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I have been wrestling with this one for a day or two.
Here's the synopsis:
The Prince of Coal
Santa, still depressed over an accident last Christmas, doesn’t want to be Santa this year. Problems occur when, two days before Christmas, Santa’s assistant mistakenly finds a replacement who is a former naughty boy who refers to himself as The Prince of Coal. Tragically, Mrs. Claus and Santa’s helpers lose faith in Santa. Fortunately, the little girl injured in the accident, helps Santa and those about him remember the Spirit of Christmas.
It's a bit much to boil down to a one liner. Here's what I got:
Santa's depression has cauased Team Santa to lose faith in him allowing a man who received a lump of coal every Christmas as s child to replace Santa days before Christmas.
When the real Santa loses his Christmas spirit, his assistant mistakenly hires Darth Santa, a bitter man whose Christmases only resulted in a mountain of coal.
Gary, you think you've got a lot to boil down, Tommy's read my wip and it's a doozie.
We'll see what I can do with it before the 21st though.
Currently this is my logline:
A funny grief counselor writes her own true story to help a grieving child; yet when she meets The Stranger, she learns her fate is out of her control due to the Magic of Letters.
I'm hoping that I will get a couple of suggestions for improvement on my logline for my 7wc after a couple of people have read it. I truly suck at those. Not to mention synopsises. Crap! I can't even spell!!
"At the rundown hospital of St. Mary’s, a lot of things are going on during Christmas eve. None of them are nice and none of them have anything to do with healing."
"A restless underachiever must deal with his feelings for two women, his crazy friends, and his blue-collar upbringing during a wild 48 hours in 1989 Queens, New York."
That isn't a bad logline Anthony. I would try using a different sort of action than deal. Deal sounds kind of uneventful. I'm making a lot of assumptions here about your story but maybe
During a wild 48 hours in 1989 Queen, a restless underachiever must dodge his crazy friends and fight against his blue-collar upbringing while trying to make the most important decision of his life - which of the two girls he loves is the right one for him.
Thanks for the quick reply, but yeah, the story doesn't go quite like that. It's more about deciding between two women - one that he's just met, and another who's rejected him in the past and who he knows he has a limited amount of time with. In the end he decides to get closure with the one who's leaving and ultimately pursues the other relationship.
As for the friends, it's more about resenting his role of big brother and protector - kinda the same thing with the neighborhood. He has opportunities to get out but he never seems to take them - until now.
I was using "must reconcile" instead of "must deal"?