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Mr. Blonde
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Is this a feature screenplay or is this a mini series? Still a bit confused.


Feature screenplay utilizing three to five vignettes with a wraparound segment included.


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Feature screenplay utilizing three to five vignettes with a wraparound segment included.


10-4 boss... I got nuthin but time now, so I'm in.


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10-4 boss... I got nuthin but time now, so I'm in.


Had a feeling you might have a change of heart, now. So, naturally, we can expect your draft in two or three days, right? =)


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I already got my stories. Just need to put it down on paper.

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Sean, right?,...
If you want an introduction through a curator and the segments about the art works, then, whats our own take?

To me it's exactly the show as an feature. Can you give an example, please?


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Sean, right?,...
If you want an introduction through a curator and the segments about the art works, then, whats our own take?

To me it's exactly the show as an feature. Can you give an example, please?


You write your own introductions, you create your own art and you create your own stories.


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"you create your own art and you create your own stories"

the series did that everytime, to invent a new story and picture. And you said the challenge also demands the curator introduction. So, no bullshit, give me an example to understand.


edit: That's what you were saying about the intro:

"The host, Rod Serling, would introduce three paintings per episode and each painting had a story attached to it.

For your feature-length script, you're doing the same set-up: a host will introduce between three and five paintings.


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I can’t tell you the right way to make the setup your own, but I can tell you how I did it in my current draft.

Instead of a museum or traditional gallery, I have some eccentric old-money gazillionaire who patronizes artists. The “curator” is showing the new batch of artists the ropes by explaining some of the pieces made by the artists before them.

At this point it is still pretty half-baked as a wraparound, but already it’s not the same as the TV show.


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Hey Frank,
that actually sounds cool. The rich investor guy brings a lot of mystery in I guess, and possibly keeps his own plans and motives for himself for a while.

So, in this vague outline of a concept you would chop off that whole fourth wall breaking element of the curator and go with live action?


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Instead of a generic art gallery, I'm going with specific galleries and having the curator stroll through them describing paintings.

If given more time, I'd actually find a real painting in each gallery and create a story around it.

It sounds like people are too hung up on the curator and intro part.

The "Curator" could be at:

Google Images.  
It could be at an auction.  
It could be some kids drawings in 1st grade.
It could be at a storage unit auction.

Just think of places where any...and I mean ANY drawing/painting/sketch/etching/woodworking, or some other form of artwork might reside, and go from there.

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Yeah, there's a lot of space as you describe it, Jordan.

So, in your opinion the curator could be a kid that explains his pictures to the classmates…?

Okay fine. Fourth wall breaking curator walks around and pulls off dustsheets from paintings - introduction isn't a must. Check.

I could also imagine a story could make more sense if the curator appears after the story's exposition. And the paintings are introduced and evolve in act 2. Not sure if this is in the sense of the challenge though. The classic intro would be some adolescents walking into the creepy mansion a la Rocky Horror Picture Show first. And then they start to find the dangerous shit, know what I mean...?

I also think in the end, "for my take", the actual plot should after all be more important than the paintings' story segments.

Will be back tonight, for some more thoughts if someone likes to chat further. I think I got a first idea.


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So, in your opinion the curator could be a kid that explains his pictures to the classmates…?

I was going to have Virgil in a big city where Dore's pictures of the inferno would be graffiti. IMHO, I think it would be a bad idea to stick too close to the old TV series. Isn't it supposed to be your own take on this?


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I was going to have Virgil in a big city where Dore's pictures of the inferno would be graffiti. IMHO, I think it would be a bad idea to stick too close to the old TV series. Isn't it supposed to be your own take on this?


Haha. All right.


I actually would try it with a collaboration this time, so if anybody wants, just contact me, you are very welcome.

What I offer:

I like mystery, jump scare Horror although of course intelligent in backhand-- the rest of Horror I mostly don't know and have no feel for. And that's what I want to deliver right here, then, don't get me wrong, it's a vague impression and wish that I even will write some letters on a sheet for this one. A motivated partner might help. And I want it if you like. I think those movies, I discribed feeling wise, are justified and feel relaxing.

To get more definite:

The feeling of my first idea is, chamber play.

There's one room. Four walls of concrete, cubicle structure.

We find characters who wake up in that room.

Each of the four walls has one painting on them.

The curator is the villain who talks via loudspeaker to our characters.

Our characters have some guilt to pay. My/our movie should be fun to watch with some popcorn, but still it should be intelligent as a whole.


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Hey Frank,
that actually sounds cool. The rich investor guy brings a lot of mystery in I guess, and possibly keeps his own plans and motives for himself for a while.

So, in this vague outline of a concept you would chop off that whole fourth wall breaking element of the curator and go with live action?


That's the idea. The curator's exposition would be valid dialogue to characters actually interested in what he's saying.

A pet peeve of mine is how the exposition in sci-fi can get a little thick ("Thank you, Bob, for reminding me how to perform this process that I've done several times a day for years because it's, you know, my job."), so although this curator will come off a bit lecture-ish, it should still feel realistic. The new artists can also break up the lecture a bit by reacting.

Not claiming to break new theatrical ground here, of course. It's just the new-guy-who-needs-everything-explained trope, hopefully executed in a non-annoying way.

And about the rich guy... SPOILERS


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Frank, I cannot understand the following:


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A pet peeve of mine is how the exposition in sci-fi can get a little thick ("Thank you, Bob, for reminding me how to perform this process that I've done several times a day for years because it's, you know, my job."), so although this curator will come off a bit lecture-ish, it should still feel realistic. The new artists can also break up the lecture a bit by reacting.

Not claiming to break new theatrical ground here, of course. It's just the new-guy-who-needs-everything-explained trope, hopefully executed in a non-annoying way.


imo you're too much into that stuff. Can you explain easier and more understandable;;; no offence, Frank.


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