SimplyScripts Discussion Board
Blog Home - Produced Movie Script Library - TV Scripts - Unproduced Scripts - Contact - Site Map
ScriptSearch
Welcome, Guest.
It is July 1st, 2025, 10:38pm
Please login or register.
Was Portal Recent Posts Home Help Calendar Search Register Login
The primary purpose of the SimplyScripts Discussion Board is the discussion of unproduced screenplays. If you are a producer or director lookng for your next project, the works here are available for option, purchase or production only if you receive permission from the author.

NOTE: these screenplays are NOT in the public domain and MAY NOT be used or reproduced for any purpose (including eductional purposes) without the expressed written permission of the author.

New to SimplyScripts? - Tell us about yourself! | How does this discussion board work? - FAQs! | Submit Your Script
The answer to: Who wrote what script in the June 2025 One Week Challenge? <- click back there


The July 2025 One Week Challenge comes, soon.

How do I get my film's link and banner here?
Short Script of the Day | Featured Shorts Available for Production | Guidelines and Censorship | Produced Script Database | Oscar Winning Screenplays through the Ages | WGA Top 101 Screenplays

Forum Login
Username: Create a new Account
Password:     Forgot Password

SimplyScripts Screenwriting Discussion Board    Unproduced Screenplay Discussion    Short Comedy Scripts  ›  Weird Shit - Filmed - Again, as Red Flag
Users Browsing Forum
No Members and 3 Guests

 Pages: 1, 2, 3, 4 » : All
Recommend Print
  Author    Weird Shit - Filmed - Again, as Red Flag  (currently 4239 views)
Don
Posted: November 8th, 2019, 5:09pm Report to Moderator
Administrator
Administrator


So, what are you writing?

Location
Virginia
Posts
17346
Posts Per Day
1.94
Weird Shit by Steven Clark - Short, Comedy - Rousted out of his bedroom in just his socks and underwear, a nerdy teen has a lot of explaining to do to the F.B.I. 4 pages

production: Three actors, bedroom, interrogation room, minimal budget - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work




Red Flags from Red Flags on Vimeo.








Visit SimplyScripts.com for what is new on the site.

-------------
You will miss 100% of the shots you don't take.
- Wayne Gretzky

Revision History (3 edits; 1 reasons shown)
Don  -  May 26th, 2022, 2:57pm
Logged Offline
Site Private Message
eldave1
Posted: November 8th, 2019, 9:56pm Report to Moderator
January Project Group



Location
Southern California
Posts
6967
Posts Per Day
1.75
Well written, Steven. I liked it.  Not much to add.


My Scripts can all be seen here:

https://dlambertson.wixsite.com/scripts
Logged Offline
Private Message Reply: 1 - 50
Andrew
Posted: November 8th, 2019, 10:01pm Report to Moderator
Old Timer



Posts
1786
Posts Per Day
0.30

Quoted from eldave1
Well written, Steven. I liked it.  Not much to add.


Ditto.

Nice little short. Can see it being interesting for actors to tackle.

Good luck with it.


Logged Offline
Private Message Reply: 2 - 50
SAC
Posted: November 9th, 2019, 12:19am Report to Moderator
Of The Ancients



Location
Upstate NY
Posts
3532
Posts Per Day
0.78
Thank, Dave and Andrew.

This idea came to me last night so I just wrote it up real quick. I meant it as a little nod and a wink to us screenwriters. God knows I've searched for some crazy shit.

Steve


Logged Offline
Private Message Reply: 3 - 50
LC
Posted: November 9th, 2019, 12:40am Report to Moderator
Administrator



Location
The Great Southern Land
Posts
8654
Posts Per Day
1.41
Me too, Steve!  I often think if they're looking at my browser history they'd think what a strange collection of 'weird shit'. All for creative purposes, of course.

...

It's very good. Very enjoyable. The only thing I think is you could have drawn it out just a teeny bit longer and the ending was a bit abrupt.

I do get that you need to balance it however, otherwise you kill the joke.

Agent Orange.


Logged
Private Message Reply: 4 - 50
SAC
Posted: November 9th, 2019, 10:20am Report to Moderator
Of The Ancients



Location
Upstate NY
Posts
3532
Posts Per Day
0.78

Quoted from LC
Me too, Steve!  I often think if they're looking at my browser history they'd think what a strange collection of 'weird shit'. All for creative purposes, of course.

...

It's very good. Very enjoyable. The only thing I think is you could have drawn it out just a teeny bit longer and the ending was a bit abrupt.

I do get that you need to balance it however, otherwise you kill the joke.

Agent Orange.


Libby,

Thanks for reading. I see what you're saying about the ending. A teeny bit longer maybe. I really didn't want there to be too much to this - I was afraid I'd think of another joke and have to figure out a way to shoehorn it in. Hopefully it's balanced well enough.

Steve



Logged Offline
Private Message Reply: 5 - 50
Bayne
Posted: November 10th, 2019, 3:50pm Report to Moderator
New


Posts
36
Posts Per Day
0.02
Short, sweet, and the ending made me laugh out loud. Nice work.
Logged Offline
Private Message Reply: 6 - 50
JEStaats
Posted: November 10th, 2019, 4:11pm Report to Moderator
Old Timer


No sh*t, there I was....

Location
Tucson, AZ
Posts
1893
Posts Per Day
0.58
Hey, Steven - Funny shit. My only gripe is that you gave in too quick. I think it could be drawn just a bit with some more play on Agent Orange. Nicely done, as is, but could be more.

BTW - I'm so hesitant to search certain subjects and you nailed it. Thanks for recognizing our plight!
Logged
Private Message Reply: 7 - 50
MartinJ
Posted: November 10th, 2019, 5:05pm Report to Moderator
New


Posts
10
Posts Per Day
0.00
Steven,

I like the idea. I think Chad should protest his innocence for a while longer when being interrogated, hence draw out the humour for a little longer. it seems the federal agents are too quick to release him, especially seeing as they went to all the effort to monitor and arrest him in the first place.

Nice idea though and well wrote.
Logged Offline
Private Message Reply: 8 - 50
SAC
Posted: November 10th, 2019, 11:28pm Report to Moderator
Of The Ancients



Location
Upstate NY
Posts
3532
Posts Per Day
0.78

Quoted from Bayne
Short, sweet, and the ending made me laugh out loud. Nice work.


Thanks, Chris. Glad you enjoyed it.


Quoted from JEStaats
Hey, Steven - Funny shit. My only gripe is that you gave in too quick. I think it could be drawn just a bit with some more play on Agent Orange. Nicely done, as is, but could be more.

BTW - I'm so hesitant to search certain subjects and you nailed it. Thanks for recognizing our plight!


Thanks, I'm glad it mostly worked for you. You're probably right, Agent Orange could have been done a little more. Guess I was just being economical. Funny, ever since Back To School and Dean Martin I always had a thing for funny names.


Logged Offline
Private Message Reply: 9 - 50
SAC
Posted: November 11th, 2019, 11:10pm Report to Moderator
Of The Ancients



Location
Upstate NY
Posts
3532
Posts Per Day
0.78

Quoted from MartinJ
Steven,

I like the idea. I think Chad should protest his innocence for a while longer when being interrogated, hence draw out the humour for a little longer. it seems the federal agents are too quick to release him, especially seeing as they went to all the effort to monitor and arrest him in the first place.

Nice idea though and well wrote.


Thanks for the comments, Marvin. I understand what you're saying about stretching this out. A few people have said that, and had this been a serious piece I probably would have done that. But, being a comedy, I wanted it light and quick so I just sort of got in and got out. Again, thanks for the read.

Steve


Logged Offline
Private Message Reply: 10 - 50
Colkurtz8
Posted: November 14th, 2019, 9:49pm Report to Moderator
Old Timer



Location
--> Over There
Posts
1731
Posts Per Day
0.28
Well put together and amusing in parts.

The punchline is a bit naff but at only 4 pages it just about qualifies itself.

I know, damning with faint praise personified


Logged Offline
Private Message Reply: 11 - 50
SAC
Posted: November 16th, 2019, 12:29am Report to Moderator
Of The Ancients



Location
Upstate NY
Posts
3532
Posts Per Day
0.78

Quoted from Colkurtz8
Well put together and amusing in parts.

The punchline is a bit naff but at only 4 pages it just about qualifies itself.

I know, damning with faint praise personified


Thanks, Colonel. I think. No -- really appreciate the read, as always. Maybe some day soon I'll have something a little bigger and broader for you to sink your teeth into.

Steve



Logged Offline
Private Message Reply: 12 - 50
Zack
Posted: November 24th, 2019, 9:42pm Report to Moderator
Of The Ancients


This place happens to be my only world.

Location
Kentucky
Posts
5053
Posts Per Day
0.72
Hey, Dude. Gave this a read. Not sure how I feel about it.

On one hand, it's written well. It moved fast, no hang ups. Not overly visual, but solid enough.

Storywise... This just kinda left me hanging. It seems like this joke had some more legs, but you cut it off so quick. The two detective's gave up far too easily. After Chad reveals that he's a writer, the detective's should pry a bit more. Ask what he's writing. Ask why he's researching granny porn. Maybe Chad replies "The porn, oh that's not for my writing. That's for masturbating." Lol

Still, not a bad effort. Just needs something more.






I like my stories Simple. Straightforward. A to B. No C.



PUMPKIN GUTS -- An undead scarecrow slices and dices pumpkin patch intruders in this punk rock slasher! (76 pages, Horror) -- https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-horror/m-1749240995/
Logged
Private Message Reply: 13 - 50
SAC
Posted: November 25th, 2019, 12:19am Report to Moderator
Of The Ancients



Location
Upstate NY
Posts
3532
Posts Per Day
0.78

Quoted from Zack
Hey, Dude. Gave this a read. Not sure how I feel about it.

On one hand, it's written well. It moved fast, no hang ups. Not overly visual, but solid enough.

Storywise... This just kinda left me hanging. It seems like this joke had some more legs, but you cut it off so quick. The two detective's gave up far too easily. After Chad reveals that he's a writer, the detective's should pry a bit more. Ask what he's writing. Ask why he's researching granny porn. Maybe Chad replies "The porn, oh that's not for my writing. That's for masturbating." Lol

Still, not a bad effort. Just needs something more.






Thanks for reading, Zack. Yeah, I guess it definitely can be extended. Mostly everyone who read it said so. I wrote it real quick one night in between things, so I didn't give it too much attention. Maybe I should have. At least drag out the granny porn! haha.

Anyways, just got an email about this script, so let's see if anything happens.


Logged Offline
Private Message Reply: 14 - 50
 Pages: 1, 2, 3, 4 » : All
Recommend Print

Locked Board Board Index    Short Comedy Scripts  [ previous | next ] Switch to:
Was Portal Recent Posts Home Help Calendar Search Register Login

Forum Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post polls
You may not post attachments
HTML is on
Blah Code is on
Smilies are on
Powered by E-Blah Platinum 9.71B © 2001-2006