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I kniw what an orphan is now. Could someone enlighten me pn a wrylie please?
DAVE Khamanna, a wrylie is... (takes a sip of coffee) The same thing as a parenthetical.
Some writers universally avoid them. That is a mistake, IMO. Some writers way overuse them. That is a mistake, IMO. In both cases, you'll know it when you see it.
Using the above example. If as a writer I think there is something important about Dave taking that sip of coffee (let's say Jeff put poison in it), then that is an effective use. It is better than:
DAVE Khamanna, a wrylie is...
Dave takes a sip of coffee.
DAVE (CONT'D) The same thing as a parenthetical.
Because it uses less space and does not interrupt the dialogue flow. Now, if the coffee sip is not important, than I wouldn't use a wrylie or write an action line.
Also effective for non-obvious emotions. e.g.,
DAVE Khamanna, a wrylie is... (sarcastic) The worst thing a writer can do.
Can I just bring something to the attention of some of the reviewers on the challenge, without attempting to open a can of worms, but rather open minds, maybe...the word “fuck” being apparently out of place in a romcom.
Now, we don’t all swear but swear words are in the dictionary and have been utilised frequently when it comes to romcoms: insert Four Weddings example —> https://youtu.be/bjixdVvkfL4
The above is one example, it’s not hard to find others, and let’s not get started on the fake orgasm scene in When Harry Met Sally, we’ll be here all day. Basically, naughty words have as much a place within the confines of these scripts and this challenge as nice ones do. As we’re having a spoilertastic reveal morning (thanks for the cleanup Pia) I shall neither confirm nor deny if I’ve been picked up on dropping f bombs, but let it go when you’re reviewing these, it’s not exactly review worthy comment if someone is using a naughty word or 10.
Right, back on my high horse, with helmet now firmly on,
Cam
Let's be clear, ah, well... let's try and be clear.
Seriously though
My problem isn't with a swear word, I'm the one who went walking down the street singing, Lilly Allen's Fuck You and having a gay old time Really.
My problem is with weak writing. Can't people come up with anything else rather than smearing that around all the time? If a character talks like that, ok. But all these characters are talking the same way and that's what bothers me. It's too much and I get sick of it.
But I did make my way through ( so and so's) and it was really good despite, well, you know.
I've done that one, too. Looks horrible on the page. But, it can be a tough one to work around. I usually switch those to action lines if I can, but sometimes it's damn near unavoidable. Tough to shorten, and you REALLY don't want to lengthen.
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Let's be clear, ah, well... let's try and be clear.
Seriously though
My problem isn't with a swear word, I'm the one who went walking down the street singing, Lilly Allen's Fuck You and having a gay old time Really.
My problem is with weak writing. Can't people come up with anything else rather than smearing that around all the time? If a character talks like that, ok. But all these characters are talking the same way and that's what bothers me. It's too much and I get sick of it.
But I did make my way through ( so and so's) and it was really good despite, well, you know.
Overuse definitely weakens the power of the word. If it's every third word on the page, it has no punch whatsoever. It's like any other device - overuse limits its effectiveness.
PaulKWrites.com
60 Feet Under - Low budget, contained thriller/Feature The Hand of God - Low budget, semi-contained thriller/Feature Wait Till Next Year - Disney-style family sports comedy/Feature
Many shorts available for production: comedy, thriller, drama, light horror
I just opened something that won't allow me to stop laughing. I can't write and laugh at the same time. I've got problems!!! I need to switch from coffee to chamomile.
And reading the comments is way better than my script!!!
I just opened something that won't allow me to stop laughing. I can't write and laugh at the same time. I've got problems!!! I need to switch from coffee to chamomile.
And reading the comments is way better than my script!!!
Sandra, those two women teamed up because they have whips. We need to team up with you too. We both have glasses after all. And even lower back problems. Probably some other problems, I don't know...
Sandra, those two women teamed up because they have whips. We need to team up with you too. We both have glasses after all. And even lower back problems. Probably some other problems, I don't know...
Dave, I'm just seeing your explanation, thanks for that.
So, that's what a wrylie is.
And I know what a slug is btw. Just thought I'd boast about that, when I was new to the site I totally didn't. And I'll tell you to prove I know it - a slug is a scene heading.
Dave, I'm just seeing your explanation, thanks for that.
So, that's what a wrylie is.
And I know what a slug is btw. Just thought I'd boast about that, when I was new to the site I totally didn't. And I'll tell you to prove I know it - a slug is a scene heading.
Dave, I'm just seeing your explanation, thanks for that.
So, that's what a wrylie is.
And I know what a slug is btw. Just thought I'd boast about that, when I was new to the site I totally didn't. And I'll tell you to prove I know it - a slug is a scene heading.
Don’t put salt on your slugs. It’s just mean.
(And you never know if the slug has a gurza friend.)
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