Quoted from Dreamscale I liked Masters of Horror, but I don't remember that one at all.

It was John Carpenter's first. =) My favorite director, but it was bad writing.

Can I just use "cell" for "cell phone", or do I gotta write:

  Bob opens his cell phone, blabs a bit then puts it down to pop a cap in Joe's a$$.

  Bob picks up Joe's cell phone and thumbs down his contacts list as he walks away.

either, as long as it's clear.

After a slow start, I CRANKED!  Page 62!  Yes!  Even implemented a chase scene.

The plot is thickening.  Loving it!  AAAYYEEE!!!!!!!

Quoted from Grandma Bear Cathy said she finished the second draft even. First drafts are easy. It's going back to rewrite that is hard. Will do though.   C'mon guys, you can do it!!

oh.... I'm redoing big portions... I'm now back to page 26, got a long way to go.
Also, going through a strange "disconnect" with my characters... maybe a good night's sleep will help...

Good to hear from you Cathy! Great work.

Great work on you too Jeff.

I'm on page 20 of the first rewrite.

I'm very unhappy with uninteresting dialogue at a restaurant between my protag Harley and his future in-laws. I don't know what the heck lawyers talk about...  

Quoted from Grandma Bear I'm very unhappy with uninteresting dialogue at a restaurant between my protag Harley and his future in-laws. I don't know what the heck lawyers talk about...

I like dialogue. And, your lawyers are people, too (sort of). You know, they have regular conversations, especially when they're working. The last thing they usually want to talk about is their caseload. =)

Quoted from Mr. Blonde And, your lawyers are people, too (sort of).

What's the difference between a lawyer and a prostitute?
The hooker will stop screwing you after your dead.

Couldn't resist the lawyer joke...

Did a little backtracking today...brought back a few characters that I had killed off.(Body count still at 5)...still have a few plot holes that need to be plugged before I jump into the final push... On page 66.

Everyone is writing...hitting the woodshed - Excellent!

I have problems with dialogue as well. Sometimes you want the characters to say something important to the storyline but it just came off as unnatural.

Quoted from Grandma Bear I'm very unhappy with uninteresting dialogue at a restaurant between my protag Harley and his future in-laws. I don't know what the heck lawyers talk about...

Themselves, of course. Good time to build a little character in crap you can't show, like personal histories. Or you could talk about cheeseburgers. You know, whatever.

Quoted from Coding Herman I have problems with dialogue as well. Sometimes you want the characters to say something important to the storyline but it just came off as unnatural.

That's when you go for the metaphor to get your point across without saying it. While it might still come off a bit odd, it won't sound like exposition if you do it right.

Thanks for the advice, George. Now I gotta brush up on metaphors.

Actually, metaphor is a type of subtext, right?

A metaphor is a indirect comparison of one image to another, but often the listener is expected to supply what the metaphor is referencing. Some of the most famous metaphors are the parables of Jesus where he had a habit of insulting the hell out of the Pharisees under their noses. He even managed to one-up them (more than once) by asking them questions about his stories and they wisely gave him the answer just before realizing that they zinged themselves in doing so. Whatever your opinion of Jesus, from a literary perspective, the metaphorical parables in context are pure genius. This differs from a simile where the actual comparison point is supplied using "like" or "as".

So where a simile might tell someone that his head is like a melon, a metaphor would describe a particular melon that the listener would easily grasp that the guy's head is being referenced.

In some stories, the subplot (which will often complete before the main one) turn out to be a metaphor of the main plot, mirroring the fate of the hero.

How are you guys doing?  Two weeks left.

I'm on page 42 of the rewrite. 2 pages have been added so far. I still have the biggest changes ahead so it's been easy until now.

No additional pages written for me today, but I did reread what I've got twice, and made a few minor corrections/deletions/and additions.  I was worried I was getting ahead of myself and wanted to pull back and make sure what I have is what I want...and it appears to be.

The finger is pointing in numerous directions and I really feel like my mystery is well thought out.  This is definitely Frost Bite Part II - The Golden Years

I'll be at a Fair all day tomorrow, so no progress on the immediate horizon.  2 weeks is cool.  For some reason, I thought it was down to only 1, so I started cranking.  We're good.

Where's everyone else?  And, how many completed scripts will ew have, 1 week from tomorrow?

I'm going to read Khamanna's next week I assume. I'm sending mine to Phil as soon as the first rewrite is done. Hopefully by MOnday.

Anyone else want a read before posting?