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Well, let's just say, "this ain't my cup of tea", but it's humorous for those who find this kind of thing funny, and pretty well written, for the most part.
It's a 1 trick pony and I was expecting...and hoping for some kind of twist of any kind. Or at least that Larry would be brutally killed, hung, tarred and feathered, cut into thousands of pieces, eaten by zombies...something, anything, but no, plays out with absolutely no surprises.
Well, everyone around here loves to complain about things that look "familiar". You have to admit this was a different kind of 'gunslinger'. I think it was humorous and done in a way that no one will take offense, but I'll check back to see if that's the case.
this wad pretty funny, it was filled with cliche's and stereotypes but i have a feeling that was the writers intention. it does get old pretty fast in only six pages. still, good work on the OWC.
This should have been called The Legend of Limpwrist Larry. As much as this is a spoof on westerns and gays, I did like Larry’s dialogue. This was funny in a light hearted way.
We never felt any danger from the burly outlaw. I liked the way you almost had us believing the outlaw was gay too with his comment about lavender.
Watched Friends With Benefits last night and found myself channelling Woody Harrelson's delivery for Larry. Ri-dick-colous! You absolutely nailed the opening description and Larry's first line "Dee-lish". Perfectly captured the mood and set the tone for your script. It just goes to show that it only takes small things to contextualise your world and create suspension of disbelief.
Amusing script that felt like a riff from a writer enjoying writing.
Very funny. I think it would be difficult to set this in a saloon but I can definitely wrong. Other than that, I liked it.
Gabe
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I do have to add one thing here: though I enjoyed the script, I can't vote for it.
At 5 1/2 pages, this is pretty far short of the OWC requirement of 8 to 12, with the rough target being 10 pages. Not enough happens in it, though what happens is about right for the page length. Excellent work, though! Could definitely make an SNL skit, or a short film, easily.
“Bangy-bang” is the show in a trifecta of of cheesetastic lines. This one fits the OWC rules, keeping it all in one room. This is a one joke piece, but the joke works. Twists and genre redefinition is not required to write a script. Especially, one for an OWC, just tell a decent tale, and you have. Scanlon’s reveal is cute, but the ending could use some sass.
Regards, E.D.
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really loved the idea behind this one. however i felt like it needed a bit more "umph" behind it (and i didnt mean that in a gay way).
the writing was excellent and the dialogue was accurate. the concept was awesome, but as previously mentioned, you don't do very much with it. and unfortunately that's not enough. i wish you did something with kryder at the end rather than just a shootout (perhaps kryder and larry know each other somehow prior to meeting at the bar?).
this one gets an A for originality but a C for execution. therefore, I'm giving this a solid B. would love to see this made into a longer production. lots of potential here.
I do have to add one thing here: though I enjoyed the script, I can't vote for it.
At 5 1/2 pages, this is pretty far short of the OWC requirement of 8 to 12, with the rough target being 10 pages.
"You must write a script (properly formatted) between 6 and 12 pages (courier 12 point font)."
and nowhere does it say 10 pages should be the target. Not picking on you there, just would hate for a good script not to get voted on due to misinterpretation of the OWC requirements.
Well, 5.5 is not 6. I like this script, it just feels short to me. Not enough happened. But I don't want to be in a position of seeming to be against it. It made me laugh, I liked it. I just don't think it was quite enough.
I liked this one. The story itself offered nothing new other than the gayness, but I thought that was done well. Stereotype of course, but done well. It showed character instead of just saying "this character is 30 years old with shoulder length brown hair and a stubble". This script "showed" us the character through dialogue and action. One of the more enjoyable scripts.