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Lullaby by Warren Duncan - Short, Horror - A dad pushes his daughter on a park swing. A perfectly innocent moment until itís not. 3 pages - pdf, format


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Hush (Horror Short Film) from Logan Ward on Vimeo.



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Hush (Horror Short Film Trailer) from Logan Ward on Vimeo.



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Some of the imagery in this is great but the lack of any real build up makes it more of a sketch than a full blown story... is this mean to be part of something bigger?


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Hi Anthony,

Thanks for the read and comment. The backstory to this is that it's the first short I've ever written and only the second piece of writing I've ever done. The first being a feature in this weeks unproduced scripts.

Until last week I had never seen a short (I know that's terrible), but once I found them I loved them. The one that stuck with me the most was Bedfellows. The way the writer (and the rest of the team) could conjure up such emotion in a little over two minutes, just brilliant.

That was my attempt with Lullaby. So in answer to your question, no it wasn't meant to be part of something bigger, but that's why I joined Simply scripts to see where I'm falling short and hopefully become a better writer for it.

Thanks again for the read. It's the first criticism I've ever gotten on something I've written. Potentially the first time something I've written has ever been read by someone other than me.

I'm glad you liked the imagery.

Cheers.

Just a side note. I've been trawling this site for about a year now and understand the how it works. I look forward to sharing my thoughts on scipts I read.


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Hey Warren, well as a first short this is a good effort, certainly for what is just one page!

Formatting, which often trips up new writers, is strong too.

Welcome to SS, get involved, comment on scripts etc and you'll get more reads back.

You might like this of mine on the other side of this coin - http://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-short/m-1397909711/s-0/

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Warren -- This is a great first script. Cleanly written. Pretty disturbing lol, but good. I was very recently in the same position as you of not having anything I'd ever written read or critiqued before... it's slightly terrifying at first. Everyone's very helpful here though.


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Anthony - I will have a read of that script today and let you know what I think.

Really did try to nail the formatting so I'm happy to hear that.


MarkItZero - Thanks for the read.  Disturbing is what I was going for, so that's great.

It is definately terrifying. I found it really hard to hit the submit button, releasing them into the world. I do look forward to hearing people's opinions though.


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Warren,

Some notes.

As others have pointed out, this isn't a real story with a real ending.  It works for what it is, but it needs a bit more.  If disturbing is what you're looking for, you found it.

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This is pretty much a one pager with a cut or two. It would stand better on its own in that respect. There wasn't enough there to make the final scene have much impact on me. It needs more pages.

If it's formatting you're most concerned with here, Good luck. You will find different advice in every writer. I would've done the newspaper a tad different. No dashes unless it's a full slug.

INSERT NEWSPAPER

It reads "BLAH, BLAH, BLAH" and shows two pictures of her parents.

BACK TO SCENE

My two cents. It is well written, though. Just needs more guts.

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Thanks for the reads.

I purposefully wrote this as a 'very short' short. I wanted to see what I could do and how effective it would be using imagery and setting tone is an extremely  short space of time.


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You start with an overcast day... but it may be better if it was sunny. Contrast. Maybe the play area is in fact in the killer's back garden. Although to begin with the viewer has the impression it's a public park. This way you can milk the reveal for quite a bit longer. Give us clues to the strangeness a bit at a time.

Either way though, this is all for the director and you to figure out. As it stands, the story does well enough on its own. It would be very easy to make. Good luck with it.


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Thanks for the read, Dustin.

I did toss up about what tone I wanted the day to set, and I ran with overcast.

Good idea about using the strangers back yard, but  I like how brazen it is to take the crime out into the puplic. This also seems less possible on a beautiful, sunny day as that is usually when parks are full of kids.


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Why are all serial killers and pedophiles most of the time overweight, balding and presumably white? It has sort of become cliche'.

Other than that, good job.


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So true Angry Bear, and I played right into it. I thought about swapping the characters but decided to go with the cliche'. I guess some just feel right.


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I do feel like this takes place in a public park.
And I'm mislead by the Log line. I eventually do figure out it's not Dad pushing his daughter but a pedophile pushing his victim. In Public. Which I have to doubt a pedophile would do.

On the other hand . . .
It is cleanly written. And disturbing. And the formatting is precise.
But it's only formatting of one page. Don't be surprised if, as your pieces get longer, it becomes harder to pass the formatting test around here. Be aware that formatting demands are different depending on which side of the pond the Critic is on. Just a hint.

So, as a germinal idea, it's a great seed. How about leaving your pedophile just as the cliche he is. Fat and balding. I can imagine an actor like John Candy (Yes, I know he's comedy. but imagine him) playing the part.

Now that I think about it. Your log line may have been right on. Anything else would have revealed too much before we read the single page.

I'm considered new here too. I vacillate from lurking to participating and back. Trying to be a good member.


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Thanks for the read, Wes.

Glad you seemed to like it. I will have a slightly longer short on SS soon. I have taken into account the tips I received from members of SS about formatting so we will see if the next script reads well.


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The setting is great, visually stunning.

Other than that: clean writing, proper formatting (not really sure about the newspaper insert thing tho as I don't use this kind of stuff), well done for a one page short script. But like the others already said there should be a bit more depth to the story.
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I loved the writing - very descriptive. I saw everything you wanted me to see.


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Thanks, Ben and eldave for the read and favourable comments. Very much appreciated.


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I am very excited to announce that Lullaby was picked up by Sinister Films two days after being submitted to Simply Scripts.

Casting will start next week, with filming anticipated to start mid to late July.

This is a great crew, and I look forward to seeing this project come to life. I know it is in good hands.

I have added a link to Insomniac, Sinister Films first project, and Pig Man, their most recent.
Insomniac is another SS script, written by David M Troop.

Insomniac by Sinister Films

Pig Man by Sinister Films



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Nice Warren, us SS newbies gotta represent! Lol. Look forward to seeing this filmed. Don't think I know David but if he's a regular here I'll check out Insomniac too.  


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Well done and good luck.


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Thank you.

Very exciting times ahead, that's for sure.



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Sorry for the bump, but as this is my first script to ever be produced, I just had to share.

Casting is done! I'm very happy with the look of the actors. Kaylee looks slightly older than I imagined in the script but it will still work well.

Filming will start very soon.

Lullaby will also be filmed under it's original name, Hush. I initially decided against Hush because there is a movie that came out this year with the same name. After talking it over we decided Hush just fit better and the two pieces really have nothing to do with each other.

Very exciting.


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Very cool


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Hush (Lullaby) has been filmed

That's two filmed in less than a month, good times!!

Thanks SS, I've only been a member for three and a bit months.


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Nice job, Warren. Keep em simple, keep em good! Congrats!


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Some unedited frames from Hush (Lullaby), filmed a week and a half ago.

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Looks suitably gruesome and macabre.    

Congrats.


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Here is the teaser trailer for Hush. It looks amazing, even if I do say so myself



https://vimeo.com/183439395


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That's dark as fuck. Looks good!
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Did they really shoot that in broad daylight? The script starts different (and better IMO).
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It looks real good!


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Can't wait to see this.  It looks great!
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Thanks, all.

I can't wait to see the finished product.

The script is written as an overcast day. Have to remember this is low budget stuff, they would have had to shoot on the day they organised the actors and crew for. I imaging that sometimes you have to take what you are given. I think it looks great regardless although I would have preferred an overcast day, I'm definitely not losing any sleep over it.


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Warren,

I have this up in How do I get my film's link... and on the main blog.

Is there a FB page or website?  Let me know what I can do to help promote the film.

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Thank, Don.

I think that will be it for now until the short comes out. Once it's done will definitely get a link and banner put up.

Cheers.


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This was filmed over a year a go, the teaser is on SS, but seems like the finished film won't see the light of day.

But anyway... this just got optioned again.


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Quoted from Warren
This was filmed over a year a go, the teaser is on SS, but seems like the finished film won't see the light of day.

But anyway... this just got optioned again.


On to round two!


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Strange development.

I have still have had no contact from the original filmmaker who shot this, made a teaser then vanished, however I was on my IMDb today because I was updating my website and a new film poster has appeared with a release date of 2018. Maybe the original film isn't dead in the water just yet.

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Nice poster, Warren.

I had something like this happen when I thought it was dead in the water.  At that point I didn't want it to come to fruition and had no clue it had been produced. Their Option had run out and it was with someone else. Kinda screwed things up. With some producers you never can tell...

I hope yours is a good result.


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Quoted from Warren
Strange development.

I have still have had no contact from the original filmmaker who shot this, made a teaser then vanished, however I was on my IMDb today because I was updating my website and a new film poster has appeared with a release date of 2018. Maybe the original film isn't dead in the water just yet.

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Hmm. How odd - I just posted a thread on one of mine (He Drives Them Crazy) that seems to have gone the same route. Can't figure why folks go through all that work.

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Hi Libby and Dave,

Makes no sense to me at all, but seems to be quite common.

I alway retain the rights so no issues there


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Congrats on getting this done. mate - creepy!


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Congrats! I think I like this version better than the first one even thought the first one was good too.  


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Thanks for checking it out, Dave and Pia.


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Aa, this is creepstertown. They did a very good job, congrats Warren.
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Very creepy and well made. Congrats, Warren!


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Hi Warren.
This script is beautifully written with very vivid images.
I can see why it had been filmed.

It's very disturbing how many children come up missing.

Any plans for making this into a feature?
I think that would work out very well for you.

A big congrats to you,
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Warren
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Hi Cindy.

Thanks for taking a look.

I don't have any further plans for this, but you aren't the first person to suggest turning this into a bigger piece.

Something to think about.


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So this is literally the first short I ever wrote and yesterday it was filmed for the second time.

Here is some behind the scenes footage from the set. It always blows my mind to see what goes on behind the camera and the idea that all those people are there making my words come to life.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1BEtrZHmzYzmZm6ABRB0UUgoGuoMWaH0S/view?usp=drivesdk


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Congrats, Warren! The film looks great. The director has stylistic chops.


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Quoted from Yuvraj
Congrats, Warren! The film looks great. The director has stylistic chops.


Thanks, there does look like there is a lot going on in that video, I'm interested to see how it all turns out.


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Well done - congrats Warren.


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