If it's a good enough story and is in the vicinity e.g. crypt, mausoleum, cemetery, then I don't see why not. I doubt you'd get dinged.  Not by me you wouldn't, anyway.

Quoted from LC If it's a good enough story and is in the vicinity e.g. crypt, mausoleum, cemetery, then I don't see why not. I doubt you'd get dinged.  Not by me you wouldn't, anyway.

That really opens the gates to pretty much write anything, cheers.

Yes, but I'm not in charge of the challenge.     

P.S. I reckon you can still 'worship' in all of those environments.

Quoted from LC At this stage I'm out of this one. I know hokey when I read it and I've not come up with anything that passes my personal ok-meter.   I love the way you've organised this Sean. It means we can dip in and out and even if our scores drop we can still partake. It's not all about winning which is great.

+1 trillion

Yep, we decided to stay out as well, but did write one.  Done.  It might be hokey though.     

As I was weed whacking my way back through this thread,  it seems writing action may be a teensy-weensy  bit out of some folks comfort zone.  If not, cool.  If so, then I think it's a good thing.  These challenges.  To me...pushing your own comfort zone is - not doing hackwork, but trying to find yourself in some story that isn't easy for you to write.   Not that anything is ever easy.  I think it's important to test yourself - challenge yourself, push past whatever your limits are and write something that may not be easy.   How else do we improve?  

Ugh... I'm just rambling.  Sorry.     Apply salt to taste.  Or ignore.

Look forward to reading what everyone comes up with. -Andrea

It was the church/trading card elements that got me, and too big a story for five pages.

Ah well, that's my excuse anyway, Andrea.

There's still about twenty-one hours to go by me estimation, yet my ideas keep fallng flat - or hokey.  

Yea, the church/trading card element was difficult. I'll have to admit. but you are too modest, you have great ideas. -Andrea

Waz, just make sure the church is in the scenes or some are in the church at least. Or else what’s the point of having it as the location?  

Just finished mine   Only about 8 lines to cut to make it 5 pages. Very happy with it  

Quoted from stevie Waz, just make sure the church is in the scenes or some are in the church at least. Or else what’s the point of having it as the location?

What is the point, indeed

Quoted from stevie Waz, just make sure the church is in the scenes or some are in the church at least. Or else what’s the point of having it as the location?

Well, if the whole script is two cowboys fist-fighting on top of a runaway train, and they happen to roll past a church at one point without it impacting the story, you’d probably get dinged.

But something on the grounds of a church, especially if the churchiness affects the story in some way, would be fine in my book.

Quoted from stevie Just finished mine   Only about 8 lines to cut to make it 5 pages. Very happy with it

Famous last words... about eight lines of ’em.

Submitted. It's... something alright. Fark me!

I currently have two stories in my head - One I think reviewers will like, but I doubt I will enjoy writing it - the other I think reviewers will hate, but I'm excited to write it....

Sorry reviewers, I've chosen the latter

Quoted from Warren Submitted. It's... something alright. Fark me!

And by "something" do you mean a piece of literary genius?

Quoted from Matthew Taylor And by "something" do you mean a piece of literary genius?

Not even close. I didn't enjoy writing it and no one is going to enjoy reading it.

Quoted from Warren Not even close. I didn't enjoy writing it and no one is going to enjoy reading it.

Well, I’m glad there will be at one that “no one” will enjoy. That guy handles all the important issues of the day.

I'm struggling with too many pages this time. Action should read down the page, shorter sentences, more white space to keep the pace high for the reader. But that means being able to write less action. Having to fit a worthy action sequence in at most three pages after setting up a trading card and the denouement is really tough.

Quoted from ReneC I'm struggling with too many pages this time. Action should read down the page, shorter sentences, more white space to keep the pace high for the reader. But that means being able to write less action. Having to fit a worthy action sequence in at most three pages after setting up a trading card and the denouement is really tough.

Cut back the dialog. It takes up so much space. Just keep what is absolutely essential to the story.