I thought long and hard about your question.

Nothing stood out as repetitive. The red fog announced the presence of Otis. It set the tone. The dialog for the most part was on point. It's hard to have a deep conversation when you're running in the woods.

I would compare this to Jurassic Park. The footsteps announced the presence of the Tyrannosaurus. The cast did not engage in a discussion about how the first skeleton was assembled with ten extra bones in its tail to make it look more reptilian. It focused on surviving the moment.

That's how I interpreted your dialog. It's a slasher movie. There's a definitive formula to follow. There are a lot of exit lines. The creative genius involved is in creating an original monster with his own back story. On top of that, you need to find different horrible ways to off the cast members. You accomplished that.

Nothing stood out to me as redundant. At no point in time did I feel like I was reading a script for the next Rocky Horror Picture Show.

                            ... And I look forward to a sequel. I keep promising myself that I won't read your work so late at night. My problem is that time flies and I can't put it down.

Quoted from D.A.Banaszak I thought long and hard about your question. Nothing stood out as repetitive. The red fog announced the presence of Otis. It set the tone. The dialog for the most part was on point. It's hard to have a deep conversation when you're running in the woods. I would compare this to Jurassic Park. The footsteps announced the presence of the Tyrannosaurus. The cast did not engage in a discussion about how the first skeleton was assembled with ten extra bones in its tail to make it look more reptilian. It focused on surviving the moment. That's how I interpreted your dialog. It's a slasher movie. There's a definitive formula to follow. There are a lot of exit lines. The creative genius involved is in creating an original monster with his own back story. On top of that, you need to find different horrible ways to off the cast members. You accomplished that. Nothing stood out to me as redundant. At no point in time did I feel like I was reading a script for the next Rocky Horror Picture Show.                             ... And I look forward to a sequel. I keep promising myself that I won't read your work so late at night. My problem is that time flies and I can't put it down.

Thanks for the quick response, man.

Happy to hear that nothing stood out as repetitive. I'm always concerned about making the read flow as smoothly as possible.

Yeah, the fast pace of the story doesn't really allow for much exposition, which I think is a good thing for something like this. Stoked that it landed so well for you. Thanks again.

Where's the script Zack? You have it removed but the thread is still here. Do you plan to upload a new one?

Quoted from DevonteHuntley Where's the script Zack? You have it removed but the thread is still here. Do you plan to upload a new one?

The script is being rewritten. I may share the new draft here once I'm finished. We'll see.

MAY? Hmm, that sounds uncertain. But good luck with it all. I wish I was able to read it in time.