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New Year's Eve by Anthony Russo (ajrscreenworks) - Short, Crime, Thriller - After meeting online, a loner and a temptress meet for a date on New Year's Eve. 21 pages - pdf, format
A few typos: pg. 1) Ty says why the old man holding this meeting on New Year’s Eve day? -- I'm not sure i f this was meant to be slang, but shouldn't he say "why's"? pg. 10) No description of where Will and Jenny are. pg. 15) Cobs and robbers -- should be cops. My only other thoughts, Danny's story would've made for a great flashback with V.O. whether it was fabricated or not. I also would've liked to see Will reach into his glove box and pull out a snub nose .38 at the end.
Really good writing. A few things that stood out for me:
Jenny’s incessant smoking got a little old after a while. I realize you injected into it about every action you could come up with for a restaurant scene but after a while the constant smoking descriptions came off a little like the well ran dry.
The cop characters turned out to be nothing more than informer characters. That’s not too horrible. Such characters are often unavoidable. And the beach scene was good for breaking things up so they weren’t just talking at the station all the time. But the fact that they essentially just bring a bunch of exposition to help explain the plot was a little disappointing after the time invested into them.
I’m not sure it’s totally successful as a mystery. I mean, I knew the killer had to be one or the other, you know? Still, I didn’t really know until the informers gave me enough information so in that regard it worked.
“Shrugs his shoulders” - could just say shrugs
Overall, the writing is really good. No major issues. For a short, and with such limited room to expand, I thought you told the story very well. Very nice straightforward storytelling. Flowed well. Holds interest. Overall, really good. Nice work.
Thanks Breanne - I did think about going to the apartment, etc. with the cops but then I thought it might detract from letting the back and forth between Will and Jenny play out. Excellent point though. I spent time on their descriptions and gave them a personality, so maybe I should have used them more?
A great short- well written and paced. The dialogue seemed very realistic, the awkward first-meeting conversation was particularly good.
SPOILERS!
I agree completely with screenriders comment- because although you had revealed the gun in Jenny's purse, I was still not 100% certain that she was the New Years killer, and showing Will also having the same gun would really make a great open ending.
I like the suggestion though, and I did toy with it. I guess I wanted the audience to draw its own conclusions; for instance, we don't know if their stories are real either, do we? (-:
First off I just wanted to echo some of the other comments as I thought this was wonderfully written. As screenrider said, it was a real page turner. Felt like 10 pages instead of 20.
I also thought that you did a great job giving some BG on each of the characters we encountered (even Reilley with the great description of his beer belly).
My only thought/question would be regarding the second scene on P. 1 with Ty and Will. I got the vibe that they were hitmen of some sort (Ty's reference to the "old man" and the "client"). I think this might be an opportunity to show him with a weapon. Maybe I'm reading too much into it, but if that isn't the case and you choose not to show Will with a weapon as was suggested, perhaps you could cut this scene and still not miss a beat.
I took a look at this. The writing was good but I felt something was missing here. Especially at the end. I was alittle disappointed that it ended the way it did. I think you should have played this out.
Maybe you were in too much of a hurry. Maybe one day you might want to look at expanding this a little.
I would have cut down some of the smoking action for Jenny a little bit but that's just me.
Will was an interesting character.
Did I find it a page turner, no but overall I did like it though despite the ending.
Your writing is great, dialogue felt real and I did like the story until the end.
I think it was fairly obvious Jenny was the killer early in the conversation but I did think you would throw a twist in there and have Will be the killer. When Will is splashing water on his face saying "It's only a girl", then later the cops said it's been only male victims, I was certain Will was the killer looking to murder his first female victim.
Maybe it was just me but I think you could cut a page or two, maybe more, from this. I did seem a tad long for a story where the killer could only be one of two people.
If you did write this in a hurry, it's a damn good effort. You kept me interested to the very end even if I'm not the biggest fan of the ending itself.
Yeah, I'll probably re-visit this at some point. I was inspired to write a short after reading some good ones here (see? It's your fault!) and I wanted to stretch myself and write in the genre furthest from my comfort zone...
Couldn't think of anything more difficult to do than a noirish crime/mystery...
Maybe I can think of a way to expand it to a feature or make it a series. Until then I will return to writing absurd characters and fart jokes...
A very cool, sick script you have here. Peppered with snappy, sultry conversationa and equally elequent composition in the narrative. It grew and expanded as it went on gradually ditching the wiscracks and smart replies to a more contemplative, melancholy piece which by the end, had taken on a totally different tone and persona, all in a good way.
Just for clarification, I'm presuming the opening scene with Will at the mirror is after his conversation with TY and before his date with Jenny. If not, sh?t, my comments are going come off horribly misguided
I like the abrupt switching of scenes between the Elio's and the cop shop. Short bursts of dialogue each revealing a little more each time for us to decipher where you were taking us with this. I don't know if you've already had comments from some people about the technique and structure you used here. I know of one or two that wouldn't dig it all that much, leveling criticisms like "too jarring" or "disjointed" at it's pacing but I found it hiked up the intrigue and suspense about what we were going to find out about Will and/or Jenny.
I wonder would they open up to each other like that? Especially Will, given the type of person he is. There was some alcohol consumed sure but still what a break in character for him. Having said that they restaurant scene is a journey in itself as both people strive to understand and figure out one another. As a stand alone scene without the cop shop intercuts, its very well scripted, ebbs and flows in real time, regardless of the seemingly implausible "opening up" of both characters.
Now at the end, as I mention in the page by page notes, if you gave us the indication that Jenny was going to spare Will then these blurted out confessions of pivotal, life changing events of their respective chidhoods would carry extra weight and significance but my take on the conclusion is that she is going to go ahead with her grisly intentions, regardless of the "bond" they experienced at the table. Which, for me, cheapens the intimacies of their conversation to the point of meaninglessness, since it had no bearing on the inevitable outcome. Please correct me if I picked this up wrong.
I gather you intended it this way but it was foreshadowed rather early that Jenny was the elusive "perp" who Crowder and Lopez were discussing. You tell us explicity on page 18 with the line "Fits easily in a purse." but most readers will have figured this many pages before. Again I don't know what your intention was. Did you or didn't you want us to know?
Overall, I think this was a very strong effort, a lot of great things in here, some clever dialogue (as well as some that could be cleaned up as I've highlighted below) a fantastic femme fatale in Jenny, that bit?h was beyond cool, in a icy, lethal but above all sexy way. A mixed up, contradictory, sometimes frustrating individual in Will but I found him real and empathatic nonetheless. Also the development of Crowders and Lopez's realisation however premature it may have been was still engaging and humorous, culminating in a lifeguards chair on Rockaway Beach of all places.
I think if you want the twist to remain concealed until page 18 (if that was the idea) I'm afraid the structure, although I dug it, isn't going to be conducive to achieving this as the two cops are essentially filling in the blanks for us. Maybe think about revamping the structure or rewriting Crowder's and Lopez's dialogue so not as much is given away to us so soon.
However, the unfortunate reality is, if you have alternating scenes of a new years eve blind date juxtaposed with two cops who just happen to be talking about consecutive new years eve murders, its not going to take long for the reader/audience to join the dots. That is why I feel the ending is so vital and what closing lines and body language you give Jenny as she leaves the waiter to join Will.
Anyway, I lenjoyed this, like everything, it can be improved but you have a solid script on your hands. I'd be interested to see what where you take it from here.
Page by Page notes:
Below are just some comments/reactions/ suggestions etc when reading the script.
"A droplet of blood falls... slowly... and crashes into the porcelain basin." -- "Crashes" feels like too strong a verb here for what its describing. Unless you're envisaging one of those super slow-mo shots complete with accentuated sound effects...which I sincerely hope you aren't...Interesting opening images all the same though.
WILL STEWART, late 20s, tall and spindly with tufts of thin dark hair, bores his narrow eyes into his reflection. He scoops a handful of water to his face and brushes the trail of blood from his neck. -- Great prose, superb introduction to a character.
TY (CONT’D) Yo man, I told you, you can’t be messing with that shit. What if the bitch is crazy? -- Funny, I'm just after reading Rendevous's "Who Says..." which has an identical theme, albeit dealt with in a far lighter tone than here.
TY Man, this is bullshit. Why the old man holding this meeting on New Year’s Eve day?
-- Are you missing "is" between "Why" and "the" or is it TY's way of speaking?
I mean, I get TY is a homeboy an all that and thats the way they talk but his lines came off a bit too stereotypical at times, almost a caricature, but yeah I realise, that is how they talk, so...
"and wall to wall muscles" -- Another coincidence, I recently watched Woody Allen's "Sleeper" for the first time, this line is spoken. Did you get it from that?
"Bass Ale" -- Do they have this in the states? It can barely be got in Ireland anymore.
WAITER Very good.
Jenny returns her cigarette to the table. -- We can assume that the waiter has vacated the scene to fetch the drinks but its still no harm in confirming it for us. A terse "The waiter leaves" would do.
"Will jumps a bit in his seat, his eyes big as saucers." -- A bit overt, no? I know, Will is coming off a bit jittery but this reaction felt a little too much. Maybe a flicker of the eyes or something more subtle that we can still pick up on it, and given Jenny's personality, she will too.
"Jenny takes a long, satisfying drag, then smashes out the cigarette in the butter dish." -- Like in the beginning "smashes" feels too extreme here, violent even, for what its conveying.
"Smoke pours out along with her answer." -- Cool visual.
INT. ELIO’S RESTAURANT - NIGHT
WILL I can’t believe I’m even considering telling you this.
-- Even though its obvious where we are and who is in the scene, its good practice to include a line of action just to clarify it for the reader. Anything to establish the two characters and what they are doing before they speak. I know its difficult not to become repetituous when going back and forth from scene to scenw to like this, I had a similar problem with a script of mine but I line of action should be inserted at the beginning of new scenes.
JENNY How old were you, Will? -- Sorry for being a nit-picker but I would drop "Will" here, not necessary in my opinion.
WILL She... did things to me.
JENNY What kind of things, Will?
WILL You know... things.
JENNY You were raped, Will.
-- Jenny is saying "Will" way too much here, it doesn't read well. Then again, maybe you want to highlight Jenny's intense personality by having her address him so directly like that.
JENNY (CONT’D) Course some eleven-year-olds would consider that a helluva Friday night. -- Too right, thats what I was thinkin'
WILL What happened to you, Jenny? --Again I would drop the name.
That scene on page 17 is a lot of things; surprising, ill fitting, crazy, hilarious thus brilliant all at the same time. Two of them going at it, only for the man (of all species) to stop up and talk about the case. I mean, fair play to Crowder, what a stud, tappin' that Lopez considering she's a "a knockout" as you put it but, man, you gotta leave your work in the office, you're fu?king this beautiful women on a beach, on New years night, concentrate on that.
CROWDER Aren’t you interested in fighting crime, detective? -- Er no, I'd rather sit on your face, replies Lopez. And that should be fine with Crowder if had any sexual drive at all, jesus man! "Crime can look after itself" would be my train of thought at that particular moment in time.
"Jenny looks toward the door. She can see Will’s headlights flash across the street as he reaches for the door handle" -- Maybe I'm missing something here but how can the lights flash if Will is only getting into the car?
WAITER Come and look me up, then -- No need for the comma before "then"
JENNY I don’t think we’ll be together much longer. -- A love this line, a telling one in regards the whole story but I was kinda' hoping she was gonna let Will off since they had made some connection at dinner or at least it looked that way. Of course she could have manipulated the whole thing. I thought you would give the impression that the cheeky, forward waiter, being the opposite of Will, was gonna take his place as Jenny's next victim. Although "I think I just may do that" sorta' seals the waiters fate too, she's a some piece of work for sure.
Damn, I should have let you write it. Can't argue with anything you've said - you really dug deep into the meaning of everything, probably more so than I did! I imagine that's what shows through in your work and why I enjoyed reading "Club Card"...
Yes, you imagined correctly about Will - after the scene with Ty and before his date with Jenny. As for Ty, I have a habit (maybe in this case a bad one) of "hearing" conversations in my head, and then typing exactly what I hear. Most times it comes out real - in this case though it came out a little stereotypical.
As for Jenny, and the cops' exposition, and the audience figuring it out - my intention was to have the audience expect a twist and then not get one. I tried to set up Will as a burgeoning "American Psycho" type character, and I figured Jenny was an over-the-top femme fatale, so maybe the audience would vacillate in their thinking.
I really was more concerned with whether the audience believed the stories they divulged (only I know the truth!). As for them opening up, remember, they had multiple conversations on line, to which we're not privy, and I imagine most of them to be about how lonely they each are.
Thanks again for the read and for the fantastic insights. I think I may have an idea about how to expand this into a feature. It's on one of the back burners, though...
Oh, and two other things - apparently I'm such a Woody Allen fan that I cop his lines without thinking. Good catch there - Erno is definitely described as having wall to wall muscles...
And with the headlights - When you de-activate a silent alarm, most cars' headlights flash...
Yeah, Woody Allen is great, possibly the most productive writer/director or even just the most prolific filmmaker of all time, what a body of work that guy has, incredible. An excellent source to draw from too, one can't go too far wrong quoting his one liners
"And with the headlights - When you de-activate a silent alarm, most cars' headlights flash..." -- That would be correct, sir, never thought of that.
Decided to take a gander at something new from you having just read Grand Avenue recently. There's good writing here, but I felt the ending was lacking in pop to me.
SPOILERS
As I said, it's well written. All of the characters have their own voices and personalities and it's easy to follow. There's two parallel stories going on here; one with Will and Jenny and the other simultaneous conversation between Lopez and Crowder. It seemed that the parallel storytelling would meet somewhere, but it didn't, so I was a little disappointed in that aspect. I understand that Lopez and Crowder serve to explain the real back story and to foreshadow what's going to happen, but I think I would have liked to see at least some sort of knot tied between them and Will/Jenny at the end.
As for who's the killer...well, obviously it's either Will or Jenny. I think Jenny was the early frontrunner simply because she had a very different attitude, whereas Will was simply the nice guy. So when it came to be that Jenny was packing heat and had other plans(even after that in depth, revealing conversation), it wasn't the most shocking to be honest with you. I thought maybe Will was the killer when he went into the bathroom to splash water on his face, but Jenny pretty much stole that show from him.
Some people have mentioned Jenny's smoking as being overdone. Personally I thought it was more revealing of her character because right off the bat the waiter tells her, dude you can't smoke her and she's like, dude come on. So it makes her that rebel right off the bat and puts her in the lead for the "who's the killer?" position.
Dialogue was sharp all around. Characters were good too. Conversations were realistic(it took me about 9 tries to type out that word. What the heck?). Overall it was a quick and enjoyable read, but I think the ending could be tied up a little neater.
Nice job, man. Please let me know if you have any questions or if anything was unclear.
Many thanks for the read - I really appreciate it!
Glad you liked it on balance, and definitely an interesting take on the meeting of the divergent story lines. I really never considered that, but I will do so if I ever re-visit this, and at some point I may, if I feel I have another 70-80 pages in me to turn it into a feature.
As for the ending, and keeping the audience guessing, I posted earlier that I hoped that the readers would expect a twist - and I seem to be developing a habit of not giving the reader what they want... (o:
For me, the drama I hoped to create for the reader was whether they believed Will's and Jenny's stories to each other.
Again, good food for thought from you, and thanks -
I didn't get into this. I don't like cop shows and so reading through the cop scenes and all that cop talk in your script was a real chore for me. Not your fault, it's just me.
What I did like was the characters of Jenny and Will. You did a wonderful job of writing their characters, giving them little mannerisms that give them distinct personalities. The awkward timid Will plays off ice cool Jenny perfectly.
The story did not interest me for reasons above, so I can't comment on that but boy I wish I got as much out of your script as colkurtz did.
I got a lot more out of Pete's head then I did out of this.
Thanks for the read. Actually I agree with you - cop stories are not my favorite either. I wrote this to try to stretch myself as a writer, since I usually write comedy, and I tried to pick something that would be the hardest thing for me to write.
My favorite part of course was creating the characters. Glad you liked the interaction between Will and Jenny.
If there's anything you have up besides "Malto", let me know so I can return the favor.
Anthony, First of yours i've read. You write well but the story didn't work for me.
I agree with most of the other posts so I won't repeat. The only constructive feedback I can give is, at times, the dialogue seems a little fake when they end their sentences with the other characters names. I dont think we do it that much in reality. "I think you write well, Anthony" vs "I think you write well" . I understand this once to establish names to the audience, but then you kept it up.
Anywho, fine writing. Story needs fleshed out a little for me.
Thanks for giving this a shot. As for the name repetition, I thought it would be a good way for Jenny to establish her dominance in the conversation, and eventually Will followed suit. In a re-write I'd probably tone it down, though.
Again, thanks and let me know if I can return the read.
I read the script a week ago but i finally get to write this comment. Pretty well done! I rather liked it, and i don't guess i'll have to add anything negative to colkurtz' review above. Toggling between the perpetrator (or at least the suspect) and the investigators discussing the case from the beginning on is an interesting idea that I seldom saw in any movie. (Usually only one side is featured; in "Columbo" for instance only the murderers life exists, the police is practically never shown. On the other hand on shows like CSI the investigation can be followed but we don't get to know who's the perp till the end (ok, depends on episode)) Anyway, what I want to say is that you made a very interesting attempt to combine different ways of telling stories about crime. The characters are utterly convincing; the somehow Bond-girl-like Jenny, the timid Will sitting in the restaurant and talking about their life (or maybe making up stories, who knows?) appeared totally realistically. I've never been on a date with someone from online but i guess it would be exactely like this. I actually DO believe that people would speak about things like their infancy because they maybe just continued their regular on-line conversations.... Anyway, the dialogue pleased me very much aswell! Good lines and lots of catchphrases. ("Should auuuuld acquaintance be forgot..." remained in my head for the entire week...) Go on like that!
After you provided me with a real injection of confidence - your review of my OWC - I was intrigued to read your work. Whereas others had missed what my intentions with that script were, you hit the note again and again with the characters, so obviously I think you're brilliant
It's been said, but great writing. This script moved along at a terrific pace.
The best thing about this script is the dialogue. It's quite simply among the best I have read here.
I would carry on with - the deserving - compliments, but it's 3am.
I was just thinking the other day that I had a slot open in my mutual admiration society - been admiring myself lately and we all know how boring that gets...
Seriously though, thanks for the read and for the very kind comments.
I thought I had your short picked out from your reply here, then I checked the thread and I see that you've responded in it - so, hmmm...
Obviously I think highly of your writing as well and it will be cool to see which one is yours. Again, thanks, and if you have any other work up let me know and I'll be happy to give it a read.
Thought I'd give this a thorough read since i skimmed it the first time.
SPOILERS!! - always, it's good, read it yourselves.
pg. 1 TY Man, this is bullshit. Why the old man holding this meeting on New Year’s Eve day? - Sounds off. New Year's Eve would be enough IMO.
I personally, would like to wait a hair to show that it's New years. Seemed a little "In your face" to start a script. I like wondering why it's such a pain for them working today. Then find out in a bit.
TY (CONT’D) Well you just gonna miss all the happenin’ then. Yo, bring her by afterwards? It’s on third and fourteenth.
I get that this guy is black, but white collar. I've got some black friends. It's funny, but I notice when they talk to me it's pretty straight. When they talk to their bro's proper english goes out the window. Racist? Am I Archie Bunker? Just a realist. That's my experience.
I'd reword this. Makes Ty sound like he's not above selling appliances for a living.
Character desriptions are vivid. Some people are fans of this, not me. Do you know who will be casted? I'd keep it simple lest something about them absolutley pertains to the story. MO.
I./E. WILL’S CAR - NIGHT - can you do that? serious question. Learn something new everyday. I think he should at least get out and open the door for her. First date an all.
The entire scene on the street could be cut IMO. We learn it's New year's later on. That's good enough IMO.
Jenny's dialogue is good. Especially the smoking in the restaurant.
Will already purses his lips earlier. Would like a diff description when Jenny does it. Repetition sounds amateur. I do it all the time.
akimbo - luv that word. very few know it's actually a word these days.
again, the names at the end of all the dialogue. To be honest, in a short, As an audience, do they really need to know them? makes it seem off IMO. We get that they're detectives. Be more pro to me if ya left out.
Best part so far is Jenny - she's delicious. You wrote her well.
pg. 18 WILL So how come you’re not spending New Year’s with friends or family?
This sets up that it's New Year's. again, you could cut some from the intro. Not to mention the detectives already did it for ya.
INT. ELIO’S RESTAURANT - NIGHT WILL I can’t believe I’m even considering telling you this.
I always feel we need a little action in a new scene before dialogue. Other's have said the same.
Crowder looks down with a Cheshire Cat grin. - very nice.
Good character development with Will. Finding out he was fondled by his baby sitter, could be a reason he's an anti-socialite. Or a killer. Thought provoking...
Very good job explaining Jenny's mishap with her little bro. Almost could use a flashback there. Seems to be the "in" thing to hate em', but in a short like this I think it would work nicely.
pg. 17 WILL (CONT’D) Maybe you wanted me to feel sorry for you. Or to make me like you.
That kinda makes Will seem a bit of a twat. Pissed he got one-upped by a girl who shot her brother. Babysitter fondling doesn't even compare. Lord knows i would have liked mine to fondle me... She was smokin'
LOPEZ Both victims were male. It could fit. We can run gun permits on addresses near the shoots.
That would be the first thing any police dept would do in a murder IMO. Not 3 years later.
Good job on this. Like I said, the best part was Jenny. An actress would lick her chops to play that part.
So some of the dialogue can be better and I think your opening scene can go. Other then that a very tight little short that leaves us wanting... And that's a good thing. Will the cops find Jenny first? Or is Will done for?
Thanks for the expanded review - glad you like Jenny as I kinda did as well when I was writing her. I'm too smart to go near her though...
Pretty useful comments and I'll take everything on board. Out of everything I've done recently I think this piece could probably use a freshening up. Or I may expand this to a feature one day, if I can figure out how to sustain the mystery for 90-100 minutes.
Hi Anthony, just gave this one a read. I haven't read the other reviews so this may be repetitive.
Overall I enjoyed this mystery. The alternating scenes between the cops and the couples flow pretty well. Each scene gave us a little more information than the previous one for us to discern who the real killer is. So you achieved good tension even for just two people talking in the restaurant!
Now, I'm confused about the opening two scenes. Are all the scenes flashback? Where does the first scene fit into the entire story?
I don't understand the purpose of the first scene either. Usually the first scene gave us a very exciting picture, and so the audience would be eager to learn what just happened before. But right now it's just a man shaving...no anticipation.
I was disappointed that Crowder and Lopez didn't play enough roles in the story. They gave us all the exposition, all those speculation, and all those suspicion.....but didn't do much about it! It really feels like what they are talking about is to feed the scenes in the restaurant, rather than being organic in the story.
I'm not too thrilled with the ending either. I don't understand the interaction between Jenny and the waiter. So did they know each other from before? Were both of them involved with the murders? I wish you can wrap this one up cleaner, rather than throwing another character into the mix.
Despite all these negativities, I like your writing, it's visual and crisp. Made it a breezy read. Plus I enjoyed the story.
Good job.
Herman
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The only flashback is Will and Ty, from earlier in the day. The scene with Will in the bathroom is him getting ready for the date.
As for the rest, I've had some really good suggestions from here and elsewhere, and I think that I can take them on board and at some point turn this into a feature. That will probably address everyone's concerns about it.
Thanks again and let me know if I can return the favor - Anthony
Thanks for your comments on my post. I saw your signature links and decided to give this a read. Being an ex-smoker, I agree with the excessive smoking comments. =p I like the overall flow and the dialogue didn't feel clunky at all. The detectives broke up the taking headness of the piece pretty well. I dug the beach sex exposition procedural stuff. I can see those two reviewing folders while going at it. Then the detective says, "Nevermind the connection. Forensics determined that the first shooter is left handed." She reaches for a snub nose with her left and Will reaches for one with his right in the car. Heh. What happens when two killers with the same M.O. clash?
Thanks for the read! I dug it!
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Thanks for taking this one off the scrap heap, and I'm glad you dug it.
Yeah, this was an early effort from me and I tried a genre I wasn't comfortable in. Some people have told me they see a feature here, but I don't think I'm talented enough to do another 70+ pages without a co-writer. I may know a couple of NY actor/directors I can partner with on this.
Well, it took a minute for this to get done.... grateful to director/producer Kris Smith for rescuing it from the scrap heap. He's a force of nature. Got a half-hour film made with very few resources.
And a shoutout to Andy Blithe at Aturn Films who is working on a streaming deal. It's available on YouTube for a limited time:
I love the performances of the leads. Annabella Rich is a revelation as Dani.
The attached script is the latest collaboration between Kris and me. He also gets screenwriting credit for "Britishizing" it, as well as modernizing it and adding the ending.
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