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Bounty (TV Pilot) -- Top 1% of discoverable screenplays on Coverfly I'll Be Seeing You (short) - OWC winner The Gambler (short) - OWC winner Skip (short) - filmed Country Road 12 (short) - filmed The Family Man (short) - filmed The Journeyers (feature) - optioned
Okay, I know a lot of people are going to be asking questions, so I'll try to think of all of them here and beat them to the punch.
1. Here in the U.S., we think of sewers as those big (or small) pipes running underground carrying all sorts of foul things, primarily human waste and other nasty things. I take it this is what you're shooting for, and not something in a sewage treatment plant or above ground drainage systems. The reason I ask is that each country has their own system, and some, none at all (or very primitive).
2. I take the majority of the action (comedy) needs to take place in the sewer or be integral to the story, much like the whistle has to be integral to the story. But other parts of the story can take place outside the sewer as well.
3. In all parts of the challenge, the page limit is still 5 pages.
4. Comedy has to be the primary driving force of the script, but other elements, like drama, can be a part of the script as well? Like a dramedy?
Anything else I'm missing?
Gary
Some of my scripts:
Bounty (TV Pilot) -- Top 1% of discoverable screenplays on Coverfly I'll Be Seeing You (short) - OWC winner The Gambler (short) - OWC winner Skip (short) - filmed Country Road 12 (short) - filmed The Family Man (short) - filmed The Journeyers (feature) - optioned
Okay, I know a lot of people are going to be asking questions, so I'll try to think of all of them here and beat them to the punch.
1. Here in the U.S., we think of sewers as those big (or small) pipes running underground carrying all sorts of foul things, primarily human waste and other nasty things. I take it this is what you're shooting for, and not something in a sewage treatment plant or above ground drainage systems. The reason I ask is that each country has their own system, and some, none at all (or very primitive).
2. I take the majority of the action (comedy) needs to take place in the sewer or be integral to the story, much like the whistle has to be integral to the story. But other parts of the story can take place outside the sewer as well.
3. In all parts of the challenge, the page limit is still 5 pages.
4. Comedy has to be the primary driving force of the script, but other elements, like drama, can be a part of the script as well? Like a dramedy?
1. I'm willing to concede that certain countries have certain ways of doing things. As long as the location (or its equivalent) is met, or attempted, it is acceptable.
2. The entire script is not confined to the sewer if you don't want, but a good portion should be.
3. 5 pages in all rounds.
4. Of course. The script should have a comedic slant, but no comedy in history has ever been 100% comedy.
Lol it’s nearly 2pm Sat arve here the owc and this tourney are always announced at this time for me and most other Aussies I work tonight 5pm till 10 pm so I always think about possible shit to write lol and run ideas off my workmates I completely ignored their ideas for Rd 1 and I wrote a ripper script lol
This is tricky despite it being my natural comedy genre but it’s a good challenge!
A group of amateur writers get lost in a sewer Their only hope of survival is a whistle hidden in Jeff’s arse Who will risk all to retrieve it? Dustin? Wazza? Or willl Blondie himself save the day?
Lol. I want to get into your head, Sean. What's going on in there... sewer? Oh I have a friend whose last name was Sewer. She was my house agent. Can it be that Sewer?
I'm seeing a lot more dishonesty than usual in the reviews this time around. Anyone else picking that up?
Remember, comedy is subjective... that you didn't find it funny is most likely because you didn't want to. Also, just because you don't find it funny doesn't make it not a comedy. It just makes you unappreciative. It's a subtle difference... but one that may affect scoring.
Lol. I want to get into your head, Sean. What's going on in there... sewer? Oh I have a friend whose last name was Sewer. She was my house agent. Can it be that Sewer?
You don't really want a glimpse in there. But, unfortunately, that Sewer will not count.
For me the comedy part is a problem. I can write a drama on that but not a comedy.
Just exaggerate everything. If you find it funny, make sure you leave it in in the second draft... because twice around things stop being funny. Don't be offended when 'reviewers' tell you it's not a comedy... wtf do they know? If you find it funny, it's comedy.
For me the comedy part is a problem. I can write a drama on that but not a comedy.
Kham, you wrote that great comedy about an eccentric young boy - I can't remember the title and it's not in your Sig but you made it high up in contests with that one and I remember your comedic flair.
Thanks for encouragement guys but the idea that came to me is very dramatic. It even made me feel sick in the stomach. I'll try to go with it and if not then not. There's no time for another idea.
Oh, I plan to, Khamanna, I'm sure I will. Just saying I won't be able to as much time into it. I'm working on a novel and it really suffered this past week.
And thanks for straightening me out on that script I misunderstood!
Oh, I plan to, Khamanna, I'm sure I will. Just saying I won't be able to as much time into it. I'm working on a novel and it really suffered this past week.
And thanks for straightening me out on that script I misunderstood!
Well, I'm glad your reread it. I'm def a fan of that one.
I hope someone does a riff on Ed Norton from the Honeymooners who worked in a sewer who'll be played in the reboot by Ed Norton the actor who's career has gone in one.
I hope someone does a riff on Ed Norton from the Honeymooners who worked in a sewer who'll be played in the reboot by Ed Norton the actor who's career has gone in one.
Dave, you're killing me. Probably not too many peeps on here that remember that.
I was kicking around a few ideas, coming back to my laptop every couple hours. Suddenly one of them evolved into what I thought was going to be very funny. And a fully developed story for 5 pages.
Then it hit me: I don't have a sewer or a whistle in this!
Well I wrote something. And not going to force myself to change anything to fit the genre or what you people think constitutes a comedy. I may rewrite Monday.
Bounty (TV Pilot) -- Top 1% of discoverable screenplays on Coverfly I'll Be Seeing You (short) - OWC winner The Gambler (short) - OWC winner Skip (short) - filmed Country Road 12 (short) - filmed The Family Man (short) - filmed The Journeyers (feature) - optioned
Haha, Dream, haven't you thought about a sequel? --- I guess at least, it's title name heaven. Sink Two, revenge of the Shits or etc.. It'll be pretty vulgar.
Haha, Dream, haven't you thought about a sequel? --- I guess at least, it's title name heaven. Sink Two, revenge of the Shiths or etc.. It'll be pretty vulgar.
I will be changing my title and logline as soon as week 1 voting is done, and yes, this will be a sequel to my 1st.
You think you know mine...you may be right. I don't know anyone's so far.
I tried to disguise my writing in week 1. In week 2, you will all be stumped...even Stumnpzian!
I will be changing my title and logline as soon as week 1 voting is done, and yes, this will be a sequel to my 1st.
You think you know mine...you may be right. I don't know anyone's so far.
Just a guess of course but I've noticed a style I could connect with you, yes. It's even the most memorable story of the round for me… so I hope I'm correct. Not saying that someone should write that kind of entertainment though. It's truly a testament of misbehave, haha
Phew, I think I'm done. Way too soon to submit though. I better let this one simmer overnight. At least until I sober up. Tanqueray and tonics tonight.
WWJD?
What would Jeff do? Damn the torpedoes!
But maybe I'll want to change my title. Or logline. Or font.
Comedy doesn't mean dialogue-heavy. Just look at Buster Keaton and Harold Lloyd. An inventive writer could use just one charcater, the whistle and the sewer. Minimal dialogue... if any needed at all.
No matter what you do... 50% of the writers here will not laugh once while reading. Many will not even crack a smile.
I'm drawing a complete blank at this point, haven't even got a seed of an idea.
I'm thinking I might be out :/
I know I still have time, but damn this is a tough one.
Come on Warren, you can do it!
Get that thinking cap on. What different types of whistle are there? Different ways of getting into a sewer? Mix in another genre, Romcom - meet cute in a sewer. 50's horror parody - creature from the black sewer.
Comedy doesn't mean dialogue-heavy. Just look at Buster Keaton and Harold Lloyd. An inventive writer could use just one charcater, the whistle and the sewer. Minimal dialogue... if any needed at all.
No matter what you do... 50% of the writers here will not laugh once while reading. Many will not even crack a smile.
Dialogue and Characters are 40% of the Criteria in the comp. Having minimal dialogue is risking it because even with the best will in the world, it's hard to give high scores for Dialogue if there isn't any,
I mean, none of this matters. It's just for fun. But you try to play up to the rules and the way they're laid out, there's an inherent bias towards wanting good dialogue, not just dialogue that works for the story.
Get that thinking cap on. What different types of whistle are there? Different ways of getting into a sewer? Mix in another genre, Romcom - meet cute in a sewer. 50's horror parody - creature from the black sewer.
Get it written!
Actually just finished scribbling down an idea, I'll sleep on it and try get it into a script tomorrow.
I apologise in advance. It's not going to be my best work.
Scar - it's quality of dialogue that's been scored, could technically get a 5 with just one killer word.
I get the theory, I'm just struggling to reconcile it with reality.
A script can be brilliant with either no dialogue, or almost completely dialogue. And everything in between.
So a script with zero dialogue is a 5 basically by default because there's no way of determining otherwise. And a script with a lot of brilliantly constructed dialogue is a 5.
What if the silent script doesn't quite work, do we take points just off the story, or dialogue as well? How do you determine if the problem was a weakness in structure and visuals(story) or in the absence of dialogue explaining things?
What about a very good script that requires minimal dialogue, but that minimal dialogue is fairly poor? Is that a 1? Should they just have cut the few lines to get the default 5 if there's no dialogue at all?
I'm overthinking things, I'm just finding it all a bit hard to score tbh.
So a script with zero dialogue is a 5 basically by default because there's no way of determining otherwise. And a script with a lot of brilliantly constructed dialogue is a 5.
This is my method (or would be, if I were taking part). A script with no dialogue doesn't get a 5 by default. It gets a 5 if the dialogue weren't necessary. If you add more, just to add it, it'll feel superfluous and that'll probably lower your score in other people's eyes.
So there's a leaderboard, just not one we can see, correct? Or will we see one before the tournament ends?
Some of my scripts:
Bounty (TV Pilot) -- Top 1% of discoverable screenplays on Coverfly I'll Be Seeing You (short) - OWC winner The Gambler (short) - OWC winner Skip (short) - filmed Country Road 12 (short) - filmed The Family Man (short) - filmed The Journeyers (feature) - optioned
I see your point on the extreme of there being no dialogue. How do you score that? As Mr Blonde said, if the story works fine without dialogue then that should be a 5. If there are parts you feel are weak and let down by there being no dialogue then take points off. It's really up the individual reviewer how they score that.
Can a comedy story work in 5 pages? Of course it can. It doesn't need to be dialogue or character heavy, it simply needs to work well. That's the hard part. You're overthinking this.
I have to hand it to all of you. It's very, very easy me sitting here writing this down. I don't have to do it. It's a nice exercise... but I prefer to be paid for that kind of stress.
So there's a leaderboard, just not one we can see, correct? Or will we see one before the tournament ends?
I'll post up the leaderboard after voting for round 1 ends. It will be visible for everyone, but the scores themselves won't be posted until it's over.
I finished, too. I don't guarantee that you'll understand the story though. But if you do it's beautiful. One of the better writers would make you but I wrote it the way God put it on my heart. He puts I write, there's nothing more to it! I wish these two days went by faster as I'm curious for the reactions.
Hey, for one of those we need to agree and name one of the characters Sean! I would have done it for this one but can't do it alone.
I have a barebones idea now. No opportunity to write though. Hopefully I can start it later today and see how it fleshes out. This one is tough for sure.
Hey, for one of those we need to agree and name one of the characters Sean! I would have done it for this one but can't do it alone.
You inspired me. That would have been cute. Maybe each writer would be assigned a SS Peep as a main character.
TO DREAMSCALE WITH LOVE
FADE IN:
INT. MUNICIPAL WATER SEWER - NIGHT
Darker than an OWC challenge set in a cave.
DREAMSCALE (45?), beer belly, the epitome of gender-neutral, paces along the concrete walkway alongside the river of piss and shit.
ELDAVE (63), the last drops of testosterone left his body a decade ago, lumbers behind him. You can just tell he's a know it all type with skin that is nearly opaque. He's essentially unfilmable.
Dreamscale stops, bends over - retrieves a bound, sewage-stained, script from the concrete walkway. He takes a sniff - then opens the script.
DREAMSCALE Shit!
ELDAVE What'd you expect? We're in a sewer.
DREAMSCALE Not the smell. The writing. (holds up script) First page. Two orphans!
ELDAVE1 And...?
Dreamscale stops - thumps Dave on the chest.
DREAMSCALE Two lines per page. That means two-hundred lines per script. That means it's one-hundred and twenty pages long when it could have easily been one hundred and ten. (thumps his chest) You get me, bro?
Dave just stands there - blinks his eyes. Crickets.
Dreamscale resumes his walk as he reads the script.
Eldave follows behind.
DREAMSCALE Jesus Christ! Plus two wrylies on page three. (points at water) It belongs in the sewer.
Eldave stays in place as Dreamscale marches on. The script he tossed slowly floats back towards Eldave.
Through the murky water we see the blurry title: "CASA BLANCA."
DREAMSCALE (O.S) (calling back) Probably filled with a bunch of We sees and camera directions too.
A whistle SQUEALS in the distance.
A manhole cover is removed, illuminating the sewer. Dreamscale points to the opening.
DREAMSCALE (45?), beer belly, the epitome of gender-neutral, paces along the concrete walkway alongside the river of piss and shit.
ELDAVE (63), the last drops of testosterone left his body a decade ago, lumbers behind him. You can tell he'd rather be anywhere else in the world.
Dreamscale stops, bends over - retrieves a bound, sewage-stained, script from the concrete walkway. He takes a sniff - then opens the script.
DREAMSCALE Shit!
ELDAVE What'd you expect? We're in a sewer.
DREAMSCALE Not the smell. The writing. (holds up script) First page. Two orphans!
ELDAVE1 And...?
Dreamscale stops - thumps Dave on the chest.
DREAMSCALE Two lines per page. That means two-hundred lines per script. That means it's one-hundred and twenty pages long when it could have easily been one hundred and ten. (thumps his chest) You get me, bro?
Dave just stands there - blinks his eyes. Crickets.
Dreamscale resumes his walk as he reads the script.
Eldave follows behind.
DREAMSCALE Jesus Christ! Plus two wrylies on page three. (points at water) It belongs in the sewer.
Eldave stays in place as Dreamscale marches on. The script he tossed slowly floats back towards Eldave.
Through the murky water we see the blurry title: "CASA BLANCA."
DREAMSCALE (O.S) (calling back) Probably filled with a bunch of We sees and camera directions too.
A whistle SQUEALS in the distance.
A manhole cover is removed, illuminating the sewer. Dreamscale points to the opening.
DREAMSCALE I'm out!
Very funny, Dave. Although easier than these guys have it as the character development is already done. Still though, this a nice little freestyle.
Very funny, Dave. Although easier than these guys have it as the character development is already done. Still though, this a nice little freestyle.
Thanks -
Hope Jeff takes it as the homage it's intended to be.
I don't envy these writers - this is and looks like it will continue to be one whale of a challenge. Maybe the most difficult we've had given the time constraints.
I don't envy these writers - this is and looks like it will continue to be one whale of a challenge. Maybe the most difficult we've had given the time constraints.
Oh, believe me, if you people keep forcing me to come back and do this every year, this is going to be the way I punish you... Lol. =)
I tried to disguise my writing in week 1. In week 2, you will all be stumped...even Stumnpzian!
I finally read all of Round 1, some more closely than others. I’m thinking yours was the one with Billy Martin. In any case, I liked that one.
P.S. I’m out. Too much going on to comment or think up something for the sewer. Am enjoying Mr. Blonde’s Tournament, though. Great spectator sport. Hope he does it next year.
Just finished mine. Also just finished punching myself violently in the head after re-reading it. You have permission to do the same, although your reviews may do the job instead.
Some of my scripts:
Bounty (TV Pilot) -- Top 1% of discoverable screenplays on Coverfly I'll Be Seeing You (short) - OWC winner The Gambler (short) - OWC winner Skip (short) - filmed Country Road 12 (short) - filmed The Family Man (short) - filmed The Journeyers (feature) - optioned
You inspired me. That would have been cute. Maybe each writer would be assigned a SS Peep as a main character.
TO DREAMSCALE WITH LOVE
FADE IN:
INT. MUNICIPAL WATER SEWER - NIGHT
Darker than an OWC challenge set in a cave.
DREAMSCALE (45?), beer belly, the epitome of gender-neutral, paces along the concrete walkway alongside the river of piss and shit.
ELDAVE (63), the last drops of testosterone left his body a decade ago, lumbers behind him. You can just tell he's a know it all type with skin that is nearly opaque. He's essentially unfilmable.
Dreamscale stops, bends over - retrieves a bound, sewage-stained, script from the concrete walkway. He takes a sniff - then opens the script.
DREAMSCALE Shit!
ELDAVE What'd you expect? We're in a sewer.
DREAMSCALE Not the smell. The writing. (holds up script) First page. Two orphans!
ELDAVE1 And...?
Dreamscale stops - thumps Dave on the chest.
DREAMSCALE Two lines per page. That means two-hundred lines per script. That means it's one-hundred and twenty pages long when it could have easily been one hundred and ten. (thumps his chest) You get me, bro?
Dave just stands there - blinks his eyes. Crickets.
Dreamscale resumes his walk as he reads the script.
Eldave follows behind.
DREAMSCALE Jesus Christ! Plus two wrylies on page three. (points at water) It belongs in the sewer.
Eldave stays in place as Dreamscale marches on. The script he tossed slowly floats back towards Eldave.
Through the murky water we see the blurry title: "CASA BLANCA."
DREAMSCALE (O.S) (calling back) Probably filled with a bunch of We sees and camera directions too.
A whistle SQUEALS in the distance.
A manhole cover is removed, illuminating the sewer. Dreamscale points to the opening.
Man, I was super confident about my script last night as I was going to bed. Re-reading it now, this may be the worst thing I've ever written. Can't wait to see what you guys come up with for this round. Gotta feeling there's gonna be a lot of weird stories this go around.
Man, I was super confident about my script last night as I was going to bed. Re-reading it now, this may be the worst thing I've ever written. Can't wait to see what you guys come up with for this round. Gotta feeling there's gonna be a lot of weird stories this go around.
I just cranked mine out in under two hours. I don't know if it's the simplicity of it or the lightness of the tone but it flowed really easily. I kinda like it, which means it's probably not comedy, not a good story, and doesn't use a whistle or sewer properly.
I'll barely have time to polish it tomorrow so whatever it is, I'm stuck with it. But at least it's done!
You guys always downplay your entries but manage to come up with gold... you're not fooling me.
I haven't started mine yet - I was hoping to get some time today but a finance meeting with the CEO has jam-packed my day. I'll try and pen it down in my lunch, I will lose some serious marks in this round lol
You guys always downplay your entries but manage to come up with gold... you're not fooling me.
I haven't started mine yet - I was hoping to get some time today but a finance meeting with the CEO has jam-packed my day. I'll try and pen it down in my lunch, I will lose some serious marks in this round lol
“You’re typing an awful lot into your laptop.”
“Just taking notes of the meeting.”
“And why do you keep giggling every time ‘Priority Number One’ and ‘Priority Number Two’ are mentioned?”
A good writer would probably check out a sewer before writing about one but not me. I dont even want to google. Its my sewer, I furnish it the way I like
I think we’re going to have a lot of crappy entries this time around.
Some of my scripts:
Bounty (TV Pilot) -- Top 1% of discoverable screenplays on Coverfly I'll Be Seeing You (short) - OWC winner The Gambler (short) - OWC winner Skip (short) - filmed Country Road 12 (short) - filmed The Family Man (short) - filmed The Journeyers (feature) - optioned
Just realised that there shouldn’t be any DNS given to any script this round as they wil all be (well they fucking should be) comedies in some shape or form. Even if they aren’t that funny they will still be 100% meeting the criteria. I’m confident of that.
Yeah, with comedy it could be a hundred percent DNS.
Unless they forget the whistle!
Some of my scripts:
Bounty (TV Pilot) -- Top 1% of discoverable screenplays on Coverfly I'll Be Seeing You (short) - OWC winner The Gambler (short) - OWC winner Skip (short) - filmed Country Road 12 (short) - filmed The Family Man (short) - filmed The Journeyers (feature) - optioned
My goal in these scripts is pretty simple: try to make the writing and storytelling enough that the reader wants to turn the page. Very hard to do.
I guess I kind of judge scripts with that somewhat in mind too. If the story doesn't fully grab me but the writing and story is clear enough that I can zip through, it's decent. If the story and writing is good enough that I really want to get all the way to the end, that's damn fine work.
My goal in these scripts is pretty simple: try to make the writing and storytelling enough that the reader wants to turn the page. Very hard to do.
I guess I kind of judge scripts with that somewhat in mind too. If the story doesn't fully grab me but the writing and story is clear enough that I can zip through, it's decent. If the story and writing is good enough that I really want to get all the way to the end, that's damn fine work.
I'd say that's a very good approach. I do something of the sort. Same as watching an actual movie. It's as good as your desire to continue watching.
Just realised that there shouldn’t be any DNS given to any script this round as they wil all be (well they fucking should be) comedies in some shape or form. Even if they aren’t that funny they will still be 100% meeting the criteria. I’m confident of that.
Nek minnit...
I DNS'd my own entry, and plan to again this week.
There was so much whining about comedy in the last round I also wonder if anyone will dare say a script doesn't meet the genre.
Comedy is specific. It's about tone, tropes, surprise, setups and payoffs, callbacks, repetition, and humour, be it jokes or physical. Jokes are the most difficult, they're often culturally relevant or taste specific.
I was very forgiving for the fusion round. I only gave 4 scripts a didn't meet. This round I'm going to be looking for something that specifically fits the genre. It should be easy.
What would be original would be to set a comedy inside a sewer and not have one joke about the shit or the smell.
Like, I had an idea about a marching band rehearsing in a sewer for the acoustics, but realized I couldn’t go a full page without making some reference to the surroundings, so I just abandoned it. Plus the idea was just ridiculous to begin with.
Some of my scripts:
Bounty (TV Pilot) -- Top 1% of discoverable screenplays on Coverfly I'll Be Seeing You (short) - OWC winner The Gambler (short) - OWC winner Skip (short) - filmed Country Road 12 (short) - filmed The Family Man (short) - filmed The Journeyers (feature) - optioned
What would be original would be to set a comedy inside a sewer and not have one joke about the shit or the smell.
Like, I had an idea about a marching band rehearsing in a sewer for the acoustics, but realized I couldn’t go a full page without making some reference to the surroundings, so I just abandoned it. Plus the idea was just ridiculous to begin with.
You think it's ridiculous until someone like Wes Anderson films about it.
Did one this morning. Someone will probably say I didn't fit the criteria because there were no floating turds. Anyway, all about amusing ourselves. In the end I amused myself a little. Hopefully it's an easy enough read people can read it, score it, and forget it.
Did one this morning. Someone will probably say I didn't fit the criteria because there were no floating turds. Anyway, all about amusing ourselves. In the end I amused myself a little. Hopefully it's an easy enough read people can read it, score it, and forget it.
Lol, yeah, did one in the sewer. I decided to explore as part of the researching of this challenge. The alligators weren't too friendly and I found an old bobblehead fused with some doo doo.
OK, my idea and characters are ready, so I'm starting and hoping to be done well before my girlfriend gets home from work. This will be better for everyone involved...including all who read this.
OK, my idea and characters are ready, so I'm starting and hoping to be done well before my girlfriend gets home from work. This will be better for everyone involved...including all who read this.
You gonna get your girlfriend's approval before you submit? I'm curious what her reaction to your sewer comedy will be.
I think Dave's spoof script about Jeff is much funnier than my actual script. But at least I'm in. I expect it will about as well received as my last flop!
Well, I hated my entry at first. Then, as I go through rewrites... I'm kind of liking it. But then, I kind of liked my first round entry... and, it's not doing all that well... so, I expect more of the same.
Survival. That's the goal right now. Get some points, stay in the game. Hope to hit on one of the five.
I got 3 scripts out of last year's challenge that I really like. 2 that could someday get made (if the right person finds them), 1 just for me. I'd be over the moon if I could match that this year.
PaulKWrites.com
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I've never been so stressed about sewers and whistles *Pours himself another glass of port*
I finally had a half decent idea as I left work - I'm now 3 pages into the vomit draft but considering its nearly 10pm here I would rather be sleeping.
PKCardinal, I'm with you - This is now just survival
Bounty (TV Pilot) -- Top 1% of discoverable screenplays on Coverfly I'll Be Seeing You (short) - OWC winner The Gambler (short) - OWC winner Skip (short) - filmed Country Road 12 (short) - filmed The Family Man (short) - filmed The Journeyers (feature) - optioned
Geez, with all the fear and loathing of this round, I'm starting to feel pretty good about my entry. But, alas, I felt pretty good before the last round, too.
I'm tired and so I have submitted whatever it is I have. It's not too bad, I don't think... I never know with you people - You will either praise the effort or you will chase me from SS, never to return again... I can never tell.
I promise to be super nice to everyone in my reviews, because this was bloody tough! The first round had the freedom of genre which made it so much easier - but taking a sewer, and a whistle and trying to formulate a complete story in five pages... oh and by the way, make it funny... it nearly killed me!
Well done to everyone who submitted something - I look forward to seeing the story children your brains have birthed.
Well...Teri read it...didn't laugh once, handed me back the script, and said, "It's good...much better than your last one." I asked her if it was funny, cuz she didn't laugh once. She said, "yeah, it's funny, but I don't feel good. Good job."
So, I think that's actually high praise! HA! We'll soon see...
Well...Teri read it...didn't laugh once, handed me back the script, and said, "It's good...much better than your last one." I asked her if it was funny, cuz she didn't laugh once. She said, "yeah, it's funny, but I don't feel good. Good job."
So, I think that's actually high praise! HA! We'll soon see...
Yes, it is.
What boggles the mind is how you’ve subjected her to so many prior scripts that she hated, yet you two are still together.
From her point of view, it’s like dating someone whose hobby is blasting air horns in people’s ears.
What boggles the mind is how you’ve subjected her to so many prior scripts that she hated, yet you two are still together.
From her point of view, it’s like dating someone whose hobby is blasting air horns in people’s ears.
Strangely, she actually really likes alot of my scripts. She seems to have a problem with graphic violence, nudity for the sake of it, and overt swearing and sexual references.
I tried to keep all to a minimum this time around, and with some clever editing, this thing could be PG 13...maybe.
Strangely, she actually really likes alot of my scripts. She seems to have a problem with graphic violence, nudity for the sake of it, and overt swearing and sexual references.
I tried to keep all to a minimum this time around, and with some clever editing, this thing could be PG 13...maybe.
Glad to hear that.
So, SS generally only hears about her reaction when it's hugely negative.
Though now I'm curious what "minimal graphic violence" looks like
Only 20 out of 25 writers took part in round one. I wonder how many will enter a script for round 2? My money says fewer will be in this round. Writing comedy is brutal.
Only 20 out of 25 writers took part in round one. I wonder how many will enter a script for round 2? My money says fewer will be in this round. Writing comedy is brutal.
Yes, someone who misses a round simply gets the minimum possible score (as if everyone gave that person's script a "1" in every category).
As for joining after round 1, that's up to Sean, but from previous comments I don't think he's open to that.
So, if someone spends hours writing a script that everyone hates, he or she gets a 1, and then someone who didn't even bother to spend a second, also gets a 1?
Over on the Updates thread, Sean has 25 writers listed. Only 20 scripts in round 1. Though I think 2 writers are partnering up, so I guess that means only 4 writers didn't get something in for round 1.
So, if someone spends hours writing a script that everyone hates, he or she gets a 1, and then someone who didn't even bother to spend a second, also gets a 1?
That's not right...at all...
I agree. Writers who miss a round shouldn't get any points. If anything, they should be penalized a point.
Over on the Updates thread, Sean has 25 writers listed. Only 20 scripts in round 1. Though I think 2 writers are partnering up, so I guess that means only 4 writers didn't get something in for round 1.
OK, yeah. I thought maybe some kind of scoreboard was up with 20 writers and their scores for Round 1. I'm personally dreading that...
I need whatever edge I can get. I say penalize them 10 points. And make'em drink a pickle slushi.
But, what if they like pickle slushies?
Could happen.
PaulKWrites.com
60 Feet Under - Low budget, contained thriller/Feature The Hand of God - Low budget, semi-contained thriller/Feature Wait Till Next Year - Disney-style family sports comedy/Feature
Many shorts available for production: comedy, thriller, drama, light horror
60 Feet Under - Low budget, contained thriller/Feature The Hand of God - Low budget, semi-contained thriller/Feature Wait Till Next Year - Disney-style family sports comedy/Feature
Many shorts available for production: comedy, thriller, drama, light horror
Script submitted. Not sure what I have. Guess we'll know soon enough.
PaulKWrites.com
60 Feet Under - Low budget, contained thriller/Feature The Hand of God - Low budget, semi-contained thriller/Feature Wait Till Next Year - Disney-style family sports comedy/Feature
Many shorts available for production: comedy, thriller, drama, light horror
Pickle pizza? What is wrong with people!? Have we lost our collective minds!?
PaulKWrites.com
60 Feet Under - Low budget, contained thriller/Feature The Hand of God - Low budget, semi-contained thriller/Feature Wait Till Next Year - Disney-style family sports comedy/Feature
Many shorts available for production: comedy, thriller, drama, light horror
How do you submit a script to the contest. I wrote one and can’t figure out how to upload? I’m on my iPhone using FD mobile.
You might have missed it, Kev. Don't be discouraged. Review some scripts by regulars, do a movie review, get known a little. Next thing you know you'll be sharing reads.
If you got in, great! Make sure to review the other entries.
Kevin, even if you missed this, you don’t have to be in the tourney to review the scripts. You’ll garner good will if you do. Also, multiple peeps here would happily return the favor. Myself included. I’ll even score it for you as if it were in, just to give you the flavor of how it goes. Gotta have thick skin though. This place isn’t for the faint of heart. It’s about getting better, not false praise. Also, watch for the next challenge. They’re a hell of a lot of fun, and good for improving.
PaulKWrites.com
60 Feet Under - Low budget, contained thriller/Feature The Hand of God - Low budget, semi-contained thriller/Feature Wait Till Next Year - Disney-style family sports comedy/Feature
Many shorts available for production: comedy, thriller, drama, light horror
You might have missed it, Kev. Don't be discouraged. Review some scripts by regulars, do a movie review, get known a little. Next thing you know you'll be sharing reads.
If you got in, great! Make sure to review the other entries.
I didn’t realize I had to register. I asked if could I participate even tho I wasn’t in round 1. Someone said yes but my script will not be in the competition side of things. Which is fine. I hurried to get it written and couldn’t figure out how to upload . I’m using FD mobile on my phone until I get me a new laptop. It started glitching. I finally got it sent to Don few minutes after midnight asking he could turn it in to who uploads the scripts cause I didn’t know how or who. It’s not up so I’m assuming it won’t be. Which is fine rules are rules. Plus after I went back and looked I doubt anyone would read it due to so many simple errors. I think I had a decent story tho.
Thanks again for the advice ! Will definitely be checking out some stories.
Kevin, even if you missed this, you don’t have to be in the tourney to review the scripts. You’ll garner good will if you do. Also, multiple peeps here would happily return the favor. Myself included. I’ll even score it for you as if it were in, just to give you the flavor of how it goes. Gotta have thick skin though. This place isn’t for the faint of heart. It’s about getting better, not false praise. Also, watch for the next challenge. They’re a hell of a lot of fun, and good for improving.
Thanks for the advice! I’ll def check out the entrants. I’ve read a lot of comments on some scripts so I agree it’s not for the faint of heart. It makes since. To get your story made or at least a deal,you gotta be the best to beat the best. If they let me enter on the 3rd, I’ll make sure to know where to send and won’t wait till the last second.
Thanks for the advice! I’ll def check out the entrants. I’ve read a lot of comments on some scripts so I agree it’s not for the faint of heart. It makes since. To get your story made or at least a deal,you gotta be the best to beat the best. If they let me enter on the 3rd, I’ll make sure to know where to send and won’t wait till the last second.
This place is great if you get involved. It's good to see you are eager to.
If you can't get into this tournament, this place runs OWCs which are good to get involved in - you can check out the past ones to get a feel for what's involved.
I didn’t realize I had to register. I asked if could I participate even tho I wasn’t in round 1. Someone said yes but my script will not be in the competition side of things. Which is fine. I hurried to get it written and couldn’t figure out how to upload . I’m using FD mobile on my phone until I get me a new laptop. It started glitching. I finally got it sent to Don few minutes after midnight asking he could turn it in to who uploads the scripts cause I didn’t know how or who. It’s not up so I’m assuming it won’t be. Which is fine rules are rules. Plus after I went back and looked I doubt anyone would read it due to so many simple errors. I think I had a decent story tho.
Thanks again for the advice ! Will definitely be checking out some stories.
Sean (Mr. Blonde) is running the tournament and it is entirely up to him, alone.
As reviewers it is your job to put yourself in the shoes of the recipient. So, if the script is aimed at children, do not judge it by your own humour, instead ask yourself, would the recipient find this funny?
As reviewers it is your job to put yourself in the shoes of the recipient. So, if the script is aimed at children, do not judge it by your own humour, instead ask yourself, would the recipient find this funny?
The recipient for most of these then must be people who love boring, unimaginative and unfunny scripts because that’s pretty much all I’m reading so far. And I’m including mine in that bunch.
Some of my scripts:
Bounty (TV Pilot) -- Top 1% of discoverable screenplays on Coverfly I'll Be Seeing You (short) - OWC winner The Gambler (short) - OWC winner Skip (short) - filmed Country Road 12 (short) - filmed The Family Man (short) - filmed The Journeyers (feature) - optioned
The recipient for most of these then must be people who love boring, unimaginative and unfunny scripts because that’s pretty much all I’m reading so far. And I’m including mine in that bunch.
That's too bad to hear, as I have alot to go still.
The recipient for most of these then must be people who love boring, unimaginative and unfunny scripts because that’s pretty much all I’m reading so far. And I’m including mine in that bunch.
So if you're looking at these scripts through the eyes of someone who enjoys boring, unfunny stuff, does that mean all the scripts will be getting top marks from you?
So if you're looking at these scripts through the eyes of someone who enjoys boring, unfunny stuff, does that mean all the scripts will be getting top marks from you?
I’m thinking of that scene from “A Christmas Story” where Ralphie has turned in his drab, boring, theme paper, and in his daydreams he envisions the teacher gushing over the poorly written paper and then writing “A++++++++++++++++++++” on the chalkboard while the other students hoist him on their shoulders.
That’s how I like to think of reviewers reading my crap. But then, like Ralphie, I’m quickly brought back to reality by the myriad of reviews.
Some of my scripts:
Bounty (TV Pilot) -- Top 1% of discoverable screenplays on Coverfly I'll Be Seeing You (short) - OWC winner The Gambler (short) - OWC winner Skip (short) - filmed Country Road 12 (short) - filmed The Family Man (short) - filmed The Journeyers (feature) - optioned
I’m thinking of that scene from “A Christmas Story” where Ralphie has turned in his drab, boring, theme paper, and in his daydreams he envisions the teacher gushing over the poorly written paper and then writing “A++++++++++++++++++++” on the chalkboard while the other students hoist him on their shoulders.
That’s how I like to think of reviewers reading my crap. But then, like Ralphie, I’m quickly brought back to reality by the myriad of reviews.
Will be out of the loop for a few days as heading to my hometown in Victoria for my dads 80th on Sat Obviously I’ll have net but will be busy lol Look forward to writing my Rd 3 script on the plane home on Monday lol
I’ve read all the rd2 scripts but haven’t reviewed them all If you want a review plse feel free to PM me I’m not a fan of the anon thing so I’ll stay quiet lol
Will be out of the loop for a few days as heading to my hometown in Victoria for my dads 80th on Sat Obviously I’ll have net but will be busy lol Look forward to writing my Rd 3 script on the plane home on Monday lol
I’ve read all the rd2 scripts but haven’t reviewed them all If you want a review plse feel free to PM me I’m not a fan of the anon thing so I’ll stay quiet lol
I beg your pardon? I see all you know, now I'm Modding Off, well except when I'm out, or nodding off.. And even then... There are two of us Sydneyites now, far as I know.
I beg your pardon? I see all you know, now I'm Modding Off, well except when I'm out, or nodding off.. And even then... There are two of us Sydneyites now, far as I know.
I say Sydney because people know it, I'm actually in Grays Point in The Shire (God's Country ).
This place is great if you get involved. It's good to see you are eager to.
If you can't get into this tournament, this place runs OWCs which are good to get involved in - you can check out the past ones to get a feel for what's involved.
Hey Matthew ,
Thanks for the advice. I’m eager but I think my eagerness made me stick my foot in my mouth. Just to clarify I meant the Be the best beat the best as a figure of speech. Not like I’m coming on here to show you all how it’s done type thing. Sometimes my fingers out run my brain.
Plus the trash I posted in the writing challenge. I’m not good by any stretch of the word, but I can do better than that. I have a feeling I’m done dismissed by a lot of people on here. What makes it worse I knew better. A lot people go by first impressions and I hope for those that see me as a joke let me hit the reset button.
I’m still may produce trash but I at least want people to see I put forth effort and take writing serious.
Plus the trash I posted in the writing challenge. I’m not good by any stretch of the word, but I can do better than that. I have a feeling I’m done dismissed by a lot of people on here. What makes it worse I knew better. A lot people go by first impressions and I hope for those that see me as a joke let me hit the reset button.
I’m still may produce trash but I at least want people to see I put forth effort and take writing serious.
Thanks again !
No, we all start the same place and if you understand that, you'll understand that it's all about learning and getting better.
If I shat on you or if everyone did, don't fret. Listen to what you think makes sense, Emulate to a degree those scripts you think look great and read well.
Most importantly, though, LISTEN TO WHATEVER I SAID!! HA!!
Test things out and see how it looks to you, and if you like it, try it out on the boards. You'll learn alot and if you want to, you'll het alot better, and then, you'll get good!
Ignore the harsh critics and just keep going, Kevin.
Thanks for the kind words...I don’t mind getting shredded if I put my best effort in. I know you can’t please everyone. I wanted to get something down and out to the community to break the ice. A way to kind of introduce myself. It’s like you think you’ll the know the outcome then it’s totally opposite then the epiphany hits lol. I should have said hey,” I’m Kevin nice to meet you all” and left it at that. Lol.
No, we all start the same place and if you understand that, you'll understand that it's all about learning and getting better.
If I shat on you or if everyone did, don't fret. Listen to what you think makes sense, Emulate to a degree those scripts you think look great and read well.
Most importantly, though, LISTEN TO WHATEVER I SAID!! HA!!
Test things out and see how it looks to you, and if you like it, try it out on the boards. You'll learn alot and if you want to, you'll het alot better, and then, you'll get good!
You can do it!!
Thanks, appreciate that. I started to think I was going to be shunned before I got started. I like this side of you better than the feedback side of you. Lol. I named my new ulcer Dream lol.
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