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I could quibble but where would the fun be in that.
Very enjoyable and it made me chuckle. Nice line re Coldplay. I still love their music though. I would have liked a little more feeling in the radio announcer's V.O. And I think you should spell out K-U-N-T FM radio this way, but hey, I'm just glad that wasn't an indication things were going to detour into smut-land.
Okay, I quibbled a little bit. Heartfelt, funny, enjoyable. Thank you, Writer.
P.S. I wonder if Something About Mary was the inspiration for that final scene.
It definitely had the comedy element. Not sure it was the romantic type of comedy. More a “Superbad” guy trying to get in the gril’s Pants kind of comed, with an element of “There’s Something about Mary” penis in the zipper thrown in.
Still, it was a fun, easy-breezy kind of script and an enjoyable read. Good job.
This was a silly script and can be pretty goofy if filmed and acted right. It feels like a familiar premise, kind of like a side short for "Seeking A Friend For The End oF the World" except everyone lives. Like Jeff said, it's like a comedy sketch and I think it would be fairly feasible to film, and even moreso either as a live-action or an animation, I can see it working both ways. The only real quip I have is the very end. I would nix out the last two lines and just end it with describing Billy screaming in the description (and to make it even sillier, have a flock of birds poof out from some trees when he screams). Good job.
Don't like the call letters for the radio station -- it makes the tone of the story a bit too tawdry and vulgar.
For the announcer's "final" song, how about Elvis Costello's "Waiting For The End Of The World"? (At least it would indicate this jock, who should be a bit more emotional about the whole thing, has a sense of humor.) And Billy's problems setting things up for romance conjures up "the safety belt that wouldn't budge" in Chuck Berry's "No Particular Place To Go."
Loved the "false alarm" ending. Short and kinda sweet.