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yo Kev! Mate, thanks for all the support and tips. I sent my baby out last night. I came up with a pretty good log, though yours was pretty cool too!
Cornie made a suggestion too which was close to mine. I went through the script with a tooth comb, there are no errors at all! Cut as much as I could without sacrificing the spontaneity.
it reads quick so heres hoping someone like sandra is on the reading panel at the LA comedy festival!! Now i just have to wait till march next year to see how it went.
Its time to get back to my Custer project!!
Cheers all!!
Cheers to you too, Stevie! I'm just so happy that I got to read this when it was in its early stages and I knew right away that it was a winner. I've said this before: I might not be able to write the best script, but I sure do know how to pick them!!!
Yeah, I do need something pretty badly but I won't go there either...oh shit...I'm opening myself up to Stevie's quoting hi-jinks...especially using "opening".
A couple of Aussies on a road trip pick up a zombie hitchhiker. Have got to read this!
This was a fun, entertaining and enjoyable read, very slapstick. It did seem to turn into the wacky races in the second half with lots of unbelievable action, the helicopter crash was unrealistic but spectacular.
I liked a lot of the characters, they all had their own personal quirks and the dialogue seemed genuine for what for I think you were going for.
The real star of the show was Ray, whether it be singing karaoke or leaping from helicopters. You have created a memorable character without having too much for him to say which i think you've accomplished superbly.
I also like the payoff at the end of the Taylor and Reynolds side story, it gave me a good laugh.
The one area I felt could have more attention was the brothers themselves. they almost felt like sidekicks at times around other good characters and were easily forgettable IMO. I think one way to do this would be to add more detail to the love triangle/ relationship with Andrea. They could compete with each other for her affection. Just a thought.
Always good to hear from another Aussie onsite - there's not many of us! And anyone named Steve had to be pretty cool...
Yeah, I'm fond of this script. I entered it in the LA Comedy Festival the other month - won't find out anything till March.
And you make a good point about the brothers fighting over Andrea - I did need more of it but after slaving through the rewrite( the original had no zombie Ray in it), I sorta hurried it up.
U follow the AFL? I live on the Gold Coast but am a Vic boy originally. I'm a mad Saints fan!
Oddly enough I've never been to W.A! Or Tassie for that matter...