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Posted by: Don, July 26th, 2008, 8:52am
The July, 2008 One Week Challenge scripts.  Genre: Drama; Theme: "The guys at the post office are never gonna believe this."

The Red Eye by Alan Birch - Short, Drama - 0 - pdf, format 8)

Registered Delivery by Douglas Fir - Short, Drama - A mail man has to deliver a package to a Doctor with radiation poisoning. On his route he loses track of the package before he encounters the terrorists who want it. The race is on to find the package and keep it from the terrorists. - pdf, format 8)

The Family Name by Sitka Spruce - Short, Drama - An elderly collator pursues a coincidence to his past life. - pdf, format 8)

Postal by Montezuma Cypress  - Short, Drama - When threatened by an unknown organization, a postal worker must take matters into his own hands to protect himself. - pdf, format 8)

All eyes on her by Deodar Cedar - Short, Drama - Lucy has big plans for her future, but somebody has already made bigger plans for her present. - pdf, format 8)

Delivery by Tamarack Larch - Short, Drama - A mailman on his regular run finds himself in a most irregular and unsettling situation.  - rtf, format 8)

The Broken Locker by Red Spruce - Short, Drama - A broken locker in a post office leads to something which no one in the post office ever could believe. - pdf, format 8)

A Guy Named Yuley by Lost Mind - Short, Drama - A phobic postman questions the validity of a monster and a spiritual order called The Brotherhood.  As he turns his life over to chance, he discovers his fear is legitimate and The Brotherhood is real. - pdf, format 8)

Postman Pete by Prickly Ash - Short, Drama - George is sick and tired of being Postman Pete and everyone else is sick and tired of Postman Pete being George.  - rtf, format 8)

Return Service Requested by Freeman Maple - Short, Drama - When a mailman named Hank finds a package sent from the future, he must struggle with his own fear of failure and the wishes of his fellow postal workers to decide what to do with the package. - doc, format 8)

The Ballad of Uncle Sam: An Anarchist’s Medley by Pignut Hickory - Short, Drama - Grown weary to the established order of society, a man introduces a motivating idea of his very own in perilous ways. - pdf, format 8)

Love Letters by Persian Walnut - Short, Drama - Things begin to change for the worst when a Postman starts to receive love letters. - pdf, format 8)

I Love You, Elvira Gulch by Amur Cork-tree - Short, Drama - A thug dresses in drag to retrieve a package from the post office but the post office clerk wants to give him much more than he bargined for. - pdf, format 8)

The Package by Simon Poplar - Short, Drama - A man must retrieve a package to save his family. - pdf, format 8)

Mercy by Garry Oak - Short, Drama - Bad things come in small packages. A young runaway gets into trouble at a roadside diner. - pdf, format 8)

Sneak Peek by Scott Pine - Short, Drama - Sneak Peek is about Pete, an express delivery postman, who can't believe his luck when an attractive woman invites him into her home. However, what seems like an opportunity to get a bit of slap and tickle quickly turns into a life and death situation, as Pete finds himself trapped in the middle of an underworld dispute. - pdf, format 8)

The Stolen Santa by Wych Elm - Short, Drama - 30 years ago a tragedy ripped one mans life apart, now he is looking for answers and thinks he has found the man who might have them. Sometimes the truth is better not known. - pdf, format 8)
Posted by: dogglebe (Guest), July 26th, 2008, 7:01pm; Reply: 1
Don, are you splitting the scripts up like last time?  Or is this it?


Phil
Posted by: BryMo, July 26th, 2008, 7:21pm; Reply: 2
Some scripts up here i can't find on page 1.
Posted by: Grandma Bear, July 26th, 2008, 7:24pm; Reply: 3
17  scripts were submitted.
Posted by: Don, July 26th, 2008, 7:27pm; Reply: 4

Quoted from dogglebe
Don, are you splitting the scripts up like last time?  Or is this it?

Phil


This is it.  Seventeen submission.


Quoted from BryMo
Some scripts up here i can't find on page 1.


Not sure what you mean, here.  Are some scripts not loading up?

Don

Posted by: Takeshi (Guest), July 26th, 2008, 7:46pm; Reply: 5
The script Postal is only coming up as a title page followed by fourteen blank pages on my computer, which is weird because all the other scripts I've looked at seem okay and Pia said that Postal is fine on her computer.
Posted by: Grandma Bear, July 26th, 2008, 7:55pm; Reply: 6
I have had this happen a few times at MoviePoet. Can't remember if anyone ever figured out why this happens, but if i use a different pc then it works. I don't know if it has anything to do with it being saved in an older version of Adobe pdf or what, but I know what you mean. Very frustrating.
Posted by: Don, July 26th, 2008, 7:57pm; Reply: 7

Quoted from Takeshi
The script Postal is only coming up as a title page followed by fourteen blank pages on my computer, which is weird because all the other scripts I've looked at seem okay and Pia said that Postal is fine on her computer.


Works for me.  Try to right click and use save as when you hit

http://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?m-1217006209/

Don
Posted by: Moroh, July 27th, 2008, 1:27am; Reply: 8
Damn it!  Just wrote my first review and accidentally deleted it before posting.  Pure genius collection of constructive criticism all laid to waste.  Oh well... must be a sign to quit for the night.

By the way, newcomer to the contest but think it's a great little exercise.  Anything that gets you writing is a good thing.  Forces the mind out of hibernation and into action.  Plus, reviewing others work is helpful, not just for them but when you are able to see the flaws in someone else's writing, it makes you more conscious of it in your own work.

Anyway, I have read some entries and promise to give some reviews tomorrow.

Peace.  
Posted by: Sandra Elstree., July 27th, 2008, 2:00am; Reply: 9
Hello Moroh,

You are so right (write), anything that gets you writing is a good thing.

The OWC always produces things that never would have been otherwise. That's the beauty of it. And besides that, we can connect with "the underneath" of the stories. We get to get a sense of where the writer is coming from. There's just something special about it. Magic I guess.

Pia mentioned she loved the pressure and pounded out something quickly. This is the kind of magic that can happen. Others can work like crazy for an entire week, but that is magic too. They come up with things that... well, they wonder where it all comes from.

People go through all kinds of ups and downs, but the important thing is that they are going through the process. Go through the process enough times and something good has got to come of it. (Along with the bad that is.)

I'm with you in the: "Totally sucks when something gets deleted by an invisible force!"

We live and learn. Learn to copy and past a lot into notepad. ...and then wind up with this pile of &!#$!! that needs to be sorted.

Love and Light,

Sandra

Posted by: Blakkwolfe, July 27th, 2008, 9:59am; Reply: 10
Yep. Good tip from Sandra. Write your review in NotePad (or whatever little text editor you use), then copy and past into the little Simply Scripts review Box...That way your genius (and your valuable opinions) aren't scattered to the dark and scary nether realms of ...well, you get the idea...
Posted by: Souter Fell, July 27th, 2008, 2:18pm; Reply: 11
Hey Don

Are you going to eventually designate a thumbs up on scripts whose author has critiqued at least 1/3 of the submissions.  I think that was a really good idea and really helped weed out who was trying to participate for the group and who was just saying "look at me."
Posted by: Breanne Mattson, July 27th, 2008, 2:39pm; Reply: 12

Quoted from Souter Fell
Hey Don

Are you going to eventually designate a thumbs up on scripts whose author has critiqued at least 1/3 of the submissions.  I think that was a really good idea and really helped weed out who was trying to participate for the group and who was just saying "look at me."


I understand what you’re saying - and why you’re saying it - but isn’t this just basically trying to publicly humiliate the people who don’t participate? We can all plainly see who participates and who doesn’t.

The way I see it, it’s just an unavoidable design flaw with anonymous challenges. It’s something we have to tolerate to some degree. As long as people submit work anonymously, there are going to be those people who take advantage of the situation.

It’s the same thing every time. Some people submit and participate. And then there are people we’ve never heard of before who submit, get their work read and reviewed, and disappear into the ether. But then there are also usually people - such as myself this go around - who read and review some scripts without having one entered and it sort of makes up the difference a little.

Then you have some people (Bert springs to mind) who wait until the names are released to read any so they can avoid reading and reviewing non participatory writers. Writers who don’t care enough to participate probably aren’t going to care about any measures we take to call them to account.

Just some thoughts.


Breanne
Posted by: Sandra Elstree., July 27th, 2008, 3:21pm; Reply: 13

The way I see it, I know who participates on this board and who doesn't and I really don't care if some people write and don't critique. I'm not losing anything by it.

I work at critiquing because that's part of the business and I spend time on scripts based upon what I see as the effort of the writer. Now of course this varies from script to script but I can usually tell the difference between careless copy and copy that is simply "green".

If there exist prodigies on here that are able to develop their skills without working critiques, well then more power to them. If I am only on the reading and critiquing end, then I can only stand to benefit by reading and studying their masterpieces.

On the other hand, I lose nothing by critiquing the poor shmuck who continues to write work that never seems to improve because they don't invest the time to the work.

The only way to work is to work. If people think they are getting away with something by critiquing as little as possible, they are to be pitied not condemned.

Sandra
Posted by: Takeshi (Guest), July 27th, 2008, 7:29pm; Reply: 14
I mentioned this before but I'll mention it again. Do you guys there should be spoiler warnings with people's reviews? I've seen some shocking spoilers in some of the reviews, some that have totally given away the ending, no less, yet, no spoiler warnings.  
Posted by: Grandma Bear, July 27th, 2008, 7:34pm; Reply: 15
Chris,

I personally don't se the need for spoiler warnings.

Most people that read a review will assume that there might be a spoiler in there...

If someone wants to read a script and not be influenced by previous reviews, they shouldn't read them.
Posted by: Souter Fell, July 27th, 2008, 7:36pm; Reply: 16
I dont think spoiler warners are necessary since ideally your on the discussion thread because you'e read it. I will admit that i sometimes will read the first line or two of a review if i'm not sure if i want to read the piece. but with shorts, its pretty get in get out so it dont take that much to read it.
Posted by: Takeshi (Guest), July 27th, 2008, 7:58pm; Reply: 17
I don't know, guys. I think it's easy enough to just write SPOILER at the top of the review if there're are any.  
Posted by: Breanne Mattson, July 27th, 2008, 8:27pm; Reply: 18
I think people should just assume there will be spoilers in a review. It’s almost impossible to write a review without revealing something that would be considered a spoiler. I used to write spoiler alerts but then I realized I had them in practically every review. So now I just write my review. If I don’t want to read a spoiler, I just don’t read the reviews.


Breanne
Posted by: bert, July 27th, 2008, 8:30pm; Reply: 19

Quoted from Takeshi
...it's easy enough to just write SPOILER...


Chris is absolutely right.


Quoted from Breanne
I used to write spoiler alerts... but...I had them in...every review.


Breanne is absolutely right.

As long as you are commenting on scripts, I suppose it is all good.

I hope some of you new guys playing for the first time are planning to catch up on your reading....
Posted by: Takeshi (Guest), July 29th, 2008, 4:05pm; Reply: 20
At what point should we start posting our guesses?
Posted by: stebrown, July 29th, 2008, 4:15pm; Reply: 21
I'm guessing Willy Brown wrote The Broken Locker?
Posted by: Takeshi (Guest), July 29th, 2008, 4:20pm; Reply: 22
Indeed. And you can lock in Pia for Love Letters.
Posted by: sniper, July 29th, 2008, 4:23pm; Reply: 23
I'm guessing Bert wrote Mercy. Why? Cos' it's got a teddy bear in it and we all know Bert's got a thing for teddy bears.

I think Nik or maybe Michael Meyers wrote The Ballad of Uncle Sam.
Posted by: Grandma Bear, July 29th, 2008, 4:28pm; Reply: 24
What???

I didn't even enter anything... at least not that I can remember.

Three people are easy to guess since they put their names on the cover pages.

I don't think Bert entered anything. I think Cornetto wrote Mercy, but I haven't finished them all yet.
Posted by: Moroh, July 29th, 2008, 4:42pm; Reply: 25

Quoted from stebrown
I'm guessing Willy Brown wrote The Broken Locker?


Priceless.


Sorry, I'm new to the process so i have no idea of the tendencies of the other regular writers.  Still, I think it will be interesting to find out.

Look forward to future OWC's and getting to know you all better.  
Posted by: Takeshi (Guest), July 29th, 2008, 4:42pm; Reply: 26

Quoted from Grandma Bear
What???

I didn't even enter anything... at least not that I can remember.




Quoted from Grandma Bear
This one seemed like it was written by someone tipsy or drunk even, on the eve of the deadline.




Ah-ha!
Posted by: sniper, July 29th, 2008, 4:48pm; Reply: 27

Quoted from Grandma Bear
I think Cornetto wrote Mercy

Really? Idunno, it just seems too 'nomal' a script to have been written by Cornetto.

:)

Posted by: stebrown, July 29th, 2008, 5:16pm; Reply: 28
I'll give you a clue about mine unless it goes against the rules...

...it was written in just over an hour and has gone down as well as expected haha

Wish I'd gone with my comedy one.
Posted by: BryMo, July 29th, 2008, 6:13pm; Reply: 29
First thing i should do is apoligize. I haven't been around to post ANY remarks or reviews because my laptop has completely fried last Saturday. I didn't want people to think i was flaking on anything.

Now i have a new laptop and am ready to review. (Once i get used to this new mouse pad)

-bryan.
Posted by: Sandra Elstree., July 29th, 2008, 6:40pm; Reply: 30

I'll give you a hint on mine. I actually originally had written Part One, but then when I saved it into one of its many evolutions, I lost the part with "Part".

I actually wrote Part Two First, which was supposed to be Part One, but then I was struck by... By a craving for a big bowl of...

...of salad.

Sandra
Posted by: Shelton, July 29th, 2008, 8:16pm; Reply: 31

Quoted from Sandra Elstree.

I'll give you a hint on mine. I actually originally had written Part One, but then when I saved it into one of its many evolutions, I lost the part with "Part".

I actually wrote Part Two First, which was supposed to be Part One, but then I was struck by... By a craving for a big bowl of...

...of salad.

Sandra


That's almost as good a hint as having your name on the script.

Posted by: Grandma Bear, July 29th, 2008, 9:11pm; Reply: 32
I've changed my mind.

I think Cornetto wrote Family Name.  :-)
Posted by: mcornetto (Guest), July 29th, 2008, 9:20pm; Reply: 33

Quoted from Grandma Bear

I think Cornetto wrote Family Name.  :-)


Ain't nobody gonna pin that one on me.
Posted by: Takeshi (Guest), July 30th, 2008, 12:49am; Reply: 34

Quoted from stebrown
...it was written in just over an hour and has gone down as well as expected haha



I know what you mean. I'm almost too afraid to look when I see that someone new has reviewed mine.  

Posted by: Sandra Elstree., July 31st, 2008, 12:41am; Reply: 35

Here are some of my favorites so far.

I think that these ones are the most professional and polished:

The Family Name

Love Letters

The Ballad of Uncle Sam

Delivery: I think this one, though it needs to morph into a script is a good story and I like the writer's personality:

I thought both Mercy and Stolen Santa have a lot of potential to be feature lengths.

I think The Broken Locker, though written by a young inexperienced writer has a lot of young energy and the creative idea can be felt within despite the typical mistakes in all young writing.

I loved the creative idea within Return Service Requested.

Postal could be an excellent psychological thriller if developed.

I still have several others to read, but this certainly hasn't been a boring challenge.
There have been some common stereotypes running through with the apparently mundane life of a postman; but maybe we'll all be stimulated by this and encouraged to write about a postman who lives a fulfilled life.

Sandra
Posted by: Moroh, July 31st, 2008, 4:38am; Reply: 36
Sorry, It's 2:30 am, I'm burned out and I really have nothing to say right now.

Just tired seeing myself referred to as a "maybe posted a couple of times member"

This will be my 20th post, so I'm hoping it will kick me up a notch.  Let's give it a try!


Posted by: Moroh, July 31st, 2008, 4:42am; Reply: 37
No dice.

Oh well, at least this will be post number 21.


PS   I've heard of people talking to themselves but I might be the first who has posted to himself.  My friends have always said I'm not quite right.  Gonna be tough to defend myself after this pathetic display.

Going to bed now.......zzzzzzzzzzzz.
Posted by: Takeshi (Guest), July 31st, 2008, 4:43am; Reply: 38
Don't sweat it , Moroh.

Don't count the posts, make the posts count.

BTW, guys. I'm now ranked number 18 on the top 20 posters list. YIPEE!
Posted by: Blakkwolfe, July 31st, 2008, 2:41pm; Reply: 39
Just a word of thanks to everyone supporting this edition of the OWC...Read all the scripts and, for the most part, they were all pretty enjoyable...Hope some of the newer writers will take the critiques to heart, and just know that honesty builds better writers and that's how you learn...Suggest printing out all your critiques, and pin them up on the wall. This is valuable input and will help you in the future...Do work on a rewrite. Got to put that knowledge to work for  wnext time...

Favorites? Liked different ones for different reasons, although am rather disappointed that NO ONE managed to insert zombies into the story line...(Where was the severed zombie head that was delivered to the wrong address? The guys at the post office...)

Common error was the missing of proper character introductions...

Got a couple guesses...Sandra might have done Yuley, New Guy did Red Eye (but he has left other reviews)...on board with Pia doing Love Letters (remind me to get slightly tipsy next time I want to write something)...Cornetto seems a good match with  the Family Name...Guessing Tim Betts might have done Uncle Sam (good action with super villians...) Stebrown-All eyes, maybe ...Zombie Sean- Postal...Cindy may have done registered delivery. Mercy? Not the foggiest idea...

Favorites? Liked Love Letters, Family Name and Postal...

Good show, ya'll.
Posted by: stebrown, July 31st, 2008, 3:04pm; Reply: 40

Quoted from Blakkwolfe

Favorites? Liked different ones for different reasons, although am rather disappointed that NO ONE managed to insert zombies into the story line...Stebrown-All eyes, maybe ...


My original did feature a werewolf if that counts. As for your guess...I've said too much already.
Posted by: Blakkwolfe, July 31st, 2008, 3:21pm; Reply: 41

Quoted from stebrown
My original did feature a werewolf if that counts.


HELL YEAH, that counts! Werewolves, zombies and vampires...all good regardless of the genre, if you do it right...Example?

ELIZABETH
Oh, Charles...My Dear...My furry love...Oh, my heart would still
burn for you forever! Hot with the passion of a thousand exploding
suns...regardless of the frequent maimings and seemingly random
evicerations...Oh, Kiss Me Charles! Kiss me now, kiss me...forever.
Kiss Me...Deadly!

CHARLES
AWROOOOO!!!

See?
Posted by: stebrown, July 31st, 2008, 3:29pm; Reply: 42
The guys at the post office are never gonna believe that!
Posted by: Blakkwolfe, July 31st, 2008, 3:37pm; Reply: 43

Quoted from stebrown
The guys at the post office are never gonna believe that!


:)
Posted by: Souter Fell, July 31st, 2008, 3:49pm; Reply: 44
geez, I used zombies for the first time during the last OWC and got downright scathed for it. Can't win for losing. :P
Posted by: Moroh, July 31st, 2008, 4:00pm; Reply: 45
Just something that popped into my mind when reflecting on the scripts:

No one resorted to the old dog chasing the mailman cliche in any of the scripts.

In fact, the few dogs I remember, were probably the nicest characters towards the mailmen.
It was everybody else that the poor postal workers had to worry about.

Just had another funny thought.  A good dramatic script might've been to show a mailman just sitting on a front stoop and spouting off a 10 page philosophical rant about how depressing his life is and how he is treated so badly by everyone in the neighborhood.  Only to see at the end that he was just speaking to a dog.

Too bad I didn't have more time to work on my OWC entry.  Could have really tortured all you guys with that gripping read.
Posted by: stebrown, July 31st, 2008, 4:11pm; Reply: 46
haha Morah, that's what my original one was. Man vs Dog, with the postman ending up being the one who chases the dog after turning into a werewolf...was a blatant comedy though.

Man Bites Dog was the title, wish I'd entered that one instead now
Posted by: Sandra Elstree., July 31st, 2008, 5:22pm; Reply: 47

Quoted from Blakkwolfe
Just a word of thanks to everyone supporting this edition of the OWC...

Got a couple guesses...Sandra might have done Yuley, New Guy did Red Eye (but he has left other reviews)...on board with Pia doing Love Letters (remind me to get slightly tipsy next time I want to write something)...Cornetto seems a good match with  the Family Name...Guessing Tim Betts might have done Uncle Sam (good action with super villians...) Stebrown-All eyes, maybe ...Zombie Sean- Postal...Cindy may have done registered delivery. Mercy? Not the foggiest idea...

Favorites? Liked Love Letters, Family Name and Postal...

Good show, ya'll.


I second the thanks to everyone here working hard on the feedback. And I had the same guess as you thinking that: Tim Betts (I bet I bet!!!) Is the writer of The Ballad of Uncle Sam! Good job!!! Batman-like or not, Good job!

I also think Pia did Love Letters and Michael is a good candidate for Family Name. I need to finish off the reads and come back with a few more guesses.

Sandra

Posted by: Sandra Elstree., July 31st, 2008, 5:27pm; Reply: 48

Quoted from Moroh


Just had another funny thought.  A good dramatic script might've been to show a mailman just sitting on a front stoop and spouting off a 10 page philosophical rant about how depressing his life is and how he is treated so badly by everyone in the neighborhood.  Only to see at the end that he was just speaking to a dog.


That would have been a good one! That would have been really good!!!

Sandra
Posted by: Takeshi (Guest), July 31st, 2008, 5:28pm; Reply: 49

Quoted from stebrown

Man Bites Dog was the title, wish I'd entered that one instead now


That title has been used before, Ste.
Posted by: stebrown, July 31st, 2008, 5:52pm; Reply: 50
Yeah Chris, I normally google a title when I think of it. A pretty harsh film by the sounds of it. Still, cool title though.
Posted by: Shelton, July 31st, 2008, 6:17pm; Reply: 51

Quoted from stebrown
Yeah Chris, I normally google a title when I think of it. A pretty harsh film by the sounds of it. Still, cool title though.


It's a mockumentary.  Not a terrible movie, but alright I guess.  I saw it long ago, and recently watched it again on cable via on demand.

Posted by: Grandma Bear, August 1st, 2008, 7:10am; Reply: 52
It's been a week now...

When should we out ourselves?
Posted by: sniper, August 1st, 2008, 7:17am; Reply: 53
Haven't you already been outed, Sweedy?
:)
Posted by: mcornetto (Guest), August 1st, 2008, 7:26am; Reply: 54
I say we should just keep it anonymous forever because I didn't like the reviews I got for mine so I'd rather no one know I wrote it. ;-)
Posted by: Blakkwolfe, August 1st, 2008, 7:40am; Reply: 55
Perhaps it is time for Mensa worthy, mind-bendingly complex clues...Here's one for my hypothetical, alleged entry.

It has a mailman in it...and justice for all.


Posted by: sniper, August 1st, 2008, 8:18am; Reply: 56
My take on this OWC.

Having read 13 entries so far, I'm simply not in the mood to read anymore of them. I think, as would be expected, the quality of the scripts has varied tremendously from, let's face it, trash to fairly solid. Maybe there's a real gem among those I haven't read but I'm not counting on it. The majority of the scripts were so-and-so in my book but now that the time is no longer a factor, I think a lot of them could easily be turned it something good.

I think it was very disappointing however just how far a lot of the script strayed from the given genre. The theme or "The Line" was used with more or less success in all of the scripts I've read, sometimes it was simply just popped in there to complete the task while others actually incorporated it seamlessly into the story.

Having not participated in the OWC, I guess it's easy for me to pass judgment on these scripts but bear in mind it's only because I'm not a good enough a writer to slap a story together in a week.

Congrats to everyone who participated, and to all the newcomers to the board and the OWC, I hope y'all enjoyed the experience.

Rob
Posted by: CindyLKeller, August 1st, 2008, 10:47am; Reply: 57
Like Rob, I didn't enter this one either, enjoyed the reading though.

Usually there is a thread where people guess who wrote what, but I wouldn't even attempt it this time. Haven't got a clue to most of them.

Cindy
Posted by: Souter Fell, August 1st, 2008, 11:01am; Reply: 58
Hey if were giving clues, ideally at the end of mine the credits would roll as "Someday Never Comes" plays.
Posted by: sniper, August 1st, 2008, 11:06am; Reply: 59
Then I'm guessing Tim wrote either Return Service Requested or The Stolen Santa...or something else.
Posted by: Blakkwolfe, August 1st, 2008, 12:02pm; Reply: 60
So much for my prediction of Cindy maybe writing Registered Delivery. Thanks for reading though, Cindy and Rob. You guys rock.

To restore my shaken confidence, I'm going out on a limb and boldy predict that Willy Brown wrote The Broken Locker. (and not a bad effort. Keep at it, Willy!)
Posted by: Grandma Bear, August 1st, 2008, 12:36pm; Reply: 61
I did not write Love Letters.
It was a ploy to confuse you people. I contacted Bert and begged him with a promise of a hefty reward to play along and it worked. You all fell for it. ;D

And for the record. I don't drink wine.  ;-)
Posted by: Moroh, August 1st, 2008, 1:34pm; Reply: 62
Okay... think I've gotten to every script.  (except for the 2 that I couldn't open and/or read the font)

First time here and I had a good time with it.  Fun little exercise that forces writers to do what we all need to do... write.

Research, outlines, formatting... all important stuff but so much is gained by simply putting thoughts down on paper.  Practice does make perfect.

Only bummer (to me at least) was the genre that was selected.  Would have liked to ditch the genre restriction all together.  For such as quick deadline, just think it forces your hand into resorting to the 1st or 2nd concept that pops into your head.  In turn, limiting most scripts to 'mailman falls into bizarre situation' idea.

However, lotta fun writing and reading the entries.  Hope to stay a regular part of the boards and look forward to chatting with you guys/gals more often.

Peace.

PS  Lotta people throwing out authorship hints but I'll not resort to such nonsense.   The only thing I'll say is the "signs always become clearer after the fact."





Posted by: Souter Fell, August 1st, 2008, 1:55pm; Reply: 63
I do have to agree that the drama "genre," for the second consecutive time had something to do with the lower participation on this Challenge and the line itself wasn't very fun to work with. I do think there were a few that really hit it hard to find a new angle for and a bunch that automatically submitted to "my character is a mailman, and everything is drama to start with."

I would in the future like to see quirkier genre selections: period action, children's, etc. Or maybe role or settings requirements: all roles must be opposite sex of author, everything must happen in the same room.

All in all, I do love the Challenges as they serve well to get the gears grinding.
Posted by: Takeshi (Guest), August 1st, 2008, 4:20pm; Reply: 64

Quoted from Grandma Bear
I did not write Love Letters.
It was a ploy to confuse you people. I contacted Bert and begged him with a promise of a hefty reward to play along and it worked. You all fell for it. ;D

And for the record. I don't drink wine.  ;-)



I didn't fall for it. I knew all along and just pretended to fall for it. So you guys fell for it. I contacted myself with promises of a hefty reward to play along and it worked.  ;D


Quoted from mcornetto
I say we should just keep it anonymous forever because I didn't like the reviews I got for mine so I'd rather no one know I wrote it. ;-)


I'll second that motion.
Posted by: bobtheballa (Guest), August 1st, 2008, 5:17pm; Reply: 65
Like Moroh, I'm a first timer to the site and the OWC was my first/only submission so far. I read all the scripts and while they didn't all appeal to me, I think it's good for us writers to take the time to read others' work so that we get a chance to hear someone else's voice.

I won't give a clear hint at which script is mine, but I will say that I joined this site on the Wednesday or Thursday of the challenge week and I'm pretty sure that my script reflects its minute development period. My features are nowhere near completion, but I'm hoping to put up a short sometime soon so that everyone here has a better idea of what I can do with a little more time.

Thanks for the criticisms everyone, and thanks everyone that submitted an entry of their own, if nothing else the whole process was entertaining and a good learning experience.
Posted by: BryMo, August 1st, 2008, 5:20pm; Reply: 66
Have any of the scripts this OWC gotten high ratings on every review? As far as i can tell the answer seems to be no.

Its great to see how opinions differ from each other.
Posted by: Grandma Bear, August 1st, 2008, 5:25pm; Reply: 67
i would like to see a 24hr excersise one time.
I usually don't start writing till the last day anyway. ;D
Posted by: Sandra Elstree., August 1st, 2008, 6:27pm; Reply: 68

It would also be interesting to work with a partner and do a short in a small time frame.

I think that maybe 24 hours might be a little too short though because we are dealing with time zones across the world.

It's 2:23 am (next day - Saturday) over in Israel right now. And here it's only 5:23 pm on Mountain time here in Alberta.

If we were working with a partner over there for instance, it wouldn't always work too well if we were limited to 24 hours.

If one doesn't need to sync up with a partner for a challenge though, 24 hours could work. The only thing would be other work and commitments getting in the way.

Sandra
Posted by: bobtheballa (Guest), August 1st, 2008, 7:25pm; Reply: 69

Quoted from Sandra Elstree.

It would also be interesting to work with a partner and do a short in a small time frame.

I think that maybe 24 hours might be a little too short though because we are dealing with time zones across the world.

It's 2:23 am (next day - Saturday) over in Israel right now. And here it's only 5:23 pm on Mountain time here in Alberta.

If we were working with a partner over there for instance, it wouldn't always work too well if we were limited to 24 hours.

If one doesn't need to sync up with a partner for a challenge though, 24 hours could work. The only thing would be other work and commitments getting in the way.

Sandra


Maybe if we knew about it really far in advance so we could plan accordingly? Or maybe two challenges could take place back to back (one 24 hours, the second that one ends the second one goes up) incase it's too difficult to settle on a single date.
Posted by: Sandra Elstree., August 1st, 2008, 10:21pm; Reply: 70

However it works, I love the idea of seeing people's ideas and craft generated on demand.

It's a hard thing to do since one can't wait for inspiration to hit.

Sandra
Posted by: Blakkwolfe, August 2nd, 2008, 9:06am; Reply: 71
24 hour challenge would be fun. It would be cool to have a real off the wall kind of genre as Tim (Souterfell) suggested, though. I'll play.
Posted by: slap shot, August 3rd, 2008, 12:27am; Reply: 72
this was my first time...thanks to all that took the time to read/respond to my submission...i know i have a long way to go to reach the level where some of you are...i think critical reviews are good...as long as they are done in a positive manner...its hard to get unbiased feedback sometimes, and this is a great place for it...thanks again...

peace,
slap shot
Posted by: Sandra Elstree., August 3rd, 2008, 12:47am; Reply: 73

We all have a long way to go...

Not just in this little life's journey, but in an eternal quest for perfection and reason.

(I can hear Mike saying he's got a tingling again.)

... Gosh Darn Glimmer-Gleam he keeps grabbing... and no one will ever no why because the posts were deleted... and he was the one who really started it all.

Sheesh! Now everyone is wondering about Glimmer-Gleam!

Sandra
Posted by: sniper, August 3rd, 2008, 6:17am; Reply: 74
When will the original author names be announced?
Posted by: Souter Fell, August 3rd, 2008, 12:52pm; Reply: 75
I was wondering the same. There's a couple of authors who I'd like to read additional work of.
Posted by: Shelton, August 3rd, 2008, 1:26pm; Reply: 76

Quoted from Sandra Elstree.

... Gosh Darn Glimmer-Gleam he keeps grabbing... and no one will ever no why because the posts were deleted... and he was the one who really started it all.


Exactly.  I know how to clean up my messes.  It was fun, but had to go.

I would imagine the authors will be revealed soon enough.
Posted by: CindyLKeller, August 3rd, 2008, 2:19pm; Reply: 77
I'd like to see who wrote what, too.

I believe as other do that Pia wrote Love Letters, and Sandra had her name on hers... unless it was put there on purpose, to throw us off... :-)

I got an e-mail from one writer thanking me for reading the script and commenting. (so I know who wrote that one).

I saw Breanne around the boards lately, too.
There were a couple scripts that were really well-written, so maybe one of them may belong to her... but then again she's newly married, so maybe not.

Ah! I give up. All this thinking is giving me a headache. Guess I'll have to wait.

Cindy
Posted by: Moroh, August 4th, 2008, 9:16pm; Reply: 78
These boards have been eerily quiet.

Is everybody burned out on the scripts or are you all just laying low until the names are announced?



Posted by: dogglebe (Guest), August 4th, 2008, 10:24pm; Reply: 79
There should always be spoiler warnings.  Still, some people just don't listen.


Phil
Posted by: Sandra Elstree., August 4th, 2008, 10:49pm; Reply: 80

Since the issue of "spoiler" has come up a lot lately. I am going to start typing "Spoiler" at the top of each review.

LOL, it will get to be such a habit, I'll be writing someone an ordinary email, and I'll write: Spoiler, and they will think I've flipped my lid. And at that point, I probably will have.

Sandra
Posted by: Grandma Bear, August 4th, 2008, 11:04pm; Reply: 81

Quoted from dogglebe
There should always be spoiler warnings.  Still, some people just don't listen.


Only an idiot would read a comment in a script thread and be surprised there were spoilers.

If anyone can't handle that, don't read any of my comments! I refuse to write SPOILER!!!!!

Posted by: Sandra Elstree., August 4th, 2008, 11:54pm; Reply: 82

We could compromise with the Spoiler enthusiasts: We could abbreviate and write:

Spah!

Shaves off three letters and sounds pretty cool ta boot.

Or maybe:

Speh!

For those disgusted by the idea.

Someone who is into the whole Acro-Macronym thing could write:

SW

But then they'd be writing the initials to my name which would be seriously confusing.

Maybe just:

S

And then everybody would go WTF

And that just sounds cranky...

"No, it doesn't sound cranky," somebody says. "How is that cranky?"

Well in my day...

And Mike says, "When I was a wee lad... I had a train...

Ok, forget it.

Go back to watching "Nightmare Theatre K?"

I guess they don't have that anymore do they?

The Big Show? Kojak?

I'm outta here and I'm takin' Spah or Spi or whatever it is with me.

Sandra

Posted by: CindyLKeller, August 5th, 2008, 5:02am; Reply: 83
I'm with the girls here. I also think it's a given.

How do you respond to a script after reading it?
You write what you think about it, and that involves the story, the characters, what worked for the reader, and what did not.
So I believe that if people don't want the script spoiled for them, they shouldn't read what others have to say about it.

Anyway, how can you leave a reply without a spoiler?

Unless you write something like: it didn't work for me.

Cindy
Posted by: mcornetto (Guest), August 5th, 2008, 5:15am; Reply: 84
If there is a "big" reveal in the story and I'm going to blatantly mention it then I will put a Spoiler tag.  Otherwise I don't worry about it.  
Posted by: slap shot, August 5th, 2008, 12:53pm; Reply: 85
i agree with "the girls"...it should be assumed that offering a critique of a submission is going to reveal key elements in the piece...if you don't want to know the score of the game, don't watch sportscenter...
Posted by: Don, August 5th, 2008, 2:33pm; Reply: 86
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