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Hey gurl, try again. It took me several attempts. Finally did the all small case lettering and it worked.



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Thanks, Gurl! Got it.
But apparently I was first going the dumb-blonde route by putting TEMP in.  


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Nice work, CJ. As mentioned that was an impressive dolly shot. That's a lot of track. The girl sneaking up on mom and pushing her in the closet was an unexpected screech moment.

The wheezing was a bit much. It can be creepy, but when Bee-el talks he doesn't sound very congested. Maybe you could find another sound effect to be more of his beckoning? (just my two cents)

All in all it's a sold short. I enjoyed it and thanks for sharing...

James


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Thank you for your input...this was also my first time editing. I used Premiere Pro and after the 2nd "saved" draft I went and deleted some files on my hard drive to save some space. Well, I didn't know this (rookie), but I guess it also deleted the files on Adobe Cloud at the same time....making my 2nd draft my ONLY master copy and I could only ADD to it...WTF? That being said...you're 100% right on the wheezing and I also think the "cold" breaths, I wanted to tone them down or edit them, but couldn't.

Oh well...lesson learned for my next film




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I won "Best Writer" at the Indie Horror Film Fest (Chicago) for my BEE-EL script!

I want to THANK SimplyScripts and all of you that helped me in this forum/thread, I would have never won without you!  <3





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Amazing, Chris!!! Congrats!

Hope this is just the beginning for you!


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Congrats! Nice achievement


My Scripts can all be seen here:

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Congratulations, Dude! That's impressive!
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