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Just finished reading over my first draft. Pretty good for a first draft. I haven't really looked over typos and spell checking yet. The story flows quite well and I love my characters.
Obviously, there's plenty more work to do, but I'm off to a nice start.
What you just said, made me start having flashbacks. I posted something similar to what you said. Which you've been around, this is for any newbies entering. Try not to make stupid mistakes, and don't assume as I did. It's nothing like regular SS. This is the first review my eyes landed on about my script.
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Logline has me worried, as this is supposed to be a comedy and we know a dog is going to die? Well...again, let's see.
Title page very poor, as you didn't take the time or effort to delete the garbage on there.
You don't have your pages numbered, which is a problem, and you didn't take the time or effort to delete Page 6, which just looks sloppy.
OH boy - opening Slug has a time element of "CONTINUOUS"? WTF? Horrible beginning.
Writing style is very irritating right away. You're using a smartass sort of vibe and it ain't working. You've used, "we watch", "close on", and "we see", all in 1st 4 passages.
Wow, so many mistakes, spelling, punctuation, proper English. Not good.
Sorry, but this is so poorly written, it's almost like I'm reading a pisser that is written as poorly as possible for comedic effect.
Terrible. The tone is completely fucked. The writing is awful. This kind of thing actually pisses me off.
Story - weak and dumb
Characters - poor
Dialogue - awful
Prose - lowest possible score
Criteria - barely in a sewer. In fact, it's so minimal, I'm not even going to give you the points for it, as this script doesn't warrant more than a 1.0 score, and that's pushing it.
I had heartburn for three days after reading that. Take my advice, and you won't wake up to one of these. Just kidding, you probably will. Lol.
Everybody gets the Jeff special. It's like going to Denny's. In the end, no matter what you order, you're getting some variation of the Grand Slam.
Not saying you didn't deserve it. You may have, you may not. I've gotten it both ways, deserved and undeserved. (Maybe I should say it this way: some I've agreed with, some I haven't.)
I'm just saying, you can't judge the OWC experience on a Dreamscale review.
But, I agree. If you're going to survive a OWC, you do need to have a plan for surviving his reviews. The first couple hit pretty hard. After that, you learn better where to categorize them.
PK
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Many shorts available for production: comedy, thriller, drama, light horror
Only time I entered the same person trashed my script completely. Said I didn’t know how to write screenplays then argued with anyone that thought different. That script won.
Take whatever he says with a more than a pinch of salt. And if you want his approval - just write industry standard format with NO WRILIES!! 🙂
Everybody gets the Jeff special. It's like going to Denny's. In the end, no matter what you order, you're getting some variation of the Grand Slam.
Not saying you didn't deserve it. You may have, you may not. I've gotten it both ways, deserved and undeserved. (Maybe I should say it this way: some I've agreed with, some I haven't.)
I'm just saying, you can't judge the OWC experience on a Dreamscale review.
But, I agree. If you're going to survive a OWC, you do need to have a plan for surviving his reviews. The first couple hit pretty hard. After that, you learn better where to categorize them.
PK
Hey Pk,
Mine was on the deserved side of things. The main point I was trying to get across is just making sure you put your best foot forward. Which most people will. I wasn't trying to scare anyone off or meaning it's some slaughter-fest. That's my fault for not elaborating better. I posted that one cause it touched on the really dumb mistakes I made. My apologies if I made it sound that way.
Only time I entered the same person trashed my script completely. Said I didn’t know how to write screenplays then argued with anyone that thought different. That script won.
Take whatever he says with a more than a pinch of salt. And if you want his approval - just write industry standard format with NO WRILIES!! 🙂
I can't say the same . Everyone agreed with him for the most part. Lol.
Jeff has been around here a long time and may have read more scripts than anyone else. At least features. He used to be quite the reader! I think of Jeff kind of like that uncle that shows up at family gatherings, rough around the edges, tends to drink too much and stubborn as hell. Some family members wish he wouldn't come to these gatherings, but at the same time, everyone would miss him if he didn't show up for Christmas dinner.
Jeff has been around here a long time and may have read more scripts than anyone else. At least features. He used to be quite the reader! I think of Jeff kind of like that uncle that shows up at family gatherings, rough around the edges, tends to drink too much and stubborn as hell. Some family members wish he wouldn't come to these gatherings, but at the same time, everyone would miss him if he didn't show up for Christmas dinner.
Why the hell is my Uncle Bruce calling himself Jeff now?
I've said it before and will say it again: I look forward to Jeff's review every single OWC. I don't always agree but have learned a lot from him. Let's not start a OWC without giving him the chance to piss someone off.
Only time I entered the same person trashed my script completely. Said I didn’t know how to write screenplays then argued with anyone that thought different. That script won.
Take whatever he says with a more than a pinch of salt. And if you want his approval - just write industry standard format with NO WRILIES!! 🙂
What OWC was that and which was your winning script? I'd like to revisit it.
Fucking 12-page limit. I'm on page 6 and maybe a third of the way in. I'm going to have to gut this thing when I'm done.
As for Jeff's colourful reviews, I love them. One thing Uncle Jeff does well is weed out the thin-skinned. I don't agree with much of what he says, but he calls it as he sees it and his point of view is legitimate. He's part of the audience, and his voice should be heard, and if you can't handle what he says you're probably better off doing something else. Because I promise you, Uncle Jeff is not the worst you will hear.
Fucking 12-page limit. I'm on page 6 and maybe a third of the way in. I'm going to have to gut this thing when I'm done.
As for Jeff's colourful reviews, I love them. One thing Uncle Jeff does well is weed out the thin-skinned. I don't agree with much of what he says, but he calls it as he sees it and his point of view is legitimate. He's part of the audience, and his voice should be heard, and if you can't handle what he says you're probably better off doing something else. Because I promise you, Uncle Jeff is not the worst you will hear.
I also like Jeff's reviews! Enjoy them even. I just think it's good to point out that you shouldn't let his candour knock your confidence - or affect you emotionally - like it obviously did Kevin. You should do what we do - enjoy the colourful reviews. And enjoy disagreeing with them! That's basically what forums are for
Fucking 12-page limit. I'm on page 6 and maybe a third of the way in. I'm going to have to gut this thing when I'm done.
I struggled briefly with the page limit. First it was 6-10, then 7-11, but in the end it was 12 page limit because I wanted to give everyone the space to explore their ideas even if it meant a bunch of longer scripts.
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