Freeing Michael by Laurie Strode - Short, Comedy, Horror, Dark Comedy - Michael, cursed to an eternity of bad Halloween remakes, must find and brutally kill anyone who enjoys watching them on Halloween. - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

Having just watched Halloween Ends I'm hoping this script can redeem it!

'Erect fingertips', 'slides' used 3 time in 2 paragraphs, there's some interesting language choices that maybe worth a review.

But I Loved my VCR (had Phillips V2000, Beta and VHS at one point) so I'm sold and wanting to know what he selected.

Ah, great choice oh hang on, the sign is a big lie! Resurrection... really? Some people deserve what they get

Micahel should be in CAPS when first introduced, even if we do know (and love) him.

Picky, but Cologne is a large city in Germany, cologne is the smelly stuff.

Knife through the casette is a better kill than anything in Ends!

Sharp Elbow Girl, made me checkle.

Not sure a talking Michael would normally be my thing,  but works in the tone of this short.

So the curse isn;t at all really, but again made me laugh...

Last 3 pages become er. interesting... and didn;t really work for me as a script but to amuse the regs on SS then absolutely.

Decent effort.

EDIT: May have missed it but didn;t see an obious midnight element

Ahoy writer,

Oh my gosh,  another interesting take on Halloween. This is nuts. In a fun way. No kidding, I expected this to end with the camera pulling back to reveal we're on a film set, and the director is making a pastiche

At first, I wasn't sure about you having Michael speak. But yea, in the context of what has been laid out, it works for me. I had a good laugh with this, the puns.  Aside from a few nitpicks, not sure I noticed a curse. Fun read. Best of Irish luck!- -A

This is a funny and entertaining ride. It has some formatting issues I'm sure Gerald would have mentioned - had he been around any longer. Being stuck in the Halloween franchise is quite the curse, I suppose, LOL.

I'm off to watch Halloween Resurrection!

"Michael lumbers" - Love it

Perhaps this will be the script that finally puts a smile on..wait for it...Michael's Mug!

Ha!  I kill me...

It was silly and funny in parts. Haven't watched any Halloween movies except the very first one from the 70s. It seemed a little strange to include a link to the Halloween theme...presumably anyone who's reading/watching this has some concept of the vary famous score?

I don't know. Maybe you need more understanding of the franchise and legacy to really appreciate this fully. I felt a little underwhelmed.

It was funny for sure, but as Ben said, it's probably more appreciated if you're a fan of the franchise. I've seen plenty of the films but am indifferent toward them. It did make me laugh though. I should probably see Halloween Ends but the trailer looked terrible so I could only imagine you're right about the actual film.

Sean

Actually really liked the idea here. Some sharp writing and great potential for Fargo-esque black comedy.

Tip of the hat to SS always a nice touch.

Would love to see a shorter version of this, because you can see how it would work as a great little short film.

Your tongue is obviously firmly in cheek, but actually think you could have something fun if you knock out a rewrite.

Less Michael dialogue would be good, because the humour level jumps up with scarcity.

I found it very interesting and meta! At first the meta part of the script confused me, but I quickly got into it. I would put the meta stuff earlier on so the reader can get used to it. I've not watched any of the Halloween movies, so I feel if you're not a fan, you're missing out on a lot.

Perhaps, I could use the word 'self-aware' funny story, I'm not sure. Regardless, it was a good and enjoyable read.

Good luck.

Ok, I didn't want to like this....but OMG!  I loved it!  It verifies that both Michael and I detest all the "Halloween" remakes and to be clear, I understand his murderous rage toward anyone that prevents him from getting a puppy LOL.  This script is smart, cute and an unexpected pleasure of a read.  Might be my new favorite.  Watch out "Grave Little Toaster"!

Super fun read! The pacing was great, funny dialogue and easy to follow. I could envision this being a popular web short. Great job!

A bit patchy in parts but genuinely funny in others. Loved the popcorn hitting his mask.
What was with all the Cologne and Old Man readying himself for the Halloween viewing. I can only imagine it was a special ritual.

The story ostensibly appears to be OLD MAN's but then it's as if you ran out of steam and it switched to another house, another group - including 'sharp elbow Girl'   and then zeros in more specifically on the SS challenge, and Laurie and Michael & the 'noun', so a bit of a mish-mash for me sprinkled with some truly inspired funny moments.

The star of the show and titular character definitely needed his intro CAPPED.
He'll come looking for you for that oversight, so beware. I'd lock the doors if I was you.  

Very enjoyable, if a little discombobulated.
But worth it for the laughs.

Writer,

What is it with including links in scripts? Second one of the bunch. Sigh… Anyway, aside from all that I liked this and it’s tongue-in-cheek approach. Definitely original, but not a pisser, which is good. This was fun. Good work!

Steve

Yeah, this is clever, funny, very well written, and complies with the terms of the challenge.

Just based on principle, Michael should be freed at last!