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Okay, this is clever. You think you're dealing with the Hulk and some villain and you get a totally unique reveal. I like the idea that this is (SPOILER ALERT AHEAD) going on in the mind of a kid, but it does make me ask: would a kid be imagining that Bruce was using homophobic slurs and using foul language? Maybe so, given the things kids are exposed to these days.
But that's a minor nit pick. Really enjoyed the read on this one. Good job here.
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Bounty (TV Pilot) -- Top 1% of discoverable screenplays on Coverfly I'll Be Seeing You (short) - OWC winner The Gambler (short) - OWC winner Skip (short) - filmed Country Road 12 (short) - filmed The Family Man (short) - filmed The Journeyers (feature) - optioned
The only JR Simplot I know is the potato king in Idaho. Same guy?
That threw me for a loop. A few misspellings that kind of derail the reader and clunky dialogue but, hey, nobody ever said action figures were eloquent!
Getting sewn into a couch. That's awesome. Good work, writer.
I know a little about being drunk and stupid, but we won't go there.
This is kind of, well... out there. Very amusing. Nice light touch. Dialogue was witty, very easy to read. I was just laughing out loud at this kid's appearance at the end. It's good to write something a leetle beet crazy now and again, it unblocks clogged mental pipes, warms up your writing muscles. Best of Irish luck! -A
The doll house is missing the chandelier? Probably one of those little LED twinkle lights that burns out your regna if you stare into it too long. This reminded me somewhat of that Harry Potter movie wherein that old dude was a lazy-boy recliner, or hiding as one, so I could envision the strangeness of the scenario if that makes any sense.
Not entirely sure a 10-year-old would have the capacity for such abstract thoughts, or vulgarity, but then again, maybe he’s playing out something he witnessed in his own dysfunctional family environment; everyone has an Uncle Bob that’s not all there, I have an Uncle Bob that actually put his foot through a TV back in the day, he had big shit-kickers on, so the TV was no match.
Anyway, yeah… off the wall little skit that I didn’t see coming, so it definitely works for that entertainment value so sought after nowadays. Best of luck.
A good read with an insight in the minds of ten-year olds. They surely get impacted from their surroundings. A saw the twist coming when the tilting came into picture. So no surprises for me but a nice read.
This was way out-there and comic book style. The action lines were well written and kept things moving forward. Had the same thought voiced by others about a kid imagining an adulterous scene, but we gotta end it somehow, right?
Notes: I’m mixed. It’s out of the box idea but it gives me a wtf vibe. It’s like Inception lol. You fulfilled the criteria twice but still. Wtf happened? Lol.
Sorry I couldn’t be more helpful, Gabe
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“Good morning, good evening, and good night”, Truman Burbank from the Truman Show.
It didn't quite work but it was fun right out of the gate. I think the adult aspect seemed off. What if Bruce is battling a female opponent, who represents mom. Then keep the back and forth between the two combatants closer to what married couples argue about. Something like that. Nice try.
Very cute. I thought it was especially funny that a 10-year-old built such an elaborate backstory centered around a homophobic slur to drive the conflict. And the stilted dialogue was perfect.
Okay, so put me out of my misery... Well, soon anyway.
Peter Parker & Bruce Banner?
Clever idea, very imaginative. I'm not buying the kid's narrative (through the action Heroes)but then you made it 'adult' I suspect so as not to give away the final reveal.
Him stuck in a spider's web might have been cool and macabre, but would likely give the game away too.
One specific Typo glared at me: weather/whether.
Nice job. I liked the concept and surprise reveal a lot and you definitely nailed the brief of a character being physically trapped.
This one was interesting. I like seeing the life of toys, kind of like a more mature Toy Story. The reveal was neat, not sure how to execute this on film though, I guess we'd know they are toys the whole time? Kind of loses the reveal though. I don't know if this fits the perimeters exactly but I had a hard time with mine so yea, tough challenge. Good work though.