 0.1 off an honorable mention which wasn't too bad for my first script there.
Congrats anyway for almost pushing a top spot, I want to read the competition. It was superb, many can relate to the theme, including myself. Thanks for posting!
Not much to add my friend. A good solid one pager and well-written. You've managed to create a lot emotion in one page so well done. I’m guessing a MP entry.
The Elevator Most Belonging To Alice - Semi Final Bluecat, Runner Up Nashville Inner Journey - Page Awards Finalist - Bluecat semi final Grieving Spell - winner - London Film Awards. Third - Honolulu Ultimate Weapon - Fresh Voices - second place IMDb link... http://www.imdb.com/name/nm7062725/?ref_=tt_ov_wr
This is nicely done. Clean. Clear. Visual. However, I was onto you with the getting knocked over in the sea bit. That's something other species are more likely to experience than canines. Still, it was a good misdirect. Though my mind went to a slightly diffy place... I thought there might be something less edible in the bag. Something that would get spread about in the ocean.
Good job!
Regards, E.D.
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