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Itís close to midnight in a seemingly ordinary suburban home, and the annual Halloween party is over. But for this particular couple, the clean-up is only the beginning of their misfortune. For after the floors are swept and the last dish is washed, a new nightmare awaits.

A Scream is heard. It could be loud. It could be barely audible. But one thing is certain Ė it came from inside the house. Oh, another thing is certain, tooÖ

Only one of them heard it.

Your October 2019 One Week Challenge Theme and Genre are:

Theme: The Halloween After-Party
Genre: Horror *

You have one week to write a screenplay between 8 and 12 pages. Your screenplay must be properly formatted (12 pt courier font) and submitted as a PDF. Scripts are due Friday, October 11 at 11:59 EST and must be submitted to: https://simplyscripts.com/owc

There will be a Writerís Choice wherein only the participants will be asked to vote for their favorite scripts. Writerís are encouraged to read as many scripts as they can before voting. Your favorite script might just be one you did not read.

*All horror sub-genres are welcome (psychological, slasher, creature, etc.)

Writerís Choice and writers will be revealed October 18, 2019

SoÖ

ē     8 to 12 pages
ē     Properly formatted, saved as PDF
ē     Free to submit
ē     One entry per person
ē     You can revise your script as much as you like prior to submitting
ē     Please read as many scripts as you can
ē     Do not put your real name on your script. This is an anonymous challenge. Only use your real name when submitting
ē     Please put © Copyright 2019 on your title page

And Good Luck!!



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Interesting...


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Well...that's pretty open, huh?  Stevie will hate it.  HA!

But, I like it.  So I guess I'm in.


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Sweet! I love it. I'm gonna bring the blood and guts for this one.

So it just has to take place at a Halloween after party and the genre is horror. Besides that, no restrictions?
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Sweet! I love it. I'm gonna bring the blood and guts for this one.

So it just has to take place at a Halloween after party and the genre is horror. Besides that, no restrictions?


Yes, and there has to be a scream and only one of them hears it.


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Wow, the announcement was early. I usually have to wait until afternoon on a Saturday in Oz and I was barely even out of bed when this one popped up.

Steve, you mention a couple which technically is two people. Does this couple have to be a married couple or can it just be two people, unrelated etc? And, are we restricted in cast numbers, meaning these two plus whatever made that scream and obviously the thing that elicited that scream?

Other miscellaneous questions:
Why were you and Rene talking about umbrellas, and what was with the deer droppings?

Clarifying one more thing: It's set after a Halloween party, not a Halloween after-party? Jeez, I'm confusing myself now.


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Okay. Couple. They could be married, or engaged or just living together. But they must be a couple, not brother and sister or anything. Hmm, brother and sister...

Cast is open. Personally, Iíd keep it to a minimum for filming reasons.

Absolutely no umbrellas or deer droppings here. I believe that was all a ruse, but I went with it.

Yes, my initial vision is ďafterĒ a Halloween party has ended.


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The couple can obviously have children, correct?

Can the action leave the house?

And, can it be set in a "tiny house"?  


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The couple can obviously have children, correct?

Can the action leave the house?

And, can it be set in a "tiny house"?  


Sure, they can have octuplets if you want. The action can leave the house.

And they can live in a tiny house, but you are required to provide them a ďtiny horse.Ē


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Absolutely no umbrellas or deer droppings here.

I don't know about anyone else, but if someone screamed while seeing and/or walking on deer poo after a Halloween party and fled out into the rain forgetting their umbrella...


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Somebody please define the rules on horror, cause I wrote a script in the WT with blood oozing from orifices, a plane crash and a character leaving a baby to die but it wasn't horrific (horror) enough. That led me to think most of you equate horror with gore?


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I don't know about anyone else, but if someone screamed while seeing and/or walking on deer poo after a Halloween party and fled out into the rain forgetting their umbrella...


How would the deer poop get inside the house?


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How would the deer poop get inside the house?


Hence why someone would scream.
Or the house was one of off grid homes out in the middle of the countryside.
Or...

KILLER MUTANT DEER ON A RAMPAGE


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Somebody please define the rules on horror, cause I wrote a script in the WT with blood oozing from orifices, a plane crash and a character leaving a baby to die but it wasn't horrific (horror) enough. That led me to think most of you equate horror with gore?


Horror has absolutely nothing to with gore.  It can contain gore, and many times does, but as a defining element, gore has no home here.


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I agree... So, define what you believe equates to horror.

Maybe I'll just write the sequel to Mother. That was definitely a horror.


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Somebody please define the rules on horror, cause I wrote a script in the WT with blood oozing from orifices, a plane crash and a character leaving a baby to die but it wasn't horrific (horror) enough. That led me to think most of you equate horror with gore?


To me, horror is something that is scary or at least trying to be scary. Simple as that.

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I agree... So, define what you believe equates to horror.

Maybe I'll just write the sequel to Mother. That was definitely a horror.


That was definitely a "horrible" movie, but it was not horror.


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Too me, horror is something that is scary or at least trying to be scary. Simple as that.


Scary, as in "horrific", which is a few notches above just "scary".

The characters/character in a horror script, are/is put through or goes through horrific things, and as the audience, hopefully, we feel their horror, as well as the horror in the piece.



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Maybe I'll just write the sequel to Mother. That was definitely a horror.


Mother! was a comedy. The movie was funny as all hell and it was a blast and definitely NOT horror.


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Yep, when I said it was a horror I meant like Jeff said that it was a truly horrible mishmash of filmmaking. Glad you  enjoyed it, Sean. Horses for courses.


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Shockingly, I have my story in my head and even more shockingly, I'm even mapping out scenes already.

Oh boy...I can't wait to see the hate of this one!  Bring it on me!!!


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Please tell me if I am wrong.  The theme is Halloween After Party.  In the description, it says the party is over, after they are done cleaning the dishes and the last room is swept, a scream is heard.  It is only the couple in the house, or is it?

I have a great script for this one.  I just want to make sure I am reading this correctly.

I look forward to reading everyone's entries.
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Please tell me if I am wrong.  The theme is Halloween After Party.  In the description, it says the party is over, after they are done cleaning the dishes and the last room is swept, a scream is heard.  It is only the couple in the house, or is it?

I have a great script for this one.  I just want to make sure I am reading this correctly.

I look forward to reading everyone's entries.


Mike, it sounds like youíre ticking all the boxes.


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Shockingly, I have my story in my head and even more shockingly, I'm even mapping out scenes already.

Oh boy...I can't wait to see the hate of this one!  Bring it on me!!!


My idea hit me practically right away. I'm not gonna score any points for originality, but I'm having an absolute blast writing it.

Awesome challenge, Steven!
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Does the scream need to take place at the start? Or can it happen a page or two into the script?
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Steve,

Just want to clarify, the couple.  Do they have to be monogamous, Christian heterosexual couple? Or, is there some wiggle room there?

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Quoted from Zack
Does the scream need to take place at the start? Or can it happen a page or two into the script?


based on what Steven gave us, as long as it's "before midnight", I think anywhere is good, personally.



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Please tell me if I am wrong.  The theme is Halloween After Party.  In the description, it says the party is over, after they are done cleaning the dishes and the last room is swept, a scream is heard.  It is only the couple in the house, or is it?

I have a great script for this one.  I just want to make sure I am reading this correctly.

I look forward to reading everyone's entries.


IMO, there's no need to worry about what level of cleaning they are on or have already partook,

End of a party.  A couple...at least - Steven already said there can be unlimited characters and children.



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Steve,

Just want to clarify, the couple.  Do they have to be monogamous, Christian heterosexual couple? Or, is there some wiggle room there?

Don


wiggle, wiggle...you know we'll get it.  Maybe even from me!  



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Does the scream need to take place at the start? Or can it happen a page or two into the script?


Thatís fine.


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First draft is done. Feeling pretty good about what I've got. Gonna go pass out now.

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Steve,

Just want to clarify, the couple.  Do they have to be monogamous, Christian heterosexual couple? Or, is there some wiggle room there?

Don


It does not have to be your traditional couple.


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Sounds good. But I have to check. Iím assuming all types of horror are on the table. So horror/thriller. Horror/comedy. Point being itís not totally confined to supernatural scares? It is a huge category. And if the straight-horror police arenít on patrol my ideas can be free to explore their potential!
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Sounds good. But I have to check. Iím assuming all types of horror are on the table. So horror/thriller. Horror/comedy. Point being itís not totally confined to supernatural scares? It is a huge category. And if the straight-horror police arenít on patrol my ideas can be free to explore their potential!


Good point. All good horrors should have elements of other genres such as comedy/drama/romance, without them taking over the story. At the end of the day there should be no mistake - itís Horror. And itís scary as opposed to ďlaugh out loud funny.Ē


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Steven Clark:  Ticking all the boxes?


Iím assuming youíre American and Steve is UK based like me. Ticking = checking as in check things off the list.

So he means youíre hitting the brief!

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Please tell me if I am wrong.  The theme is Halloween After Party.  In the description, it says the party is over, after they are done cleaning the dishes and the last room is swept, a scream is heard.  It is only the couple in the house, or is it?

I have a great script for this one.  I just want to make sure I am reading this correctly.

I look forward to reading everyone's entries.


Yes, you read everything correctly.


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Iím Way over thinking this...my head hurts. And I still havenít got a lead.


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Can the couple be something other than humans?
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Like what? Aliens?


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Like what? Aliens?


Aliens, Vampires, ghosts, Franky and his bride  etc I think is where they were going.
Since you say "couple" I think that's open for interpretation, so long as they are a couple.
Anyway, there's something said about the guidelines which is open for interpretation,
and I'm starting my outline using said exploitation. Actually, I'd be stunned if at least one other joker other than myself had the same thought regarding this exploit.

I'll think I'l PM you on the exploitation.


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Really?  C'mon now, peeps.



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Does only one person hear the scream because the other one was vacuuming in another room?


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Does only one person hear the scream because the other one was vacuuming in another room?


It's because 1 of the couple has to be deaf.


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It's because 1 of the couple has to be deaf.


Yeah I was gonna go down that road but I figure every other script might have a deaf person.
I can only see mine come out as a comedy    Trying hard for horror


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Iím out too as my feature is the priority right now (very excited about it as itís pretty high concept and could be the one lol)

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Does only one person hear the scream because the other one was vacuuming in another room?


If u so please


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Iím out too

Will read AMAP entries too


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Can the couple be something other than humans?


But in all seriousness, I never specified humans but thatís kinda what I was thinking. So humans.  


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It goes without saying that I'm loving this challenge. I hope you guys have as much fun reading as I had writing. Lol

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Hello

Silly question time, and I donít think it has been asked so far.

Itís a question re timeline.

The main script has to be set after the party etc, and this is core to the criteria, but can we move around with the time, like flash forwards, flash backwards?

I would like to say this will help my script a lot, but since I have nothing but a selection of appalling ideas, itís not guaranteed.

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Itís a question re timeline.

The main script has to be set after the party etc, and this is core to the criteria, but can we move around with the time, like flash forwards, flash backwards?


Good question.

Iíd say only if itís essential to your story. Sure.


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I haven't come up with anything original yet. Every idea has been done a thousand times before. But I'll get something.


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I haven't come up with anything original yet. Every idea has been done a thousand times before. But I'll get something.


Screw trying to be original. Just write a fun horror script.

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It's very quiet here.  WTF?


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It's very quiet here.  WTF?


I just took it as itís the weekend and everyoneís busy doing real life stuff. That or weíre only getting three entries!


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As I started to write, I found me another loophole in the OWC, and I'm going to exploit it.
Hopefully peeps will too.


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Slight oversight on my part. Forgot the scream had to come from INSIDE the house. Gotta rethink this now.
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As I started to write, I found me another loophole in the OWC, and I'm going to exploit it.
Hopefully peeps will too.


To clarify...

One couple cleaning up.
One scream.
Only one of them hears it.

So...

Uncle Billy Bob could be passed out on the couch and Aunt Matilda could be taking a crap upstairs on the toilet. There is no character limit.

If that helps people thatís great. Iíd figure peeps would take creative initiative and run wild! Hope you all do.


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Slight oversight on my part. Forgot the scream had to come from INSIDE the house. Gotta rethink this now.


You will.


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I just took it as itís the weekend and everyoneís busy doing real life stuff. That or weíre only getting three entries!


Well, we'll have 1 from Zack and 1 from me, so minimum of 2!  HA!!  



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Don't worry. People always bow out, but somehow, they just magically manage to enter a script. Me? No. I'm way too busy for this shit!  


This "shit"?  WTF?  Pia, we need the old blood in here.  October is the classic OWC.

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Uncle Billy Bob could be passed out on the couch and Aunt Matilda could be taking a crap upstairs on the toilet. There is no character limit.

If that helps people thatís great. Iíd figure peeps would take creative initiative and run wild! Hope you all do.


If ol' Auntie Matilda does the scream while taking a dump...
well, I won't write that.


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Quoted from DarrenJamesSeeley


If ol' Auntie Matilda does the scream while taking a dump...
well, I won't write that.


I would.


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Count me in. Been watching this silently from the sidelines until something sparked. It's a weak flicker but, damn, I'll call it a spark. Maybe it's a stroke. There's a story there...

So far, this looks like the first time I'm going to watch the page count. It's going longer than expected. Time to trim some fat!
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Just finished reading over my first draft. Pretty good for a first draft. I haven't really looked over typos and spell checking yet. The story flows quite well and I love my characters.

Obviously, there's plenty more work to do, but I'm off to a nice start.


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It's very quiet here.  WTF?


I think this means you're the one who didn't hear the scream.


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Screw trying to be original. Just write a fun horror script.


Indeed. I was worrying about originality but screw it. Halloween is fun - so I'm in.
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Indeed. I was worrying about originality but screw it. Halloween is fun - so I'm in.


Now weíre talkin


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Just finished reading over my first draft. Pretty good for a first draft. I haven't really looked over typos and spell checking yet. The story flows quite well and I love my characters.

Obviously, there's plenty more work to do, but I'm off to a nice start.


What you just said, made me start having flashbacks. I posted something similar to what you said.  Which you've been around, this is for any newbies entering. Try not to make stupid mistakes, and don't assume as I did.  It's nothing like regular SS.  This is the first review my eyes landed on about my script.

Quoted Text

Logline has me worried, as this is supposed to be a comedy and we know a dog is going to die?    Well...again, let's see.

Title page very poor, as you didn't take the time or effort to delete the garbage on there.

You don't have your pages numbered, which is a problem, and you didn't take the time or effort to delete Page 6, which just looks sloppy.

OH boy - opening Slug has a time element of "CONTINUOUS"?  WTF?  Horrible beginning.

Writing style is very irritating right away.  You're using a smartass sort of vibe and it ain't working.  You've used, "we watch", "close on", and "we see", all in 1st 4 passages.

Wow, so many mistakes, spelling, punctuation, proper English.  Not good.

Sorry, but this is so poorly written, it's almost like I'm reading a pisser that is written as poorly as possible for comedic effect.

Terrible.  The tone is completely fucked.  The writing is awful.  This kind of thing actually pisses me off.

Story - weak and dumb

Characters - poor

Dialogue - awful

Prose - lowest possible score

Criteria - barely in a sewer.  In fact, it's so minimal, I'm not even going to give you the points for it, as this script doesn't warrant more than a 1.0 score, and that's pushing it.



I had heartburn for three days after reading that.   Take my advice, and you won't wake up
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Kevin,

Everybody gets the Jeff special. It's like going to Denny's. In the end, no matter what you order, you're getting some variation of the Grand Slam.

Not saying you didn't deserve it. You may have, you may not. I've gotten it both ways, deserved and undeserved. (Maybe I should say it this way: some I've agreed with, some I haven't.)

I'm just saying, you can't judge the OWC experience on a Dreamscale review.

But, I agree. If you're going to survive a OWC, you do need to have a plan for surviving his reviews. The first couple hit pretty hard. After that, you learn better where to categorize them.

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Only time I entered the same person trashed my script completely. Said I didnít know how to write screenplays then argued with anyone that thought different. That script won.

Take whatever he says with a more than a pinch of salt. And if you want his approval - just write industry standard format with NO WRILIES!! 🙂
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Kevin,

Everybody gets the Jeff special. It's like going to Denny's. In the end, no matter what you order, you're getting some variation of the Grand Slam.

Not saying you didn't deserve it. You may have, you may not. I've gotten it both ways, deserved and undeserved. (Maybe I should say it this way: some I've agreed with, some I haven't.)

I'm just saying, you can't judge the OWC experience on a Dreamscale review.

But, I agree. If you're going to survive a OWC, you do need to have a plan for surviving his reviews. The first couple hit pretty hard. After that, you learn better where to categorize them.

PK

Hey Pk,

Mine was on the deserved side of things.  The main point I was trying to get across is just making sure you put your best foot forward. Which most people will.   I wasn't trying to scare anyone off or meaning it's some slaughter-fest. That's my fault for not elaborating better.   I posted that one cause
it touched on the really dumb mistakes I made.  My apologies if I made it sound that way.

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Only time I entered the same person trashed my script completely. Said I didnít know how to write screenplays then argued with anyone that thought different. That script won.

Take whatever he says with a more than a pinch of salt. And if you want his approval - just write industry standard format with NO WRILIES!! 🙂


I can't say the same . Everyone agreed with him for the most part.  Lol.  
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Jeff has been around here a long time and may have read more scripts than anyone else. At least features. He used to be quite the reader! I think of Jeff kind of like that uncle that shows up at family gatherings, rough around the edges, tends to drink too much and stubborn as hell. Some family members wish he wouldn't come to these gatherings, but at the same time, everyone would miss him if he didn't show up for Christmas dinner.  


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Jeff has been around here a long time and may have read more scripts than anyone else. At least features. He used to be quite the reader! I think of Jeff kind of like that uncle that shows up at family gatherings, rough around the edges, tends to drink too much and stubborn as hell. Some family members wish he wouldn't come to these gatherings, but at the same time, everyone would miss him if he didn't show up for Christmas dinner.  


Why the hell is my Uncle Bruce calling himself Jeff now?


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I've said it before and will say it again: I look forward to Jeff's review every single OWC. I don't always agree but have learned a lot from him. Let's not start a OWC without giving him the chance to piss someone off.

Come on, buddy. Push my buttons!
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Kevin,

Only time I entered the same person trashed my script completely. Said I didnít know how to write screenplays then argued with anyone that thought different. That script won.

Take whatever he says with a more than a pinch of salt. And if you want his approval - just write industry standard format with NO WRILIES!! 🙂


What OWC was that and which was your winning script?  I'd like to revisit it.



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Uncle Jeff.  Hey, that's better than Grandpa Jeff.


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Fucking 12-page limit. I'm on page 6 and maybe a third of the way in. I'm going to have to gut this thing when I'm done.

As for Jeff's colourful reviews, I love them. One thing Uncle Jeff does well is weed out the thin-skinned. I don't agree with much of what he says, but he calls it as he sees it and his point of view is legitimate. He's part of the audience, and his voice should be heard, and if you can't handle what he says you're probably better off doing something else. Because I promise you, Uncle Jeff is not the worst you will hear.


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What OWC was that and which was your winning script?  I'd like to revisit it.



The script was called A BEAUTIFUL DAY

It was the no dialogue challenge.
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Fucking 12-page limit. I'm on page 6 and maybe a third of the way in. I'm going to have to gut this thing when I'm done.

As for Jeff's colourful reviews, I love them. One thing Uncle Jeff does well is weed out the thin-skinned. I don't agree with much of what he says, but he calls it as he sees it and his point of view is legitimate. He's part of the audience, and his voice should be heard, and if you can't handle what he says you're probably better off doing something else. Because I promise you, Uncle Jeff is not the worst you will hear.


I also like Jeff's reviews! Enjoy them even. I just think it's good to point out that you shouldn't let his candour knock your confidence - or affect you emotionally - like it obviously did Kevin. You should do what we do - enjoy the colourful reviews. And enjoy disagreeing with them! That's basically what forums are for
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Fucking 12-page limit. I'm on page 6 and maybe a third of the way in. I'm going to have to gut this thing when I'm done.


I struggled briefly with the page limit. First it was 6-10, then 7-11, but in the end it was 12 page limit because I wanted to give everyone the space to explore their ideas even if it meant a bunch of longer scripts.



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And as far as Jeffís reviews go, what can I say? Theyíre colorful and I, for one, would always anxiously await to see if heíd trash me or not. At the end of the day, I think Jeff takes writing so seriously that if he spots a poorly written script it almost an insult to him. As in, the writer didnít take the time necessary to polish it and make it the best it could be. Thatís fair. Other times heís (weíre) not taking into account this could be a new writer - and Iíve seen a lot of SS regulars able to spot that and leave reviews that are toned-down and helpful.


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I struggled briefly with the page limit. First it was 6-10, then 7-11, but in the end it was 12 page limit because I wanted to give everyone the space to explore their ideas even if it meant a bunch of longer scripts.



12 pages is more than reasonable. I'm just grumpy because I like what I have and it's going too long.  


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The script was called A BEAUTIFUL DAY

It was the no dialogue challenge.


Thanks.

I reread it, and I stand by my comments.  It was well written for sure, but the style on display annoyed me for some reason.  The biggest issue for me was the ending, as I said several times.  It just didn't make sense to me that a guy would torture and/or kill someone like that, even if he thought she was drunk and caused his partner's death.  I also think on film it would not play out as you and the readers who loved it think...unless it was rewritten with some changes to the end.

But, again, it was unique read and well written, so good on you.



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Thanks.

I reread it, and I stand by my comments.  It was well written for sure, but the style on display annoyed me for some reason.  The biggest issue for me was the ending, as I said several times.  It just didn't make sense to me that a guy would torture and/or kill someone like that, even if he thought she was drunk and caused his partner's death.  I also think on film it would not play out as you and the readers who loved it think...unless it was rewritten with some changes to the end.

But, again, it was unique read and well written, so good on you.



Cheers. And talking of killing  ... I better get on with my Halloween entry mwahahahaha!
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Nothing comes to me this time. I fear I have to go search for something now.

My initial thoughts began at the incident, the scream. And I found/find nothing original there. Maybe a horse and cart thingÖ just clueless atm.



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Nothing comes to me this time. I fear I have to go search for something now.

My initial thoughts began at the incident, the scream. And I found/find nothing original there. Maybe a horse and cart thingÖ just clueless atm.


Your characters backstories can be anything. Anything. The scream could be anything.

Explore the space!


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Your characters backstories can be anything. Anything. The scream could be anything.

Explore the space!


I'll do my best and otherwise will take the reader only ticket for sure

Then it all sounds so bourgeois-ly boring; couple in a suburban house; I mean, that's what you do when things go the "usual route" in life. I know there are possibilities but just at the look at this...

And, sorry to probably annoy you, as I did with the bunch of foregone OWC hostsÖ but is there a possibility to extend the timeframe for reading ??? more than 15-20 in a week is just hard for me to do every read justice... smiley out




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And, sorry to probably annoy you, as I did with the bunch of foregone OWC hostsÖ but is there a possibility to extend the timeframe for reading ??? more than 15-20 in a week is just hard for me to do every read justice... smiley out


I thought about that. Weíll see how many entries we get.


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The problem with extended read times is that after a week, peeps lose interest and the thread goes very quiet.

IMO, it's always exciting to see who wrote what and how the voting goes, and a week even feels pretty long.


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I vote commitment to the seven day review rule. Read as many as you can and review appropriately. I may never have been an elaborate critic/reviewer but I usually get them all read.

I agree that prolonging the review period promotes disinterest. We're in this for the thrill, right?
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Some October OWCs have had over 40 entries. No way I'm reading that many in a week. 20-something, I will try to squeeze that in.


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Speaking as an entrant - I wouldnít want over to wait over the week either.
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Some October OWCs have had over 40 entries. No way I'm reading that many in a week. 20-something, I will try to squeeze that in.


Read what you can, comment on what you feel like.  Vote for mine.

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The problem with extended read times is that after a week, peeps lose interest and the thread goes very quiet.


I know, I know... just speaking in my own interest here (and part of a clear minority I think),,, I know that .

Anyway, usually I'm one of those few who clock in during the very last days of week two, but, but you know - I then have it done and did it many times like that. Without a breath in the everyday world of one week, the read of a script among dozens of entries could simply not be a qualified read from my side, and my feedback surely would lack substance. And I won't do that but rather would pick scripts by title and slugline, if so...

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Correct me if I'm wrong but I'm pretty sure two weeks, sometimes a bit more, is allocated by Don for reads. More than enough imh. As Jeff said, after the initial excitement during the first week things do go quiet. Be nice if that didn't happen but it typically does cause even if everyone who entered hasn't commented (like they should) they've opened every script and had a look, if not a proper read and review.


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Correct me if I'm wrong but I'm pretty sure two weeks, sometimes a bit more, is allocated by Don for reads. More than enough imh. As Jeff said, after the initial excitement during the first week things do go quiet. Be nice if that didn't happen but it typically does cause even if everyone who entered hasn't commented (like they should) they've opened every script and had a look, if not a proper read and review.


I think it's usually a week to read and comment, but some have gone longer and that's when the thread and the excitement dies.



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and the excitement dies.


Like when Jeffís pants come down and his lady friend finally gets to see whatís what.



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Like when Jeffís pants come down and his lady friend finally gets to see whatís what.





No shit...it's no fun getting old.  Because of my giant belly, I haven't even seen the old guy in quite some time.  Reminds me of that old song about the old gray goose, not being what it used to be.





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Speaking as an entrant - I wouldnít want over to wait over the week either.


Because we're all impatient and want the results.  

However, I know several people who do not enter due to the fact that they know they won't have the time to read all entries in seven days...


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Yeah, itís a tough call. I know we all have real jobs and stuff and itís hard to get all those reads in. I remember my first OWC, October 2013. It was the one with witches and warlocks. We had 50 entries or so. Crazy, I was so stoked I managed to read them all, but thatís just me.

That said, I agree to...wait and see!


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Because we're all impatient and want the results.  

However, I know several people who do not enter due to the fact that they know they won't have the time to read all entries in seven days...


Agreed.

I'll promise to read everything and then disappear for months on end. So can feel less guilty when I don't enter.


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Agreed.

I'll promise to read everything and then disappear for months on end. So can feel less guilty when I don't enter.


Andrew, you fucker!  What up?  How's thangs?  Where you been, Wilson?



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Because we're all impatient and want the results.  

However, I know several people who do not enter due to the fact that they know they won't have the time to read all entries in seven days...


Exactly!

But if extended time to read would mean more entries ... then weíd need even MORE time to read them! Caught in an ever expanding reading cycle ... could be an October OWC entry.
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Just read through my second draft. I'll do at least one more before I submit. I have a few minor things I'm thinking of revising.


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But if extended time to read would mean more entries ... then weíd need even MORE time to read them! Caught in an ever expanding reading cycle ... could be an October OWC entry.


Not really, because no one is required to read ALL entries. Nice if people do, but not at all required. A big misconception of the OWC.


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Not really, because no one is required to read ALL entries. Nice if people do, but not at all required. A big misconception of the OWC.


Oh ... in that case why do people not enter because they canít read all the entries when they donít have to read all entries? Confusing.

But no need to answer this. It doesnít really matter and time wanted/needed to read scripts is different for everyone. This is only the second time iíve Got involved for a long list of boring time reasons.
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Andrew, you fucker!  What up?  How's thangs?  Where you been, Wilson?



Jeff, you old dog!

Good, mate, and you?

Entering the OWC?


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Jeff, you old dog!

Good, mate, and you?

Entering the OWC?


Hanging in there. No fun getting old.  I need to fix my knee, as I've gained 30 pounds, not being able to exercise, but the process has begun, so things should be improving and by the end of the year, I should be back to my "old" self.

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Back to the drawing board for me. Lol

Oh well. My script will be stronger because of it.
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Back to the drawing board for me. Lol

Oh well. My script will be stronger because of it.


What happened?



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Iím hoping to enter...

Hurdles to over come include how to bloody write one of these things, remembering screenplay format and that my software was deleted, and then ran out of license. Hey ho.

I knew it was a while, but still.

I think this challenge is a bit trickier than first appears, well to me anyway. Some things like Ďafter the partyí I have found to be quite restraining, as is the location. It is almost one of the those low budget criteria to help get things filmed. Whatís the betting someone wanting to film a script lurks behind this criteria. Probably not, but it has happened before.

Whatís been nice for me is that for four years I have been retraining and the evening school element sucked the writing out of me. Last week I finished, which was good timing, and I seem to be more open to having a go.

Anyway, back to business.

Mind you, I do hope folk donít get too bogged down on the criteria etc (I think mines fine my the way) - it can be shame when great offence is taken when clearly someone did try.


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Iím hoping to enter...

Hurdles to over come include how to bloody write one of these things, remembering screenplay format and that my software was deleted, and then ran out of license. Hey ho.

I knew it was a while, but still.

I think this challenge is a bit trickier than first appears, well to me anyway. Some things like Ďafter the partyí I have found to be quite restraining, as is the location. It is almost one of the those low budget criteria to help get things filmed. Whatís the betting someone wanting to film a script lurks behind this criteria. Probably not, but it has happened before.

Whatís been nice for me is that for four years I have been retraining and the evening school element sucked the writing out of me. Last week I finished, which was good timing, and I seem to be more open to having a go.

Anyway, back to business.

Mind you, I do hope folk donít get too bogged down on the criteria etc (I think mines fine my the way) - it can be shame when great offence is taken when clearly someone did try.


Bill,

Youíre not wrong about filming criteria. Though I have no intention of filming anything, I did provide the criteria - 2 characters (minimum), inside the house - as sort of a guideline with filming in mind. I love seeing these things get produced, and if it came from a challenge I introduced Iíd be more than proud.

But like Iíve been saying - explore the space! Want more than two characters? Great! Want the action to move outside the house? Thatís fine too.

Just write a good damn script!


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And no questions you might have about the challenge are dumb or tedious. Feel free to pm as much as u want, or ask here.

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Fully understood and a decent approach

Personally I will add marks for those including  a deer resting under an umbrella  

Now that would be a challenge

As it stands , itís hard enough for me already. I donít expect a particularly good  script from me, but hopefully adequate under the circumstances


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What happened?


I'm dumb and I missed the fact that the scream has to come from inside the house. Lol


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Iím hoping to enter...

Hurdles to over come include how to bloody write one of these things, remembering screenplay format and that my software was deleted, and then ran out of license. Hey ho.


In case it helps and you have Ms WordÖ the general standard page margins there are left 1,5" -- top, right and bottom 1" each. If page is adjusted like that you have dialogue name at + 2,3"---
dialogue box is from left +1" to from the right +1,5"

The brackets should be fine with using the tab (indent key).

When you have your elements adjusted once: mark one correctly set element (like say a dialogue box), then watch for the Word upper toolbar in the main surface toolbar Ė there's a brush -double-click it Ė then you can copy each element and overwrite the format in the format you originally have marked by just clicking on itÖ There are great templates from the internet too that I use and do the job differentlyÖ but that's another thing.

Then, it's very important to adjust the line distance of the whole document - 12 pt and check the box "exact". Just if you need this shit. It'll at least bring you to standard




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I'm dumb and I missed the fact that the scream has to come from inside the house. Lol




It's not as restrictive as it sounds. No matter where he's standing, any time Dr. House screams, the scream is coming from inside the House.

I am almost certainly not going to be in this one. Work stuff isn't helping, but the complete lack of a viable story idea contributed as well  


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In case it helps and you have Ms WordÖ the general standard page margins there are left 1,5" -- top, right and bottom 1" each. If page is adjusted like that you have dialogue name at + 2,3"---
dialogue box is from left +1" to from the right +1,5"

The brackets should be fine with using the tab (indent key).

When you have your elements adjusted once: mark one correctly set element (like say a dialogue box), then watch for the Word upper toolbar in the main surface toolbar Ė there's a brush -double-click it Ė then you can copy each element and overwrite the format in the format you originally have marked by just clicking on itÖ There are great templates from the internet too that I use and do the job differentlyÖ but that's another thing.

Then, it's very important to adjust the line distance of the whole document - 12 pt and check the box "exact". Just if you need this shit. It'll at least bring you to standard


that was very kind of you, but I did manage to sort out the software - it was just another hurdle to get over.


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Another good question popped up.

The house theyíre in can be any type of house that you would live in: ranch, split ranch, mansion, etc.  

I put ďlive inĒ in case someone mentioned ďout house.Ē


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Another good question popped up.

The house theyíre in can be any type of house that you would live in: ranch, split ranch, mansion, etc.  

I put ďlive inĒ in case someone mentioned ďout house.Ē


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Why do I get the feeling that...at least one script will have the scream come from the late night horror movie playing on the television?



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Why do I get the feeling that...at least one script will have the scream come from the late night horror movie playing on the television?



It just occurred to me - I never said the scream had to be human, did I?


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Why do I get the feeling that...at least one script will have the scream come from the late night horror movie playing on the television?



I wonder how creative people will get with the scream. I'm using it in a pretty creative way, or at least I hope so. Lol

Got 7 solid pages and the action is just about to ramp the fuck up.

Where are you at, Jeff? You get a draft knocked out yet?

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Looks like I'll be in.


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It just occurred to me - I never said the scream had to be human, did I?

Oh, come on now, really?

Oh, hmm okay...

https://www.nationalgeographic.....s-halloween-science/

After the challenge I'll be interested in what inspired the challenge perameters, Stevo.

The after-party scenario is an interesting choice given the standard would have been the actual party as drama/horror.


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Oh, come on now, really?

Oh, hmm okay...

https://www.nationalgeographic.....s-halloween-science/

After the challenge I'll be interested in what inspired the challenge perameters, Stevo.

The after-party scenario is an interesting choice given the standard would have been the actual party as drama/horror.


Iíll tell ya now if you want.


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Itís pretty simple really. I chose after the party because I thought during the party would have just gotten things too cluttered, too many characters, too much shit going on. I wanted  a couple to hear the scream because, letís face it, bad shit usually happens when no one else is around. Thatís when I thought, well what if only one of them hears the scream.

I explained to Bill earlier that this was kind of set up this way to make it easier to film - most likely one location, low character count and, of course, horror.

Other than that, there really was no grand scheme. I feel lucky I was able to come up with anything at all.

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I've got a second solid first draft. Now to clean this nasty bitch up.
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And what about you, Matt Taylor? You in, Dude?


Nah, I'm out. Not a fan of writing horror and I should really concentrate on the many other projects I have started and not finished

I will jump into the reading though  


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Quite happy with my third draft. Definitely the one I'm gonna submit.

Now to come up with a good logline.


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Last minute reminder, and only because I just now noticed, but on the submission page you can scroll through a list of all the horror sub genres. So if you wanted to do, say, a Faith Based/Family Horror, youíre good.


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Phew. Been beavering away every lunch break and I have a first draft. Iíll take a run through it tomorrow lunch and in it goes.
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I haven't started yet.  I also haven't really thought about it since I came up with the idea over the weekend.

I'd like to say I'll write it today, but I bet I'll actually get to it tomorrow...hopefully sooner than later.


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I haven't started yet.  I also haven't really thought about it since I came up with the idea over the weekend.

I'd like to say I'll write it today, but I bet I'll actually get to it tomorrow...hopefully sooner than later.


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You slacker!


Yeah...you're right.  I'll get i done, though.  Don't worry.



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Yeah...you're right.  I'll get i done, though.  Don't worry.



I've got faith in ya, Dude. Hope you come up with something awesome.
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I haven't started yet.  I also haven't really thought about it since I came up with the idea over the weekend.

I'd like to say I'll write it today, but I bet I'll actually get to it tomorrow...hopefully sooner than later.


That old chestnut- bet heís been sweating over this for hours  

As well as other things, but we wonít linger in that  


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please ignore my wish for an extended timeframe for reading. There's no entrance to be expected from my side, so I have no argument to proclaim. Good luck



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C'mon, Alex! Don't throw in the towel just yet. You've still got 29 hours to get an entry in. You've got this, Dude.
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C'mon, Alex! Don't throw in the towel just yet. You've still got 29 hours to get an awesome Halloween story down.


There's a possible concept, yes. Then I have a new job, and as an ESL speaker, the execution of 8 pages is hard in a day. And more than that I generally, personally, think, that 8 pages is too long for a short movie.  I cannot truly identify with such length. It's like reaaallly backstory. Maybe with some luck tomorrow...



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Looks like I'm going to be waiting until the last day.  Oh boy...


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First draft done. 9 pages of gold, three that stink like warm puke.

I won't have time to go over it again until tomorrow evening. At least the puke won't be warm any more.


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I won't have time to go over it again until tomorrow evening. At least the puke won't be warm any more.


That's what the microwave is for!
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please ignore my wish for an extended timeframe for reading. There's no entrance to be expected from my side, so I have no argument to proclaim. Good luck


Youíre good, Alex.



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Hanging in there. No fun getting old.  I need to fix my knee, as I've gained 30 pounds, not being able to exercise, but the process has begun, so things should be improving and by the end of the year, I should be back to my "old" self.

Yes, I will be entering this Hallowed OWC.



Sorry to hear that, dude. On the brightside, 30 pounds is quite a lot of extra thrust. So I'm sure any Mrs Jeff's won't be complaining.

As for me, re: OWC, I'm busy trying to write The Shining, but have something more resembling The Shitting.

I like the idea, but am getting bogged down in the execution. It's just 8-pages of structure free shite right now. Going to try and get it into shape for an entry, but no better than 50-50 right now.


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I wrote something brilliant, but knowing it would be so spectacular and far better than anyone else's entry, I decided not to enter it. I had all your egos in mind when making this decision.  


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I wrote something brilliant, but knowing it would be so spectacular and far better than anyone else's entry, I decided not to enter it. I had all your egos in mind when making this decision.  


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I wrote something brilliant, but knowing it would be so spectacular and far better than anyone else's entry, I decided not to enter it. I had all your egos in mind when making this decision.  


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I wrote something brilliant, but knowing it would be so spectacular and far better than anyone else's entry, I decided not to enter it. I had all your egos in mind when making this decision.  


Send it to me, and I'll pretend it's mine.


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On the submission page:


Quoted Text
Source material:* [URL or title of source material]


Do we just say it's an original story? I'm confused. This seems to be a leftover from the Fairy Tale challenge.

Anyway, just submitted.


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I was stuck for an idea until Jeff sent me the video of his ill fated audition for The Human Centipede filmed in the Rams locker room. I can honestly say my script is sickening but lavishly put together. Luckily Jeffís extra pounds hide a lot of the gross stuff.


Good for you Andrew! Iím happy to read it as long as thereís no plans to actually film it


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Andrew,  Iím happy as long as it's big.  That's what I like in my arse!(


Dude...Stevie.  C'mon man.  That's kind of gross, bro.



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Submitted. Feeling pretty good about what I've got.
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The good new is I had time last night to re write the script.

The bad news is that I had a few to drink and it's a pile of trash on re reading.

its amazing what seems a great idea at the time.

whoops - and only 21 hrs, 28 mins left, which is more than I have anyway as that would make it 5am in the morning!!


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Okay mine's in. How long between the deadline and them being posted for reading? I have a few hours window tomorrow afternoon while my daughter's at a B-day party. But that's GMT (english time) so Saturday morning EST. I'm guessing they probably won't be posted by then?
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Okay mine's in. How long between the deadline and them being posted for reading? I have a few hours window tomorrow afternoon while my daughter's at a B-day party. But that's GMT (english time) so Saturday morning EST. I'm guessing they probably won't be posted by then?


Donís usually right on top of getting them posted quickly. Judging from past OWCís, Saturday around noon EST, but donít hold me to that.


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Donís usually right on top of getting them posted quickly. Judging from past OWCís, Saturday around noon EST, but donít hold me to that.


Awesome! Thanks.
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The good new is I had time last night to re write the script.

The bad news is that I had a few to drink and it's a pile of trash on re reading.

its amazing what seems a great idea at the time.

whoops - and only 21 hrs, 28 mins left, which is more than I have anyway as that would make it 5am in the morning!!


You remind me of that kid in school who frets and stresses the most about the big math test and then gets a 98


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Do we just say it's an original story? I'm confused. This seems to be a leftover from the Fairy Tale challenge.

Anyway, just submitted.


I havenít the foggiest. Maybe Don can enlighten us. Iíd just leave it blank.


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You remind me of that kid in school who frets and stresses the most about the big math test and then gets a 98


Iíll take that  


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Going over my script. Think it's actually pretty good. Gonna tweak a few things when I get off work, then resubmit an updated draft.

What about you, Jeff? You get that beast hammered out yet?
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What about you, Jeff? You get that beast hammered out yet?


I'm pretty sure he hammered the beast last night, and every night. My money's on a blank page though.


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Going over my script. Think it's actually pretty good. Gonna tweak a few things when I get off work, then resubmit an updated draft.

What about you, Jeff? You get that beast hammered out yet?


No, bad night.  My garage freezer tokk a shit and we lost hundreds of dollars of frozen meat and seafood, and spent hours trying to save what we could.  They're not coming to fix it until Monday, so we have everything we could saved crammed into our remaining 2 freezers and that's not good.

Nothing written at all, and no real thought about it this week.

This ain't looking good.


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I'm pretty sure he hammered the beast last night, and every night. My money's on a blank page though.


I got hammered last night, but you are correct - blank page...or even worse, screenwriting software hasn't even been opened up yet and I have a Dental appointment this afternoon.



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I have a Dental appointment this afternoon.

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No, bad night.  My garage freezer tokk a shit and we lost hundreds of dollars of frozen meat and seafood, and spent hours trying to save what we could.  They're not coming to fix it until Monday, so we have everything we could saved crammed into our remaining 2 freezers and that's not good.

Nothing written at all, and no real thought about it this week.

This ain't looking good.


Did you scream when you noticed the freezer which only one 1/2 of another couple heard?... could be the start of things right there


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I'm pretty sure he hammered the beast last night, and every night. My money's on a blank page though.


Lmao. Whatever Jeff ends up writing, I'll bet you it won't have any orphans or wrylies.
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Two more days with the Grandsons before they leave - a hectic week. They are 4 and 6 and move around like cats with shock collars - Grandpas' knees, elbows, arms, ankles - et al have never been sorer. But a delight to have. Anyway - they're out with Grandma right now so thought I'd check in to wish everyone entering good luck.

Of course, I though the best story premise was here:


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No, bad night.  My garage freezer tokk a shit and we lost hundreds of dollars of frozen meat and seafood, and spent hours trying to save what we could.  They're not coming to fix it until Monday, so we have everything we could saved crammed into our remaining 2 freezers and that's not good.

Nothing written at all, and no real thought about it this week.

This ain't looking good.


An aging, weight-laden man just off of dental surgery and ripped from a combination of beer and Oxycontin hears a muffled scream emanating from the basement freezer.

His long suffering girlfriend, convinced that he's lost his marbles years ago, let's him explore that basement alone. He creaks the freezer lid open and discovers --

SATAN'S ORPHAN!  His only chance at survival - ignore it and move on like any rational person would . But he can't. He just can't! It's kill or be killed time now.  

He hears his girlfriend yell as she slams and locks the basement door - "I'm out!" This is Crap!"

Our drunken hero's eyes narrow as he returns his gaze to the freezer holding the demonic orphan.....


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Lmao. Whatever Jeff ends up writing, I'll bet you it won't have any orphans or wrylies.


I'm actually writing this one in Word and it will be loaded with mistakes of all kinds.


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I'm actually writing this one in Word and it will be loaded with mistakes of all kinds.


Why are you writing in Word???
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Why are you writing in Word???


Why not?  It will look worse.



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Why are you writing in Word???


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Ok, I've run out of time, so I have entered what I have.

Having been out of this for some time, my thick skin seems to have gone. Im all very nervous.

Please may folk;

1] be kind  

2] be kind...to me  

3] be tolerant of those who have made some format mistakes etc

4] don't have a fit over different interpretations of the criteria

5] enjoy the script for what they are - most are written with passion and effort

otherwise, I look forward to seeing what emerges tomorrow

thanks don, Steven

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Iím still horrified about a whole freezer of meat and seafood going to waste. But inspired by Jeff having two other freezers to save it. Talk about high steaks! Thereís a feature there ...
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Ok, I've run out of time, so I have entered what I have.

Having been out of this for some time, my thick skin seems to have gone. Im all very nervous.

Please may folk;

1] be kind  

2] be kind...to me  

3] be tolerant of those who have made some format mistakes etc

4] don't have a fit over different interpretations of the criteria

5] enjoy the script for what they are - most are written with passion and effort

otherwise, I look forward to seeing what emerges tomorrow

thanks don, Steven

PS - nice to be back - well until I read Jeff's comments  


Regarding number 3... you really should put periods at the end of all your sentences. Plus, capitalize the first word of every sentence. This is basic stuff. Makes me question your dedication to the craft.


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Got mine finished now but it's only 6 almost 7 pages long. Will try and stretch it out where I can though. 7 hours left so I should be able to think up some sort of filler.
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Iím still horrified about a whole freezer of meat and seafood going to waste. But inspired by Jeff having two other freezers to save it. Talk about high steaks! Thereís a feature there ...


The freezer that died is a standup, full size freezer.  The "other" 2 freezers are simply regular refrigerator/freezers, meaning not much room in the freezer section.

I think I need a 3rd fridge/freezer.  I need lots of food to keep my weight increasing.



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Going on 2:00 here and I still haven't even opened my screenwriting software.  This is not a good sign.  It's not looking like it's going to happen, sorry to say.

I will do my best to shit on Bill's entry, though.  


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Regarding number 3... you really should put periods at the end of all your sentences. Plus, capitalize the first word of every sentence. This is basic stuff. Makes me question your dedication to the craft.


You see this is the kind of stuff that needs flagging  

I talk of tolerance, PK mentions capital letters  

Welcome back to the OWC for me !!

Joking aside, enjoy this folks. iím off to bed.

I look forward to reading them all this weekend and next week. Indeed,  that reminds me what it is feels like, as a writer,  to go through the reading week.

See you tomorrow



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Grieving Spell - winner - London Film Awards.††Third - Honolulu
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Going on 2:00 here and I still haven't even opened my screenwriting software.  This is not a good sign.  It's not looking like it's going to happen, sorry to say.

I will do my best to shit on Bill's entry, though.  


I caught that just before going to bed.

Youíve ruined my sleep!!

I will look out for your entry, Mr Dark horse.



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You see this is the kind of stuff that needs flagging  

I talk of tolerance, PK mentions capital letters  

Welcome back to the OWC for me !!

Joking aside, enjoy this folks. iím off to bed.

I look forward to reading them all this weekend and next week. Indeed,  that reminds me what it is feels like, as a writer,  to go through the reading week.

See you tomorrow



I hope it was clear that I was just making a joke.



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I hope it was clear that I was just making a joke.



I wasn't.




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Looks like I'm out. All I have is 5 pages of total crud.  


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I'm actually going to try and get something done.  On page 2.


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I wasn't.




About the meat? Yeah, nobody jokes about things like that.

"Steaks were lost that night."

Only thing worse was if there was bacon involved. That would be a tragedy too great to bear.


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Going on 2:00 here and I still haven't even opened my screenwriting software.  This is not a good sign.  It's not looking like it's going to happen, sorry to say.

I will do my best to shit on Bill's entry, though.  


No way, Dude! You have to get something in!
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About the meat? Yeah, nobody jokes about things like that.

"Steaks were lost that night."

Only thing worse was if there was bacon involved. That would be a tragedy too great to bear.


Yeah, for sure.  There was 4 pounds of smoked bacon, in 4 Food Saver bags.  I saved those bad boys for sure!



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No way, Dude! You have to get something in!


On Page 3.  Doing my best, but the girlfriend comes home in about an hour, and we all know how that turned out last time I tried to write something Friday night...



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Yeah, for sure.  There was 4 pounds of smoked bacon, in 4 Food Saver bags.  I saved those bad boys for sure!



Oh, thank god. I was thinking this was a horror. Turned out to be a romcom.

Mmmmm. Bacon.


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I hope it was clear that I was just making a joke.

I thought it was funny.  
Real men don't use emoji.


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I thought it was funny.  
Real men don't use emoji.


I do!!!



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I thought it was funny.  
Real men don't use emoji.


I was strong.

Until I wasn't.


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Although I still might change that logline by midnight.
The OWC turned out better than I thought it would be, but I didn't think I was going to make it. I struggled for the last two days on the ending. When in doubt, go with your guts.


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See that behind the 8-ball? Yeah, that's me. I think I'm going to pull a Rene and get this in with just minutes left. Been stuck on page 8 for three days. Damn it.
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I will be in!  Just finishing it up, then I'll let it sit for awhile and finally submit well before the deadline.

It ain't anything great, but you just never know.  Peeps may enjoy it.


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Sorry bud

With work and family drama I just didn't have anytime not even a Friday night special

Good luck running your first OWC you deserve it


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Sorry bud

With work and family drama I just didn't have anytime not even a Friday night special

Good luck running your first OWC you deserve it


You Irish bog bastard!

Crack open a Guinness for me. Actually a Killians


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See that behind the 8-ball? Yeah, that's me. I think I'm going to pull a Rene and get this in with just minutes left. Been stuck on page 8 for three days. Damn it.


You've got this, Dude. Bust something out with a bunch of gore and some edgy nudity.
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Crack open a Guinness for me.

Did anyone say Guinness???


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Did anyone say Guinness???


Would actually prefer a White Russian. I abide.


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See that behind the 8-ball? Yeah, that's me. I think I'm going to pull a Rene and get this in with just minutes left. Been stuck on page 8 for three days. Damn it.


How'd you know???


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Would actually prefer a White Russian. I abide.


I'll take a white Russian.  About 5' 3", 27 years old, and speaks in broken Eastern European dialect with a very shapely body!  



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I'll take a white Russian.  About 5' 23', 27 years old, and speaks in broken Eastern European dialect!  



Just make sure she puts the lotion in the basket.


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The Kid is in.  The girlfriend, Teri, gave it a read and didn't kick me in the nutsack, so that's a real positive.

We'll see...


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I'll take a white Russian.  About 5' 3", 27 years old, and speaks in broken Eastern European dialect with a very shapely body!  



Meet Vlad. He's into beat boxing and darts. Drinks vodka like a champion. You'll hit it off great.


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Done and submitted! With a whole...47 minutes to spare!!!

I had to order pizza and ignore my kids for three hours, but I did it. Let the thrashing ensue!


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Hello SS peeps! I haven't written much of anything in 4 years. But my divorce is finally final and I got the writing bug again. This one is rusty as hell...but I'm in dammit!!


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Hello SS peeps! I haven't written much of anything in 4 years. But my divorce is finally final and I got the writing bug again. This one is rusty as hell...but I'm in dammit!!


Welcome! Don't worry, we're all very tame and well mannered here.





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Welcome! Don't worry, we're all very tame and well mannered here.





What???? Really??? LOL. Is that a new development?


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Hello SS peeps! I haven't written much of anything in 4 years. But my divorce is finally final and I got the writing bug again. This one is rusty as hell...but I'm in dammit!!


Welcome back, Marnie!


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Is Don the best or is Don the best?!


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Welcome back, Marnie!


Oh...I didn't realize it was "that" Marnie!

Well, welcome back, anyway.


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Oh...I didn't realize it was "that" Marnie!

Well, welcome back, anyway.


Not even gonna ask.


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Is Don the best or is Don the best?!

Wow, he certainly is!
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Welcome back, Marnie.



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Is Don the best or is Don the best?!



Quoted from LC

Wow, he certainly is!
...
Welcome back, Marnie.



You do not know what I had to do to bring Marnie back.


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welcome back Marnie - I myself have entered this OWC for the first time in a while.

Thanks Don for working fast, always I nice surprise to see scripts posted for Saturday reading

just one question, how are scripts normally marked, ie what scale is used by readers. Just asking as I can keep this in mind as I go along

time to get reading


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Inner Journey - Page Awards Finalist - Bluecat semi final
Grieving Spell - winner - London Film Awards.††Third - Honolulu
Ultimate Weapon - Fresh Voices - second place
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Bill, I'm not sure for this one but it's usually along the lines of Don sending a ballot towards the end with Pass, Consider, Recommend, Criteria Met etc.

Best to keep a running tally yourself - do not post scores on scripts, only feedback.
That's the way it usually works.


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Bill, I'm not sure for this one but it's usually along the lines of Don sending a ballot towards the end with Pass, Consider, Recommend, Criteria Met etc.

Best to keep a running tally yourself - do not post scores on scripts, only feedback.
That's the way it usually works.


thanks - agreed on not posting scores etc on the threads

I suppose I have seen the old movie poet 1-5 scale and the pass/consider/recommend all before

or maybe Don has a super duper new scale  


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Inner Journey - Page Awards Finalist - Bluecat semi final
Grieving Spell - winner - London Film Awards.††Third - Honolulu
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You do not know what I had to do to bring Marnie back.

Well, I think Marnie's won a mug in the past (if memory serves).
A box of choccies? If so I want one too.



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Quoted from Don




You do not know what I had to do to bring Marnie back.


bringing back the SS thong as an incentive??


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Marnie!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!  


I got tired of waiting for an OWC prompt that might push me to write about two broads with bad knees who go white water rafting in NC, get lost and have to fight the elements, back woods red necks and Guiness withdrawals in order to survive.  


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Very small turnout...surprising.

Fantastic work by Don, once again, to get these all loaded within minutes of the writing period ending.

Surprised again no one took advantage of that, as here we are almost 12 hours later, and there are very few reads and comments.

I'm going to get on it now.  Brace yourselves.  BWOOOHAHAAAAA!!!!!


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Quick thanks to Zack for the motivational speech,

however I botched this time. The concept would've had to pull me hard to let me hammer it through this time. It didn't grab me.


Pleasant comeback, Marnie. Good luck with your entry. I hope to have it on the reading list. Very interested in what you do on the page today



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I got tired of waiting for an OWC prompt that might push me to write about two broads with bad knees who go white water rafting in NC, get lost and have to fight the elements, back woods red necks and Guiness withdrawals in order to survive.  


Hey Marnie!! Welcome back! Your scripts were missed and you too of course.


I didnít write for this one either. But next time hopefully. Good luck to all.

Zack gave a speech? I have to look for it.
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Hey, people, and Bill is back too! Iíve seen him here I swear!
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Yeah,
good opportunity to shout stuff from the sideline ...

So here's the first look
Title Impression:

Not fitting genre:
The Art of War (Action/Thriller)
Three Blocks (Action/Thriller)
What Was That
Party Out of Bounds
Twins

Lacks emotion, too standard:
Can't You Hear It
Cold Blood
Sickening Desires
The Halloween After Party
For The Love of Satan
The Night He Came Back
The Vampire Affair

Well in genre:
Paralysis
Curse of Osiris (borders to an adventure feel but there's still a go)
Last Halloween

Outstanding, striking, get me the ticket:
The Magic Candy (possibly cut the 'The' was my very first look impulse)
The Frequency of Fear
End of The Harvest
Devil's Night Massacre (first impulse impression- maybe make it a subjective single term
                                  with losing the apostrophe 'Devil Night Massacre; it will read odd                          
                                  like that, yes, but imo the very positive kind of odd, the in your face odd)



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Checked the loglines:

I only bought into four.

"37 years ago, the small town of Milford, Ohio was terrorized by a sadistic psychopath. Tonight, he's back."

(Intriguing 'classic horror plot' content. Reform it to one sentence.)

"A couple fight for their lives when killers target them after their Devil's Night Halloween party."

(Yeah, this 'was' No 1 on my reading list I thought. Like wtf is a devil night party. Then I just googled it and realized Devil Night is a well known term in the U.S.A. .This is a problem because in my eyes it reads very mystic, not knowing the term. Well, then maybe it's full on standard in your cultural market... anyway it's truly okay)

"A young woman is haunted by the history of her new home."
(I dare to say, I dare to say I walk with the 'I know that horror in the house classic plot' line here - you go)

"A young, anxiety-filled teen has a hard time telling his sleep paralysis demon apart from mind to reality, hours after a rambunctious Halloween party."
(just make it read smooth)




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Hey, people, and Bill is back too! Iíve seen him here I swear!


Iíve seen him too  

Nice to be involved, although feeling a tad rusty

Jeff promised me - indirectly - heís not going to poop on my script, which is very kind  


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Inner Journey - Page Awards Finalist - Bluecat semi final
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Quick thanks to Zack for the motivational speech,


Happy to be the one to convince you to enter. Looking forward to checking out your script.
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Happy to be the one to convince you to enter. :) Looking forward to checking out your script.


Sorry, that the context wasn't clear in my post. Unfortunately, I got no script on the list this time and it doesn't feel good. But I'll read and take part as usual :-)



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Sorry, that the context wasn't clear in my post. Unfortunately, I got no script on the list this time and it doesn't feel good. But I'll read and take part as usual :-)


Damn, that's disappointing, Dude. Oh well, there's always next October.   :)
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Damn, that's disappointing, Dude.


Isn't it.


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Oh well, there's always next October.   :)


Ouch - back to reply of quoted box one.

Man, I think I like your humor. Reads pretty realistically in its style :-) -- like thumbs up-




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Hey Marnie!! Welcome back! Your scripts were missed and you too of course.



Hey Kham! It's nice to be back! In super rusty though and only had like 3 hours to write this so I'm prepared for slaughter.  

Obviously a perfect time to resurface, along with lovely Reef Dreamer, Bill.  


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I got tired of waiting for an OWC prompt that might push me to write about two broads with bad knees who go white water rafting in NC, get lost and have to fight the elements, back woods red necks and Guiness withdrawals in order to survive.  


Gold right there!!! We can make that happen!


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Hi readers

Just a heads up to bear in mind Donís super duper, five point marking system. I think heís PMíd them out

I hadnít seen it before - all very technical

May be worth thinking off as you read.

Gosh, you go away for a couple of years and every changes  


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Hi readers

Just a heads up to bear in mind Donís super duper, five point marking system. I think heís PMíd them out

I hadnít seen it before - all very technical

May be worth thinking off as you read.

Gosh, you go away for a couple of years and every changes  


What?? Where can I find that?? Everything is different!! I fear change!!



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What?? Where can I find that?? Everything is different!! I fear change!!



You should have a pm from Don.
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Yeah,
good opportunity to shout stuff from the sideline ...

So here's the first look
Title Impression:

Not fitting genre:
The Art of War (Action/Thriller)
Three Blocks (Action/Thriller)
What Was That
Party Out of Bounds
Twins

Lacks emotion, too standard:
Can't You Hear It
Cold Blood
Sickening Desires
The Halloween After Party
For The Love of Satan
The Night He Came Back
The Vampire Affair

Well in genre:
Paralysis
Curse of Osiris (borders to an adventure feel but there's still a go)
Last Halloween

Outstanding, striking, get me the ticket:
The Magic Candy (possibly cut the 'The' was my very first look impulse)
The Frequency of Fear
End of The Harvest
Devil's Night Massacre (first impulse impression- maybe make it a subjective single term
                                  with losing the apostrophe 'Devil Night Massacre; it will read odd                          
                                  like that, yes, but imo the very positive kind of odd, the in your face odd)


Nice observations, Alex.   :D


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Folks, just a quick reminder that any rating you have should be held until you do so on your scorecards, not on the scriptís thread. Thanks.


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Also, please check your pm from Don! The scoring is a little different this time and Iíd hate peeps to have to go back over the scripts theyíve already read.


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Also, please check your pm from Don! The scoring is a little different this time and Iíd hate peeps to have to go back over the scripts theyíve already read.


A silly question but I wanted to ask before it's too late: I've started filling out my score card as I go. If I close it, will I lose what I've filled in or can I reopen later with information saved?
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You likely will lose it. It's happened to me before. And not a silly question. Best to take a screenshot before you close it.


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Folks, just a quick reminder that any rating you have should be held until you do so on your scorecards, not on the scriptís thread. Thanks.


I don't recall this being a requirement in the original thread, Steven, and if that's true, my scores will stay.



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It's always been a requirement.

Scoring comes at the end.


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Wasnít a requirement and no, I didnt mention it. Your scores can stay. But we all should know , most of us anyway, itís been frowned upon in the past.


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Peeps have put their own little scores on their reviews for many years...unless the original parameters said not to.

I like being frowned on, anyways.  


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Dammit. And right after I've unleashed my fancy new rating system!  
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Dammit. And right after I've unleashed my fancy new rating system!  


I gotta give you credit for creativity.
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Dammit. And right after I've unleashed my fancy new rating system!  


Keep it, Zack.  I'm keeping mine.  I think it adds to the review to know what the person really thought.

There are so many sugarcoated reviews for absolutely terrible scripts, it's crazy.  I never get it, but oh well.


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Now I come to think of it there was that running star-system Don tried out a few years back...

Anyway, you guys can take it up with challenge-master, Steve.
I won't edit out any more scores and you do so at your own peril.  

P.S. Jeff, I don't think there's any risk people don't know what you really think.
Try and keep it respectful though.


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There could be a challenge in the works where you could post ratings. Quite honestly I forgot to mention it this go round, so thatís on me. I wonít delete any ratings. To be perfectly honest, Iím not sure if it would help or hurt a certain script, but I will say this and that is a poor rating could potentially cause someone to pass a script by without reading and that is something I donít want.


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There could be a challenge in the works where you could post ratings. Quite honestly I forgot to mention it this go round, so thatís on me. I wonít delete any ratings. To be perfectly honest, Iím not sure if it would help or hurt a certain script, but I will say this and that is a poor rating could potentially cause someone to pass a script by without reading and that is something I donít want.


And a "high" rating could make more peeps read it, which is a good thing.

You guys know me - I think everyone who enters a script, should at least attempt to read every entry and provide some kind of feedback.  It doesn't take that much, really.

I've read and left extensive feedback on 10 scripts.  I think I even read the entire script, or at least skimmed to the end.  That's saying something for this Kid.  


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Now I come to think of it there was that running star-system Don tried out a few years back...

Actually, that was a different thing. Not rating the scripts, but rather marking the scripts that the writer is reading and commenting. In other words, if your script had no stars, people wouldn't bother reading it because it meant the writer didn't bother reading other scripts.  


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Actually, that was a different thing. Not rating the scripts, but rather marking the scripts that the writer is reading and commenting. In other words, if your script had no stars, people wouldn't bother reading it because it meant the writer didn't bother reading other scripts.  


Why isn't that still a thing?



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I've read and left extensive feedback on 10 scripts.  I think I even read the entire script, or at least skimmed to the end.  That's saying something for this Kid.  


10 scripts already!? You'e a monster, Dude!
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10 scripts already!? You're a monster, Dude!


I read yours, as well. How do I know?  BWOOOOOOHAHA!!!!!  The Shadow always knows!

I read Pia's as well.  What?

Could I be correct on these 2?  Yes, I think I am.

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I read yours, as well. How do I know?  BWOOOOOOHAHA!!!!!  The Shadow always knows!




Figured mine wouldn't be very hard to spot.  
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Why isn't that still a thing?


Might be more work for Don?

I think with these fewer entries though, it's not really necessary. It reminds me of the old days where it's more intimate between people who are familiar with each other's work and that keeps the guessing game more fun too.

The non reader problem was more of an issue when we were getting 40+ entries.


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Might be more work for Don?

I think with these fewer entries though, it's not really necessary. It reminds me of the old days where it's more intimate between people who are familiar with each other's work and that keeps the guessing game more fun too.

The non reader problem was more of an issue when we were getting 40+ entries.


Yep, yep, and YEP!

I actually can figure a bunch of peeps out very easily for a change.  But then again, they can figure me out, too.  ARGH!!!!!


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Jeff:

What is your objection to SUBURBAN HOME as a header? I've seen (or is that scene) several comments from you in that regard.

When writing features, I tend don't to use that header knowing that I am going to have several distinct scenes at that location and I don't want the reader to get confused so I'll label at as the owner's - e.g., DAVE'S HOUSE.

In a one location short, I wouldn't since there will only be one house (i.e., no confusion on location) and would feel free to exploit the header space for descriptive purposes (e.g., SUBURBAN HOUSE - telling the reader we're in the burbs), DOWNTOWN CONDO, RURAL RANCH HOUSE, etc.  

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Jeff:

What is your objection to SUBURBAN HOME as a header? I've seen (or is that scene) several comments from you in that regard.

When writing features, I tend don't to use that header knowing that I am going to have several distinct scenes at that location and I don't want the reader to get confused so I'll label at as the owner's - e.g., DAVE'S HOUSE.

In a one location short, I wouldn't since there will only be one house (i.e., no confusion on location) and would feel free to exploit the header space for descriptive purposes (e.g., SUBURBAN HOUSE - telling the reader we're in the burbs), DOWNTOWN CONDO, RURAL RANCH HOUSE, etc.  

As it your belief that the house should always be identified by the residence's name?


It's dumb, it looks dumb, and you see it over and over, and over, meaning it doesn't stand out.

Yes, I would always use some sort of ownership to the structure, whether or not it's a single location.

If you'd do that in a feature or a more detailed short, why not just do it all the time?



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It's dumb, it looks dumb, and you see it over and over, and over, meaning it doesn't stand out.

Yes, I would always use some sort of ownership to the structure, whether or not it's a single location.

If you'd do that in a feature or a more detailed short, why not just do it all the time?



I think I already explained it - but maybe not good enough.

In a feature - I'm going to go to that location several times and over a 120 pages readers are going to have to keep track of locations. So DAVE'S HOUSE - as opposed to something like SUBURBAN HOUSE will remind the readers that we are in Dave's house as opposed to a different suburban house.

I'll use something like SUBURBAN in one location shorts because (a) there will be no confusion to the reader - we're not going anywhere else and (b) it lets me use the header space to add so more meaningful description. i.e., when I read SUBURBAN house, as a reader I get a better sense of the setting - I view the traditional middle class burbs. When I read DAVE'S HOUSE - I really don't know if it is rural, city, etc.

That's all.    Was just curious if you thought owner specific was always good in the header - you answered that.  Don't really agree - but I understand your point now.


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It also helps if you spell suburban correctly, which not everyone has done 😮

Mind you, I read mine again and inevitably I found those annoying errors that I failed to spot

Hell, we only have a short period of time.


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It also helps if you spell suburban correctly, which not everyone has done 😮

Mind you, I read mine again and inevitably I found those annoying errors that I failed to spot

Hell, we only have a short period of time.


It's our Type O personalities.


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As I get in to these -  the standard couples exchange - did you hear the scream - what scream? is getting tedious.

Not a criticism really s it is happening in all of the scripts. That being said, I am looking forward to one where one person hears the scream and doesn't share that info with the other person.


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As I get in to these -  the standard couples exchange - did you hear the scream - what scream? is getting tedious.

Not a criticism really s it is happening in all of the scripts. That being said, I am looking forward to one where one person hears the scream and doesn't share that info with the other person.


Keep reading...you'll find them.

Are you getting tired of reading "SUBURBAN HOME" in every Slug yet?

If so, see my post above.


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Keep reading...you'll find them.

Are you getting tired of reading "SUBURBAN HOME" in every Slug yet?

If so, see my post above.


Yes - but - like the both couples hearing the scream - I wouldn't fault any individual script for it. Also getting tired of sexy horror costumes (e.g., sexy nurse), but again,  think it is the nature of the challenge


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Often within a OWC there is a phrase, or description, that is repetitive.

The one that I remember most, and have commented on before, was a horror OWC where quite a few scripts described the Ďover grown weedsí outside the house of their choosing. The emphasis being on neglect and abandoned etc

For this one I expected it to be Pumpkins, but no. So far, in the reads I have had, itís been throwing the beer cans in a bin. Wouldnít have guessed that in advance.

Also, and itís no complaint as mine falls into this category which I thought I could get away with, but the challenge seemed to be after the clear up has occurred. Most scripts have them clearing up

And one final point. I donít know what suburban means in some parts of the world, but a Mansion, or the like, doesnít fit our suburban world  

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Often within a OWC there is a phrase, or description, that is repetitive.

The one that I remember most, and have commented on before, was a horror OWC where quite a few scripts described the Ďover grown weedsí outside the house of their choosing. The emphasis being on neglect and abandoned etc

For this one I expected it to be Pumpkins, but no. So far, in the reads I have had, itís been throwing the beer cans in a bin. Wouldnít have guessed that in advance.

Also, and itís no complaint as mine falls into this category which I thought I could get away with, but the challenge seemed to be after the clear up has occurred. Most scripts have them clearing up

And one final point. I donít know what suburban means in some parts of the world, but a Mansion, or the like, doesnít fit our suburban world  

Nice to be back, even with Jeff  


Sounds like we needed:

EXT. NEGLECTED SUBURBAN HOUSE - NIGHT


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Suburban home can be any size home.

A suburb is a residential district located on the outskirts of a city. If you live in the suburbs, you probably travel to the city for work. Suburb comes from Latin: sub means "below or near" and urbis means "city." You also will recognize this root in urban.

A suburban home can be bog or small.  Being in the "suburbs" does not classify size of home.


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Suburban home can be any size home.

A suburb is a residential district located on the outskirts of a city. If you live in the suburbs, you probably travel to the city for work. Suburb comes from Latin: sub means "below or near" and urbis means "city." You also will recognize this root in urban.

A suburban home can be bog or small.  Being in the "suburbs" does not classify size of home.


Fully understand they vary, and to be honest Iím not bothered by it as a criteria, when perhaps I should

I just donít come across many isolated mansions, or houses with corn fields  




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Sounds like we needed:

EXT. NEGLECTED SUBURBAN HOUSE - NIGHT - with bin of empty beer cans  


Iíve corrected you  



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Have read a couple but not left reviews yet   Will do so when Iím less busy lol

Not a criticism of Clarkieís great efforts to run this OWC but I feel an extra parameter mightíve given the scripts some more variety. Just an observation lol   Whereís a wheelchair or mime when u need it


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I think I've read six or seven so far. IMO, the writing has been better quality compared to the old days. The stories themselves have been okay, but I have not come across a standout yet.

I know Jeffie and I both wrote ours late Friday while consuming adult beverages and it shows. Perhaps others did as well. Oh well. Hard to teach old dogs something new.  


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Iíve corrected you  



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So, after almost 48 hours, we have several with 10 feedback, and several with 5.

Not good.

Most feedback is so minimal.  Sorry, but it makes me pissed.

The work week is usually the slower time for reads, so let's just hope that's not the case.

With only 19 entries, one would think all entrants could comment on all scripts...at least with the 1 or 2 liners many are providing.

Just me being me.  Sorry if this offends anyone.

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Mind you, I read mine again and inevitably I found those annoying errors that I failed to spot

Hell, we only have a short period of time.




^ How I felt after seeing my careless errors in my script on Saturday. ^

And the REAL kick in the shins? It was all do to a revision before I submitted, not catching those small things which peeps couldn't help but notice. Just a friendly reminder than in a OWC, we are still only human and will make blunders.

I've already rewritten the piece and will resub here shortly after the dust settles.


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Quoted from stevie
Have read a couple but not left reviews yet   Will do so when Iím less busy lol

Not a criticism of Clarkieís great efforts to run this OWC but I feel an extra parameter mightíve given the scripts some more variety. Just an observation lol   Whereís a wheelchair or mime when u need it


A very good observation. Given the idea that one of the couple cannot "hear" the scream,  it never dawned on me until now that there is a lack of Mines. Shocking!


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It's Thanksgiving here in Canada so I've been busy with family stuff. Hoping to get some reads in tomorrow (holiday so no work) but I have the kids. I've read three so far but only left one review, so more is coming, promise.


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^ How I felt after seeing my careless errors in my script on Saturday. ^

And the REAL kick in the shins? It was all do to a revision before I submitted, not catching those small things which peeps couldn't help but notice. Just a friendly reminder than in a OWC, we are still only human and will make blunders.

I've already rewritten the piece and will resub here shortly after the dust settles.


Agreed.

One last minute change I made I spelt incorrectly - very annoying

Also, I find it funny that we agree in advance that these wonít be perfect, or polished, but then review them as if they should be. Itís always been that way, for some reason. I suppose thatís why I search for potential in the scripts more than the finish

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A reminder, folks... As much as you think you know who wrote what, no guessing or blatant shout-outs please.


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I've got my floaties, my snorkel, and I'm ready to swan dive into this OWC jacuzzi. Watch out Jeff. And put some damn swimming trunks on! There are ladies here!
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So, after almost 48 hours, we have several with 10 feedback, and several with 5.

Not good.

Most feedback is so minimal.  Sorry, but it makes me pissed.

The work week is usually the slower time for reads, so let's just hope that's not the case.

With only 19 entries, one would think all entrants could comment on all scripts...at least with the 1 or 2 liners many are providing.

Just me being me.  Sorry if this offends anyone.

Thanks to Dave for reading, as I know he said he was out.  Rock on, Brother!


Thanks for the shout out - and - correct - I am not in.

Actually have not been in one this entire year - they keep falling on times that are impossible for me.


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What I have learned so far:

1. I am not a fan of horror and have read very little of it in my life. However, after reading these, I know which type I prefer. Horror with a motivation/reason.  Some of these have gore for gore's sake - which I guess is okay for the genre. I preferred the ones where there was an arc - where I saw the justification for the deed.

2. I have a hard time carrying about characters that meet their horror demise if I don't care about the character.

And

For OWCs in general - I think next time I enter I am going to assess my own premise and plot points on how common (which might equal boring in a competition like this) they are and try to avoid those. By way of example, in this challenge tons of sexy costumes, tons of flirtation and sexual tensions, tons of did you hear that scream - what scream, a lot of cops, etc. Not bad for anyone script but when interwoven in a ton of scripts it does hinder a script for standing out. Hope that makes sense - but basically what I'm saying is that it might be strategic to go against the grain.

Surely hope that there are more reads coming. This is really seems low from a participation perspective.


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If any reader is not ďinĒ but is reading a ton of scripts Iíll see if Don will send you over a voterís tally if you want. Itís only fair and awesome of peeps to read when they donít have a horse in the race.

Also...

When I received the script entries I purposely told Don to leave it anonymous to me as well. Thought itíd be more fun that way. That said, Dave, I donít know if youíre in or out, however I did spot a clue early on from you. Or was it?


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If any reader is not ďinĒ but is reading a ton of scripts Iíll see if Don will send you over a voterís tally if you want. Itís only fair and awesome of peeps to read when they donít have a horse in the race.

Also...

When I received the script entries I purposely told Don to leave it anonymous to me as well. Thought itíd be more fun that way. That said, Dave, I donít know if youíre in or out, however I did spot a clue early on from you. Or was it?


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I prolly wonít have time to review many as work is full on   I do night shift so try to sleep in the day but itís near impossible as I drink a lot of coffee lol   And I can survive on 3/4 hrs sleep anyway

Iím not in this horse race but will definitely review if some one pmís me   Feel free

And I agree with Dave - which backs up my earlier comment - that all the tropes pop up in the scripts Iíve read so they do tend to be similar in a fashion which then leads to skimming


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I don't see what all the fuss is about with the standard SUBURBAN HOME and the Naughty Nurse opening horror tropes being used over and over etc.

Halloween, the movie uses : EXT. LAURIE' S HOUSE - DAY  / MYERS HOUSE etc. Is that better? It Follows starts exactly with: EXT. SUBURBAN STREET - NIGHT.

We experience reader fatigue with repetitive opening sluglines, but would INNER CITY APARTMENT have been any more exciting to read?

The challenge guidelines stipulate a COUPLE - they're likely going to throw their party in their home. In the aftermath there's a scream. The brief implies guests in Halloween costumes leaving. Would CATWOMAN instead of NAUGHTY NURSE leaving be more exciting? Maybe. Without the Halloween costumes on screen and just the 'couple' what we're seeing on screen might lack colour.

What's lacking for me in what I've read so far (and this is not a criticism); is real scares, real suspense, and dread. And originality of story.
I want to be on the edge of my seat when watching horror.

This exercise just proves horror is hard to master.

In this regard it's a good learning tool.

Horror is not easy. Without an original concept and/or subverting of horror tropes things get boring and predictable.

I'm ignoring the openings mostly cause yep, they are becoming dťjŗ vu.

Still searching for the diamond in the rough.

I didn't enter my effort cause even I found it: oh so, been there, seen that.



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A reminder, folks... As much as you think you know who wrote what, no guessing or blatant shout-outs please.


So in other words, just tell your men to keep their mouths shut and their eyes open?

Gotcha.  


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"I am looking forward to one where one person hears the scream and doesn't share that info with the other person."

Would that be easy to show in film? If we hear the scream, the audience assumes the characters do too, unless one says she doesn't. I guess you could do it if one character is not in the scene yet.
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"I am looking forward to one where one person hears the scream and doesn't share that info with the other person."

Would that be easy to show in film? If we hear the scream, the audience assumes the characters do too, unless one says she doesn't. I guess you could do it if one character is not in the scene yet.


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"I am looking forward to one where one person hears the scream and doesn't share that info with the other person."

Would that be easy to show in film? If we hear the scream, the audience assumes the characters do too, unless one says she doesn't. I guess you could do it if one character is not in the scene yet.


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Quoted from LC
. Would CATWOMAN instead of NAUGHTY NURSE be more exciting?



now you mention it  

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Lost track of how many I have read: But my take on things so far...

1) Only those living in the suburbs throw Halloween Party's

2) Female Halloween costumes are apparently always "sexy" as opposed to scary

3) Opening 4 pages of dull, meaningless conversation get old V. fast. I think I have only read 1 so far that opens with a clear horror theme.

4) I do not like the mentality of "It's horror, doesn't need an explanation" - Is a little substance too much to ask for? a little sprinkling of reasoning or backstory

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I'm getting grumpy... think I should stop reading for a while and go get a drink lol


I can understand - itís does get to you. Especially when there is a lot of repetition, which appears the case.

On the flip side, my week has been brightened up no end by my new favourite word...

(screams)
YEOOWWEE!

I have been chuckling to myself all through the day  



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Quoted from Reef Dreamer


On the flip side, my week has been brightened up no end by my new favourite word...

(screams)
YEOOWWEE!

I have been chuckling to myself all through the day  




Yeoowwee!! makes all the babes clammy.

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Why are some peeps questioning the "suburban" part of the challenge?  I'm kind of lost.

Maybe suburban means something different across the pond?

Just asking, cuz suburban means outside of a city.  It means the house have streets and driveways, and some land...maybe, depending on where we are.


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I don't see what all the fuss is about with the standard SUBURBAN HOME and the Naughty Nurse opening horror tropes being used over and over etc.

Halloween, the movie uses : EXT. LAURIE' S HOUSE - DAY  / MYERS HOUSE etc. Is that better? It Follows starts exactly with: EXT. SUBURBAN STREET - NIGHT.

We experience reader fatigue with repetitive opening sluglines, but would INNER CITY APARTMENT have been any more exciting to read?

The challenge guidelines stipulate a COUPLE - they're likely going to throw their party in their home. In the aftermath there's a scream. The brief implies guests in Halloween costumes leaving. Would CATWOMAN instead of NAUGHTY NURSE leaving be more exciting? Maybe. Without the Halloween costumes on screen and just the 'couple' what we're seeing on screen might lack colour.

What's lacking for me in what I've read so far (and this is not a criticism); is real scares, real suspense, and dread. And originality of story.
I want to be on the edge of my seat when watching horror.

This exercise just proves horror is hard to master.

In this regard it's a good learning tool.

Horror is not easy. Without an original concept and/or subverting of horror tropes things get boring and predictable.

I'm ignoring the openings mostly cause yep, they are becoming dťjŗ vu.

Still searching for the diamond in the rough.

I didn't enter my effort cause even I found it: oh so, been there, seen that.



I didn't find anything wrong wish Suburban. And I didn't find anything wrong with sexy costumes. I was speaking more to a strategy 4 these challenges. That is, anticipating what the standard settings are going to be and shaking it up in your script. In other words, that very thing may make it stand out versus blending with others. That was it. Just a rambling thought for me future challenges on how to be different. It may well bomb, but I think it would stand out more. Who knows?


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I didn't find anything wrong wish Suburban. And I didn't find anything wrong with sexy costumes. I was speaking more to a strategy 4 these challenges. That is, anticipating what the standard settings are going to be and shaking it up in your script. In other words, that very thing may make it stand out versus blending with others. That was it. Just a rambling thought for me future challenges on how to be different. It may well bomb, but I think it would stand out more. Who knows?


Dave, although you don't seem to get what I've been saying, once again, we are saying the exact same thing.

Using a Slug, that gets repeated over and over again, of "SUBURBAN HOME" is exactly the problem we're both talking about.

You get me?  C'mon, MAN!!!  



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Dave, I get it.

An OWC strategy thing in terms of an entry standing out, being memorable, not conforming to the obvious opening location, stereotypes etc., as prompted by a knee-jerk reaction to challenge parameters.

I concur.
It does make you think for next time.

Of course the entire script will have to measure up to its inventive opening, alt or offbeat location, and non stereotypical characters. Hmm, perhaps that's a good inspirational tool in general. Ideas and concept are the most difficult thing imh, more than the actual writing.

Interesting...


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Dave, I get it.

An OWC strategy thing in terms of an entry standing out, being memorable, not conforming to the obvious opening location, stereotypes etc., as prompted by a knee-jerk reaction to challenge parameters.

I concur.
It does make you think for next time.

Of course the entire script will have to measure up to its inventive opening, alt or offbeat location, and non stereotypical characters. Hmm, perhaps that's a good inspirational tool in general. Ideas and concept are the most difficult thing imh, more than the actual writing.

Interesting...


Yes it was just me musing. I'm pretty sure and I entered I would have had a typical Suburban home, the sexy costumes to set up sexual tension or flirtation and all the rest of the stuff that I seen. It was just an observation from an outsider this time that struck me, next time go against the grain. Could be a total bomb, but then again it could be a difference-maker.


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Dave, although you don't seem to get what I've been saying, once again, we are saying the exact same thing.

Using a Slug, that gets repeated over and over again, of "SUBURBAN HOME" is exactly the problem we're both talking about.

You get me?  C'mon, MAN!!!  



Thought you were saying that you didn't like Suburban home is a slug. That is that it was an incorrect header. If you're saying you just would have liked to see something more inventive, okay.



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Why are some peeps questioning the "suburban" part of the challenge?  I'm kind of lost.

Maybe suburban means something different across the pond?

Just asking, cuz suburban means outside of a city.  It means the house have streets and driveways, and some land...maybe, depending on where we are.


I've been thinking about how to properly articulate what my issue with suburban was. But I'm no good at articulating anything so I'll just ramble.

1) Repetition - This is obviously not the fault of individual writers and doesn't affect individual scripts. But when you read 6/7 scripts back to back and almost every one starts with SUBURBAN HOME - it becomes grating. There are other places to live in...

2) Preconception - Suburban conjures different images I guess. If I think of suburban America, I think affluent white neighborhoods - basically desperate housewives. So when I am reading all of these, in my head I am basically picturing the same house. If I had written for the challenge and based it in England - I wouldn't use Suburban, I would describe the house (Detached, terraced, Victorian, Edwardian, new build, council house)

3) Theme - Leading on from point 2, I imagine fairly new and pristine houses with manicured lawns. This doesn't immediately strike me as a great setting for horror, not as much as say, a creepy cabin in the woods.

Overall I guess I just wanted some variety lol


Scratch all of that lol - Just reread Jeffs comment "....suburban part of the challenge"

So I reread the parameters

"ItÔŅĹs close to midnight in a seemingly ordinary suburban home"

I didn't realize the parameter was to actually set it in a suburban home (I thought it was just "home" and everyone happened to choose the suburbs lol). Very sorry, I take it all back.

as my tutor used to say RTFQ - Read the fuckin' question!



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